Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and correct errors, be concise, and avoid repetition. Give one clear topic sentence, correct timing (e.g. 20 minutes), use linking words for coherence, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Pronunciation and repetition of words (e.g. “helps helps”) should be avoided.

例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk to my university for about 20 minutes each way, and I also take a 20-minute walk most evenings to keep fit. Moreover, walking helps me reduce stress and feel more energized.

提案: Use correct grammar and clear phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct tense and word choice (e.g. “walks” or “go for walks”), and provide specific details with linking words. Avoid confusing phrases like “is my parents.”

例: Yes, I often went outside to go for walks when I was a child. I usually walked in the park near my parents’ house because fresh air helped me wake up and feel more energetic.

提案: Make a clear, grammatically correct general statement and support it with specific reasons. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and precise vocabulary (mood, stressed, recharge, mind). Keep sentences concise and coherent.

例: People like to walk in parks because it helps them relax and escape daily stress. For example, after a busy day of work many people go to parks to enjoy fresh air and calm surroundings, which helps recharge their minds.

提案: Remove repetition and correct word choice (e.g. “sound of the waves”, not “views”). Use one clear conditional sentence and then a brief reason. Keep within 2–3 sentences and use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’.

例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the beach because the sound of the waves and the fresh air help me relieve stress and clear my mind. I prefer quiet, natural places where I can relax and reflect.

提案: Answer is clear and relevant; make it slightly more specific with a short supporting detail or example. Use one linking phrase to add coherence. Keep it concise and natural.

例: Lately I have been walking to the park near my home and sometimes to my campus. I prefer these routes because they are convenient, and walking there gives me fresh air and a short break between classes.

× You walk a lot? Yes, I walk a lot.

✓ Do you walk a lot? Yes, I walk a lot.

The examiner's question should use auxiliary do for present simple questions. The student's reply is fine, but the initial question lacked 'Do'. Use 'Do' + subject + base verb for present simple questions (e.g., 'Do you walk a lot?').

× I usually walk to my university for about 2020 minutes each way and I also take another 20 minute walk and evening most day to keep fit and clear my mind.

✓ I usually walk to my university for about 20 minutes each way and I also take another 20-minute walk in the evening most days to keep fit and clear my mind.

'2020 minutes' is likely a typographical error; use '20 minutes'. Use hyphen with compound adjectives before a noun ('20-minute walk'). Use 'in the evening' rather than 'and evening' and 'most days' (plural) for frequency. These corrections fix number, hyphenation, preposition, and pluralization errors.

× Walking helps helps me reduce stress and feel more organized and energized.

✓ Walking helps me reduce stress and feel more organized and energized.

Duplicate word 'helps' is a typo. The correct structure is 'Walking helps me...' Ensure no repeated words and keep parallel verb forms ('reduce' and 'feel').

× Yes, I often went outside for walkers when I was child.

✓ Yes, I often went outside for walks when I was a child.

Use the noun 'walks' not 'walkers'. Include the article 'a' before 'child'. The past tense 'went' is correct; adjust noun and article for grammaticality.

× I usually walked in the park near my house is my parents because I was a very sleepy child and fresh air helps me feel more awake.

✓ I usually walked in the park near my parents' house because I was a very sleepy child and fresh air helped me feel more awake.

Use 'near my parents' house' to show possession (apostrophe s). Remove extraneous 'is'. Maintain past tense consistency: 'helped' (past) instead of 'helps'. Also add 'because' correctly connects clauses.

× To be honest that it depends on people mood and because many people that have a stress and a lot of tasks for to do and so they try to recharge the mine they.

✓ To be honest, it depends on people's moods, because many people have stress and a lot of tasks to do, so they try to recharge their minds.

Use comma after introductory phrase. 'People's moods' shows possession and plural. 'Have stress' is correct expression; remove extra 'that'. 'A lot of tasks to do' is correct order; 'recharge their minds' fixes pronoun and word order. Overall rephrase for clarity and correct grammar.

× If I had the chance I would like I would take a long walk along the beach because the sound of the views and the fresh air helped me relieve stress and clear my mind.

✓ If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the beach because the sound of the waves and the fresh air would help me relieve stress and clear my mind.

Remove redundant 'I would like I would'. Use 'waves' instead of 'views' for beach sound. In conditional sentences, consistent conditional/future-in-past: 'would take' and 'would help' are appropriate. Add commas for clarity.

× When I am feeling down, I prefer quiet, natural places where I can sing and relax.

✓ When I feel down, I prefer quiet, natural places where I can sit and relax.

Original 'When I am feeling down' is acceptable, but simpler 'When I feel down' is more natural. 'Sing and relax' is possible but unusual in this context; likely intended 'sit and relax'. Adjust verb to match intended meaning. Both present simple and present continuous can be used; preference here is for natural phrasing.

× Lately, I have been walking to the park near my home and sometimes to the campus where I study.

✓ Lately, I have been walking to the park near my home and sometimes to the campus where I study.

Sentence is correct. No change needed. The present perfect continuous 'have been walking' suits 'lately'. Included here to confirm it meets the allowed grammar types; no correction necessary.

× I prefer these routes because they are convenient and it's nice to get some fresh air and exercise.

✓ I prefer these routes because they are convenient, and it's nice to get some fresh air and exercise.

Sentence is grammatically correct; added comma before conjunction for clarity. 'It's' (it is) is acceptable. No grammatical errors fall under the specified list.