Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更自然且语法更准确。注意时态和形容词/分词形式（例如“helps me relax”而不是“helps me relaxed”），并避免重复表达。建议用一到两句主题句，再用一到两句具体细节支持，最多五句。

例: Yes, I walk quite a lot, especially when I need to clear my mind. It helps me relax and keeps me fit, because regular walks improve my mood and stamina.

提案: 回答需要更有条理并注意语法和用词（例如“go for a walk after meals”而不是“go for work after meal”）。减少口头填充词“you know”，并使用连词使表述更连贯。

例: Yes, I often went for walks with my family when I was a child. In China it’s common to walk together after meals, and we usually strolled around the neighborhood and chatted, which was a pleasant family time.

提案: 回答需要更简洁并修正语法错误（例如“parks are places”以及删除“should can”）。使用连接词（because, so, therefore）并给出具体原因或例子。控制在三到四句内。

例: People like walking in parks because parks are peaceful and offer a break from noisy city life. For example, green space, fresh air and quiet paths help reduce stress after a busy workday.

提案: 表达总体不错，但需注意动词形式（“ease”应为“eases”以配单数主语）和句子节奏。可将长句拆成主题句+支持句，使用更具体细节增强画面感。

例: I would love to take a long walk by the seaside because the sound of waves and salty air really ease my mind. I enjoy walking at my own pace on the beach, watching the horizon and feeling relaxed.

提案: 回答需更正词语搭配（例如“went for a walk”不是“went for work”），并使用过去时一致性。可以提供更具体时间或描写以丰富内容。

例: Lately I went for a walk in my neighborhood early one morning. I saw elderly people exercising and small shops opening slowly, which felt comforting and peaceful.

× Yes, I do enjoy walking when I need to clear my mind, it really helps me relaxed and I think walking is also a very good exercise to strengthen our body.

✓ Yes, I do enjoy walking when I need to clear my mind. It really helps me relax, and I think walking is also a very good exercise to strengthen our bodies.

句中存在动词形式问题：“helps me relaxed”是不正确的，should be “helps me relax” 使用动词不带-ed; 另外句子过长需要分成两句；“strengthen our body”应为复数“bodies”或改为“my body”，与主语一致。建议：注意动词原形与过去分词的区分，保持主语与名词复数一致。

× Yes, quite often, you know, in China is quite common that we go for work after meal with our family. So when I was a child I usually took a walk with my family after meal around the neighborhood and chat and it was a really good time.

✓ Yes, quite often. You know, in China it is quite common for us to go for a walk with our family after a meal. So when I was a child I usually took a walk with my family around the neighborhood and chatted; it was a really good time.

原句中存在介词和短语用法错误：应使用“in China it is…”来引导；“go for work after meal”意思不明，应为“go for a walk after a meal”；“after meal”要用不定冠词“a meal”；“and chat”时态需与过去一致用“chatted”。建议：注意固定搭配“go for a walk”“after a meal”，并保持时态一致。

× I think that is because parks are some place that make you feel peaceful and nowadays people live in the city just feel stressed in their workplace, so walking in the park should can really ease their mind and help them relax.

✓ I think that is because parks are places that make you feel peaceful, and nowadays people who live in the city often feel stressed at their workplaces, so walking in the park can really ease their minds and help them relax.

原句存在量词/数量表达错误：“parks are some place”应为复数“places”；“people live in the city just feel”缺少关系词，应为“people who live in the city often feel”；“should can”是两个情态动词叠用，应选一个，这里用“can”；“their mind”应与复数people对应为“their minds”。建议：注意可数名词单复数形式、一致性和情态动词只能使用一个。

× I would love to take a long walk by the seaside if I had a chance because the seaside really ease my mind and I love the natural atmosphere there and I can just walk at my own pace and don't need to be rushed.

✓ I would love to take a long walk by the seaside if I had the chance because the seaside really eases my mind. I love the natural atmosphere there, and I can just walk at my own pace and not be rushed.

原句有动词单复数与情态用法问题：“the seaside really ease my mind”中“seaside”作为主语需用第三人称单数“eases”；“don't need to be rushed”改为不定式被动更自然“not be rushed”。建议：注意第三人称单数动词形式和被动表达。

× I went for work in my neighborhood early in the morning lately and seeing some older people take a walk and the shops slowly opening was really comforting.

✓ I went for a walk in my neighborhood early one morning recently, and seeing some older people taking a walk and the shops slowly opening was really comforting.

原句时态与短语使用不当：“went for work”应为“went for a walk”；“lately”通常与现在完成时连用，改为“recently”或用现在完成时；“seeing ... take a walk”中应使用动名词“taking”来表示正在进行的动作，“shops slowly opening”保持-ing形式一致。建议：区分“lately”和“recently”的用法，注意动名词在并列结构中的一致性。