Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答内容表达基本清楚，但存在多处语法和词汇错误（如“work a lot”误用，应为“walk”），句子冗长且结构混乱，缺少连贯的衔接词。应使用主题句直接回答，用1-2个补充句具体说明频率、原因和感受，注意动词用法和名词单复数；用较恰当的词汇（例如：enjoy, scenery, walk）。

例: Yes, I walk quite often. My campus is small overall, but my dormitory is quite far from the library, so I walk there every day. I enjoy those walks because I can appreciate the changing scenery around campus and it gives me a chance to clear my mind.

提案: 回答直截了当但有语法时态和词汇错误（family/families, enjoy→enjoyed, regretted→regret, joyful→joy），表达不够简洁。应先给出简短直接的回答，再用一两句说明原因和现在的看法，注意时态一致和名词单复数，以及固定搭配（regret not doing sth）。

例: No, I didn't. My family didn't spend much time on outdoor activities when I was a child. I regret that now because I realise how beneficial walks are for health and I wish I had spent more time outside then.

提案: 回答提供了两个理由但表达混乱且有不恰当词汇（a part→a park, full facility→good facilities, get a lot of pressure→relieve stress）。衔接词使用可改进（firstly, secondly, moreover）。应用简洁明确的句子并给出具体细节或例子。

例: I think parks are popular because they offer pleasant surroundings and good facilities for walking, like paths and benches. Secondly, walking in parks helps people relax and reduce stress because of the fresh air and greenery.

提案: 回答表达了愿望但有许多词汇和语法问题（destinies→destinations, Taiwan islands→Taiwan, records the process they walking→describes someone walking around, is inspired me→inspired me, the other side→on the other hand）。应先直接陈述目的地，再说明具体原因并提供细节或感受，句子不宜过长。

例: I'd love to walk around Taiwan. I read a book about people who walked around the island and found it very inspiring. The landscapes there are very different from my hometown, so it would be a great chance to see new scenery and challenge myself.

提案: 问题问最近一次散步，但回答讲的是初中时的经历，未能直接对应时间点。句子有语法和词汇错误（At the first→At first, hard trouble→very difficult, it just so so and I can carry→it was okay and I could manage）。应直接回答最近的经历或说明为什么回答过去的经历，并用更准确简洁的语言描述过程和感受。

例: Recently I went for a long walk along the riverside near my university, which was about 8 kilometres. At first my classmates warned me it would be tiring, but I found the pace manageable and enjoyed the views along the way.

× Yes, I work a lot, even my university is not really big, but there is a long distance between my dormitory and the library, so I need to work a lot. And then I also very enjoy this process because when I work I can admire the difference sceneries in my school.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot. Even though my university is not really big, there is a long distance between my dormitory and the library, so I need to walk a lot. I also really enjoy this process because when I walk I can admire the different scenery around my school.

问题属于“现在时态问题”。原句中多处使用不恰当的动词（work 应为 walk），动词时态与主语搭配不自然。“very enjoy”搭配错误，应为“really enjoy”。“difference sceneries”是词汇与复数/形容词顺序问题，改为“different scenery”。建议：注意动词选择（work 与 walk 意义不同），现在习惯性动作用一般现在时，常用副词搭配为“really enjoy”，名词“scenery”通常不可数。

× No, not really, my families is not uh, enjoy the outside sports. But to be honest I'm a little regretted about it because now I'm grown up and I realized the joyful of outside world and I think I need to walk when I was child. That is good for my health.

✓ No, not really. My family didn't really enjoy outdoor sports. To be honest, I'm a little regretful about that because now I've grown up and realized the joy of the outside world, and I think I should have walked more when I was a child. That would have been good for my health.

问题主要是不正确的代词及相关结构使用。原句“my families is”应为“my family”并与动词过去时配合；“enjoy the outside sports”短语不自然，改为“enjoy outdoor sports”。“I'm a little regretted”错误使用形容词/过去分词，应为“I'm a little regretful”或“I regret that”。“realized the joyful of outside world”名词形式错误，应为“realized the joy of the outside world”。“I think I need to walk when I was child”时态和情态错误，表示对过去的遗憾应使用“should have + 过去分词”。建议：注意单复数（family 作集合名词）和代词，区分情态与时态表达遗憾用法（should have done/ would have been）。

× Well, I also like to do it. I think there are many reasons. The first one is a part is a suitable place for walking a park usually equipped with full facility and the second one is we can get a lot of pressure from The Walking in the park.

✓ Well, I also like to walk. I think there are many reasons. First, a park is a suitable place for walking; a park is usually equipped with full facilities, and secondly, we can relieve a lot of stress by walking in the park.

问题涉及冠词和句子结构错误。原句“a part is a suitable place”拼写和结构错误（part 应为 park），且重复结构混乱；“equipped with full facility”名词复数和搭配应为“full facilities”；“get a lot of pressure from The Walking in the park”语义和大小写错误，应为“relieve a lot of stress by walking in the park”。建议：注意拼写（park）、冠词与名词单复数一致，以及固定搭配（relieve stress, equipped with facilities, walking in the park 用小写）。

× There are many destinies I want to choose but the one I'm also looking forward is the Taiwan islands because I have read a book that records the process they walking around the island and is inspired me a lot and the the other side is it has the different landscape with my hometown.

✓ There are many destinations I want to choose, but the one I'm most looking forward to is the Taiwan islands because I read a book that recorded the process of their walking around the island and it inspired me a lot. On the other hand, it has a different landscape from my hometown.

问题涉及过去分词/动词形式和其他语法错误。“destinies”应为“destinations”。“the book that records the process they walking”中“records”时态与后面的“they walking”结构错误，改为过去式“recorded”并用“their walking”或更好为“their walking”前加介词“of”。“is inspired me a lot”被动与主动混用，应为“it inspired me a lot”。“the the other side”有重复词，且“different landscape with”搭配错误，改为“different landscape from”。建议：注意名词拼写、时态一致、动词形式（主动/被动）选择，以及介词搭配（different from）。

× I remember that when I was in junior high school, I walked to the Yellow River. The total length is 13 kilometers. At the first, my teachers and other students told me it was a hard trouble, but to be honest, I think it just so so and I can carry.

✓ I remember that when I was in junior high school, I walked to the Yellow River. The total distance was 13 kilometers. At first, my teachers and other students told me it would be hard, but to be honest, I thought it was just so-so and I could manage.

问题与过去时表达有关。原句“The total length is 13 kilometers”指过去事件应使用过去时“was”。“At the first”应为固定短语“At first”。“it was a hard trouble”表达不自然，改为“it would be hard”。“I think it just so so and I can carry”时态混用且动词搭配错误，应为过去观点“I thought it was just so-so and I could manage”。建议：描述过去事件要一致使用过去时，注意固定短语（at first）和合适的动词搭配（manage/carry on 不常用于携带体力）。