Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğrudan ve anlaşılır ancak akıcılık ve dilbilgisi üzerinde çalışılmalı. Gereksiz duraklamalar (“uh”) azaltılmalı; cümleler daha doğal bağlaçlarla genişletilmeli. Örneğin, neden yürüyüşün sağlıklı hissettirdiğini kısa bir örnekle veya sıklıkla ne kadar yürüdüğünüzle destekleyin. Ayrıca 'feel more healthy' yerine 'feel healthier' kullanın.

例: Yes, I walk often around my neighborhood. I usually walk for about 30 minutes every morning because it boosts my energy and helps me stay fit.

提案: Cevap tutarsız zaman kullanımı ve dilbilgisi hataları içeriyor; geçmişten bahsederken geçmiş zaman kullanılmalı. Ayrıca ifadeler netleştirilmeli ("network" yerine muhtemelen "neighborhood"). Kısa gerekçe verin ve duyguyu daha doğal anlatın. Duraksamalar azaltılmalı.

例: No, I didn't go out for walks much when I was a child because my neighborhood wasn't very safe, so my parents preferred that I stayed at home.

提案: Cevap anlaşılması zor ve birçok dolgu kelime içeriyor. 'Combated' ve 'SEO key' yanlış kullanılmış; yerine 'I think' veya 'I believe' ve 'oxygen' gibi doğru kelimeler kullanılmalı. Kısa nedenler sunun (örneğin temiz hava, rahatlama, manzara) ve bağlaçlarla mantık kurun.

例: I think people like walking in parks because there are many trees that provide fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere, which helps them relax.

提案: Cümle yapısı ve kelime sıralaması düzeltilmeli; gereksiz tekrarlar ve duraklamalar kaldırılmalı. 'Adore' ile 'my dream country' ifadeleri birleştirilmeli ve nedenini ekleyin (örneğin manzara, doğa). Böylece cevap hem akıcı hem özgün olur.

例: I would love to take a long walk in Switzerland because the scenery and clean mountain air look beautiful; I'd enjoy walking along alpine trails one day.

提案: Cevap kısa ve biraz dağınık; 'lately' sorusuna geçmiş zaman ve spesifik bir zaman/yerle cevap verin. Sınav çalıştığınızı belirtin ama yine de en son ne zaman ve nereye yürüdüğünüzü kısaça söyleyin. Bağlaçlarla mantığı güçlendirin.

例: I haven't been walking much lately because I'm studying for an exam, but last weekend I went for a short walk in a nearby park before going to the gym.

× Yes, I often walk around my home. Uh, it's very important for me because when I'm walking I feel more healthy.

✓ Yes, I often walk around my home. It's very important to me because when I walk I feel healthier.

The sentence mixes progressive and simple present incorrectly for habitual actions. Use simple present 'I walk' for habits and comparative adjective 'healthier' instead of 'more healthy'. Also use 'important to me' rather than 'for me'. Suggestions: use simple present for routines and correct comparative adjective forms.

× No, I don't uh, I feel sad this topic or situation because uh, my network is not safe so my family don't want it.

✓ No, I didn't. I feel sad about this topic because our neighborhood is not safe so my family didn't want me to go outside.

The response mixes present and past incorrectly. The question asks about childhood (past), so use past tense 'didn't' and 'didn't want'. 'Feel sad about' is correct collocation. 'Network' is incorrect word for neighborhood. Use 'neighborhood' or 'area'. Also use 'didn't want me to go outside' to clarify.

× Uh, personally I'm combated that, uh, parks have a lot of, a lot of trees, uh, and trees have a lot of, uh, SEO key. Yeah.

✓ Personally I believe that parks have a lot of trees, and trees produce a lot of oxygen.

'I'm combated that' is incorrect; use 'I believe that' or 'I think that'. 'SEO key' is incorrect—likely intended 'oxygen'. Also remove filler hesitations. Use correct verb 'produce' for trees producing oxygen.

× I'm adore Switzerland's my dream Co uh, country city in Switzerland. I I hope I walk one day.

✓ I adore Switzerland; it is my dream country. I hope I can walk there one day.

'I'm adore' is ungrammatical—use 'I adore'. Possessive 'Switzerland's my dream' should be 'it is my dream country'. 'I hope I walk one day' is incorrect for future wish—use 'I hope I can walk there one day' or 'I hope to walk there one day'.

× GM Because I am studying an exam, I don't have a lot of time. However, I'm going to gym.

✓ Because I am studying for an exam, I don't have a lot of time. However, I go to the gym.

Use 'studying for an exam' (correct preposition). 'I'm going to gym' needs article and correct tense: use 'I go to the gym' for regular activity or 'I'm going to the gym' if currently going. Here present simple fits 'I don't have a lot of time, however I go to the gym.'