Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接，但有语法和表达不够自然的问题（如 "as I'm not good at..." 用法可更自然）。句子较长且信息可更精简且更具体。建议使用更自然的连接词，控制在最多五句内，并补充一个简短的原因或频率细节。举例：说明每天走多少、走什么类型的路或为什麽喜欢走路。

例: Yes, I walk a lot. I don’t drive and I’m not confident riding a bike, so I usually walk to nearby shops and my office. Walking also helps me relax and saves money, so I do it almost every day.

提案: 回答有较多语法错误和不自然表达（如时态、单复数、词序）。内容重复且逻辑不够清晰。建议先用主题句直接回答，然后用一两句具体细节支持（例如常去哪儿、谁陪同、做了什么活动）。使用正确时态和单复数形式并使用连接词。

例: Yes, I often went for walks as a child. I usually walked to the nearby fields or the park with my friends, where we played games and enjoyed the scenery. Those walks were fun and gave me a chance to meet people from my neighborhood.

提案: 回答表达基本合理但有语法和用词错误（如 "To myself" 和将 "walk" 写成 "work"）。建议先给出简洁理由，然后用具体例子或比较支持（如空气、安静、设施、适合带孩子或运动）。注意词汇准确性和连贯连接词。

例: I think people like walking in parks because the air is cleaner and the scenery is pleasant. Parks also have paths and benches that make walking comfortable, and many people find it a peaceful place to exercise or unwind after work.

提案: 回答内容明确，但有重复和词汇错误（如把 "walking" 写成 "working"，以及表达有些累赘）。建议一句主题句加一两句具体细节（例如描述河边景色、想花多长时间、与谁同行或期望的感受）。保持用词准确，注意时态和主语代词。

例: I would love to take a long walk along the Li River in Guilin because the scenery is spectacular and the air is very fresh. I would probably spend a whole afternoon walking slowly, taking photos and stopping at tea houses to rest.

提案: 回答信息充足但存在语法错误（如时态和动词形式 "have" 应为 "has"），句子稍长且重复。建议先直接回答，然后用一两句具体细节说明地点特点和感受，控制句子长度并注意主谓一致。

例: I went for a walk at the park near my home recently. It’s only a ten-minute walk away, and the park is quite spacious with lots of flowers and shady trees, which makes it a great place to relax after work.

× Yes, as I'm not good at riding a bicycle or even driving a car, so I usually walk to the places that I want to go.

✓ Yes, because I'm not good at riding a bicycle or even driving a car, I usually walk to the places I want to go.

问题类型ID:6（现在时问题）。原句中使用了“as... so...”造成结构重复且语气不自然，且从句中使用进行时“I'm not good at”可保留，但主句不需要“so”。建议将“as”替换为“because”或删去“so”，并简化“to the places that I want to go”为更自然的“to the places I want to go”。

× Yes, I think go outside for a walk, it's a very interesting things and join the work. I can see a lot of beautiful sceneries and sometimes I can also meet my friends.

✓ Yes. I used to go outside for walks; they were very interesting and fun. I could see a lot of beautiful scenery, and sometimes I met my friends.

问题类型ID:5（过去时问题）。该句在描述童年经历，应使用过去时。原句缺少主语和正确动词形式（“I think go outside”应为“I used to go outside”或“I went outside”），“things”应为不可数或改为“activities/fun”，“sceneries”用法错误应为“scenery”，并且动词时态需一致。建议使用过去时态并修正名词单复数。

× To myself, I think that is because we can see a lot of beautiful scenery in the park and also walking can improve our health. So many people like to work in parks.

✓ Personally, I think it is because we can see a lot of beautiful scenery in the park, and walking can also improve our health. So many people like to walk in parks.

问题类型ID:12（代词/用词不当）。原句“To myself”不自然，应为“Personally”。另外最后一句使用了“work in parks”错误地把“walk”写成“work”。需把“also walking can improve our health”调整为更自然的顺序，“walk in parks”替代“work in parks”。

× I would like to take a long walk along the river in Guilin because the air here is very fresh and also the scenery is very nice. I think working here can make myself feel relaxed.

✓ I would like to take a long walk along the river in Guilin because the air there is very fresh and the scenery is very nice. I think walking there would make me feel relaxed.

问题类型ID:6（现在时问题）。第一句时空指代应为“there”而非“here”。第二句“working here”是错误用词，应为“walking there”，并且“make myself feel relaxed”不地道，改为“make me feel relaxed”。同时保持虚拟语气与前句一致，使用“would”。

× Last time I went out for a walk was at the park near my home because it only took me about 10 minutes to go here. So I think it is very convenient and also the park is very big and have a lot of flowers which can help me relax.

✓ The last time I went for a walk was at the park near my home because it only took me about ten minutes to get there. So I think it is very convenient. The park is also very big and has a lot of flowers which help me relax.

问题类型ID:5（过去时问题）。句子中时态需要一致；“went out for a walk was at the park”应为“The last time I went for a walk was at the park...”。“go here”与过去时不符，应为“get there”或“to get there”。另外“have a lot of flowers”主谓不一致，应为“has a lot of flowers”，并把“which can help me relax”调整为“which help me relax”。