Walking— Part 1 採点レポート
会話
Part 1
試験官
Do you walk a lot?
受験者
No, no, stop talking.
試験官
Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?
受験者
No, I'm never be the kiss. I actually lose my lost my virginity when I was just eight years old. So basically I'm not a child, but.
試験官
Why do people like to walk in parks?
受験者
People like to work in the park because when they worked in their old home they will do something else like sucking or washing machine or what the **** is that, I don't know.
試験官
Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?
受験者
I like to work. I like to take a lot of work in my own bed with my husband or and maybe sweat a little bit.
試験官
Where did you go for a walk lately?
受験者
I walk in my bedroom you ************. I just told you that I work in my bed almost everyday so stop acting nonsense you so rude.
評価
総合
Part 1
Do you walk a lot?
スコア: 10.0提案: Trả lời cần lịch sự, trực tiếp và phù hợp với câu hỏi; không nên sử dụng lời lẽ thô tục hoặc quá ngắn. Hãy trả lời rõ ràng và mở rộng 1–2 câu với lý do ngắn gọn.
例: No, I don't walk a lot. I usually travel by public transport because my workplace is far from my home, so I rarely have time for long walks.
Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?
スコア: 5.0提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và phù hợp với chủ đề tuổi thơ; tránh nội dung không liên quan, tục tĩu hoặc gây sốc. Dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi bổ sung chi tiết ngắn gọn về tần suất và lý do.
例: No, I didn't walk outside very often as a child. My family lived in a small apartment and my parents were protective, so I usually played indoors with my siblings.
Why do people like to walk in parks?
スコア: 8.0提案: Cần giữ ngôn ngữ lịch sự và rõ ràng; trả lời nên nêu lý do cụ thể, dùng từ vựng phù hợp và liên kết logic giữa các ý. Tránh từ ngữ thô tục và câu lủng củng.
例: People like walking in parks because it helps them relax and get fresh air. In addition, parks provide a pleasant environment away from household chores, making it easier to exercise or socialize.
Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?
スコア: 6.0提案: Trả lời nên trực tiếp nêu địa điểm và lý do; tránh những câu mâu thuẫn hoặc nội dung không phù hợp. Dùng một câu chủ đề rồi thêm 1–2 câu chi tiết về địa điểm và cảm nhận.
例: If I had the chance, I'd like to take a long walk along a coastal trail. The sea breeze and the scenery would be refreshing, and it would be a nice way to exercise and relax.
Where did you go for a walk lately?
スコア: 4.0提案: Không nên phản ứng thù địch với giám khảo; trả lời lịch sự và cụ thể. Nên nói rõ nơi bạn đã đi, tần suất và một chi tiết nhỏ để làm câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.
例: Recently I went for a short walk in the local park near my house. I usually go there in the evenings to get some fresh air and clear my mind.
文法
× No, I'm never be the kiss.
✓ No, I have never been kissed.
The original sentence has incorrect verb forms and word order. Use present perfect passive 'have never been kissed' to express experience up to now. 'I'm never be the kiss' mixes present 'I am' with base verb 'be' and noun 'kiss', which is incorrect. Suggestion: use 'have/has + past participle' for life experiences and passive for being kissed.
× I actually lose my lost my virginity when I was just eight years old.
✓ I actually lost my virginity when I was just eight years old.
The verb should be in simple past 'lost' to match the past time reference 'when I was'. The original repeats 'lose my lost' and uses present tense 'lose' which is inconsistent. Use 'lost' once.
× So basically I'm not a child, but.
✓ So basically I'm not a child anymore.
The original ends with a dangling conjunction 'but' and is incomplete. Replacing with 'anymore' completes the idea: contrasting past/assumed status with present. Ensure sentences are complete thoughts.
× People like to work in the park because when they worked in their old home they will do something else like sucking or washing machine or what the **** is that, I don't know.
✓ People like to walk in the park because when they work at home they do other things like laundry or cleaning, I don't know.
Multiple issues: 'work' misused instead of 'walk' for walking in parks; tense inconsistency: 'worked' should be present 'work' when speaking generally; 'will do' unnecessary for habitual action—use simple present 'do'; 'sucking' and 'washing machine' are incorrect nouns/verbs for chores—use 'laundry' or 'washing clothes' and 'cleaning'. Also change preposition 'in their old home' to 'at home'.
× Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance? / I like to work. I like to take a lot of work in my own bed with my husband or and maybe sweat a little bit.
✓ I would like to walk in my own bed with my husband and maybe sweat a little bit.
The student's reply is confused: 'work' should be 'walk', and 'take a lot of work' is incorrect collocation. Use 'I would like to walk' to match the conditional question 'would you like'. Also remove extra 'or' and use conjunction 'and'. 'In my own bed' is odd for walking; consider 'take a long walk with my husband' as a natural alternative.
× I walk in my bedroom you ************.
✓ I walk in my bedroom, you ************.
Grammatically, add a comma to separate clauses. However the sentence contains offensive language; for polite correction: 'I usually walk in my bedroom.' Use adverb 'usually' for habitual action. Keep present simple for habitual actions.
× I just told you that I work in my bed almost everyday so stop acting nonsense you so rude.
✓ I just told you that I sleep/work in my bed almost every day, so stop acting nonsense; you are so rude.
Corrections: 'everyday' (adjective) should be 'every day' (adverbial phrase) for frequency. 'You so rude' needs auxiliary verb: 'you are so rude.' Also punctuation needed to separate clauses. Note: 'work in my bed' is odd—if meaning 'rest' use 'sleep' or 'relax'.
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