Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需更自然、简洁并注意语法重复问题。建议用一到两句主题句后用一两句具体细节支持，避免重复（如“relaxing, relaxed”）。注意时态和词形（I feel relaxed）。可加入连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I walk a lot. I often go to the park in my free time because I enjoy the fresh air and peaceful atmosphere, and I usually listen to music while walking.

提案: 时态和词序需要校正，表达更自然要用过去时并注意连贯。避免词汇错误（peers → peers/children/playmates），并用连接词解释原因。尽量不超过三句。

例: Yes, I went outside a lot when I was a child because we had a big yard and many other children lived nearby, so I often played with them in the afternoons.

提案: 句子有语法和词汇错误，表达不清。先给出简洁主题句，再用具体理由支撑，注意冠词、动词形式和词汇选择（park, provide, privacy, boundaries）。使用连接词如 First/Second/Also。

例: I think the main reason is to enjoy the fresh air. Parks have many trees that create a peaceful atmosphere, and people can also relax there and have some privacy away from busy streets.

提案: 回答较好，但有小错误（the mountain → the mountains; maybe even mountain in Guangzhou → maybe in the mountains near Guangzhou）。可以用更自然的表达并压缩句子，加入连接词使逻辑更清楚。

例: I'd like to take a long walk in the mountains near Guangzhou because the trails are gentle, which makes long walks easier, and I could enjoy the fresh air and peaceful scenery.

提案: 时态混用问题（present perfect/simple past/continuous），表达冗长。建议先直接回答（I haven't been able to go for a walk recently），然后简要说明原因并给出计划。避免拼写错误（IELTS）并用连接词。

例: I haven't had a chance to go for a walk recently because I've been revising at home for the IELTS exam all month, but I plan to visit the nearby park to relax after the test.

× I often go for a walk in the park in my free time because I enjoy the fresh air and I feel relaxing, relaxed and I usually listen to music while I walk.

✓ I often go for a walk in the park in my free time because I enjoy the fresh air and I feel relaxed, and I usually listen to music while I walk.

句中把形容词 relaxed 与动词 feel 搭配时应使用形容词（felt/relaxed），不能用现在分词 relaxing 表示感觉。正确说法是 “I feel relaxed”。此外并列短语之间需要连词 and 连接。建议：动词 feel 后接形容词描述状态，注意并列结构的连词使用。

× Yes, I usually go outside in my childhood because I live in a big yard when I was young and there are so many peers to play with, so I play with them in the afternoon every day.

✓ Yes, I usually went outside in my childhood because I lived in a big yard when I was young and there were so many peers to play with, so I played with them in the afternoon every day.

句子描述过去的习惯和背景，时态应全部用过去时（past tense）。原句混用了现在时（usually go, live, are, play），与时间状语 in my childhood / when I was young 不一致。建议将动词改为过去式以保持时态一致。

× I think the big is the reason is to enjoy fresh air.

✓ I think the biggest reason is to enjoy fresh air.

原句中使用了错误的词序和词形（the big is the reason）。应使用形容词的最高级结构 the biggest reason 表示“最大/主要原因”。同时不是介词问题实际是词形与词序错误，但按可选列表属于形容词使用错误，已按最接近类别改正。建议：用 the + 形容词最高级 + noun 表示“最主要的原因”。

× There are so many trees provide oxygen and create a peaceful atmosphere.

✓ There are so many trees that provide oxygen and create a peaceful atmosphere.

原句缺少连接词或从属连词，导致定语从句不完整。应在 trees 与动词 provide 之间加上关系代词 that（或 which）引导定语从句：trees that provide...。建议：定语从句中主语和动词之间要有关系词连接，或改成分句结构。

× Secondly, people go to part to enjoy their private time without the border of.

✓ Secondly, people go to parks to enjoy their private time without borders.

原句存在拼写错误（part→park）、不完整短语（without the border of）和单复数搭配问题。改为 go to parks 和 without borders 表达更自然的意思；也可说 without any boundaries。建议：注意单词拼写和常见短语搭配，保证短语完整。

× I'd like to take a long walk in the mountain, maybe even mountain in Guangzhou.

✓ I'd like to take a long walk in the mountains, maybe even the mountains in Guangzhou.

名词 mountain 在此表示一片山脉或多座山应使用复数 mountains。另外若特指广州的那些山，前面应加定冠词 the。建议：注意可数名词单复数和特指时使用定冠词。

× The trails there are not too steep, so it's easy for a long walk and I can enjoy the fresh air and peaceful scenery.

✓ The trails there are not too steep, so it's easy to take a long walk and I can enjoy the fresh air and peaceful scenery.

短语 easy 后常接不定式 to do 而不是介词短语 for a long walk（虽然不完全错误，但不地道）。建议：使用易于搭配的结构 easy to + 动词原形，表达更自然。

× Oh, I didn't have a chance to go for a walk lately because I'm preparing my ielt and exam as I spend the whole month to revise at home and I think I really need to take a walk in the nearby park after the exam.

✓ Oh, I haven't had a chance to go for a walk lately because I'm preparing for my IELTS exam; I have spent the whole month revising at home and I think I really need to take a walk in the nearby park after the exam.

句中时态混用与词形错误：lately 与现在完成时搭配更自然（haven't had）；preparing 后面需接介词 for 和考试名称；ielts 拼写与大写错误；表达过去持续动作应使用现在完成进行或现在完成（have spent/been spending），此处用 have spent + -ing 或 have been preparing 都可。建议：注意现在完成时与时间副词的搭配、固定搭配 preparing for，以及单词拼写和大小写。