Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak more fluently with fewer hesitations and correct small grammar errors. Use one clear, concise topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details with linking words. For example, say 'Yes, I walk a lot' rather than repeating filler words. Also correct time expression 'these days' instead of 'this days' and choose either 'walk' or 'run' to avoid confusion.

例: Yes, I walk a lot these days. Usually I walk early in the morning and sometimes I take an evening walk as well, and occasionally I go for a run if I have more time.

提案: Be careful with word choice and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific details using linking words. Avoid inappropriate words like 'stupid' and unclear phrases like 'main super area' and 'tourists' if they are not accurate. Use past tense consistently: 'I used to live' and 'we would go out'.

例: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. After school, we would finish our homework and then go to the main street near our neighborhood to play and hang out with friends.

提案: Organize the answer: give a topic sentence, then two clear reasons linked with connectors. Use correct grammar (plural 'parks are', preposition 'in parks') and avoid redundancy. Be specific: mention exercise, fresh air, safety, socializing as reasons.

例: People like to walk in parks because they provide a safe, traffic-free environment. In addition, parks offer fresh air and green space for exercise and relaxation, and they are good places to meet other people.

提案: Be specific and realistic, and correct vocabulary: say 'walk on Mount Everest' is unlikely—better say 'trek in the Everest region' or another long trail. Use conditional structure clearly and avoid unclear phrases like 'three buses'. Mention duration briefly and link ideas. Use one topic sentence and supporting details.

例: If I had the chance, I would like to trek in the Everest region in Nepal. I plan to spend more than a month there, walking through mountain trails, enjoying the scenery and experiencing local culture.

提案: Give a clear, coherent answer with correct place names and avoid confused or invented names. Start with a topic sentence mentioning the park, then give one or two specific details about a recent walk (where exactly you entered, what you saw or did). Remove unrelated or incorrect claims like 'Singapore Pig'.

例: I usually walk in the Civil Board National Park near my home. Recently I hiked the Shivapuri trail from the Tarabir side, where I enjoyed forest scenery and saw several birds.

× Yes, this days I I, I walk a lot.

✓ Yes, these days I walk a lot.

Incorrect use of singular 'this' with plural 'days' and repeated filler 'I'. use 'these days' for current habitual actions and remove repeated words. Suggestion: say 'these days' for recent habitual actions and avoid filler repetition.

× I walk early in the morning and sometimes even go for evening walk.

✓ I walk early in the morning and sometimes even go for an evening walk.

Missing article before 'evening walk'. When referring to a countable noun like 'walk' in this context, use the article 'an'. Also 'go for an evening walk' is the idiomatic phrase.

× Uh, most of the time I go run also.

✓ Uh, most of the time I go for a run, too.

Incorrect verb phrase 'go run'. The correct expression is 'go for a run'. Also 'also' at end is better as 'too'. Suggestion: use 'go for a run' for the activity.

× Yes, I do remember uh, going out when I was child 'cause I, I used to live in both the stupid area and after all school, uh, we come our home and after we finish our homework, we always used to go out in the main super area and hang out with some tourists.

✓ Yes, I do remember going out when I was a child, because I used to live in a small town, and after school we would come home, finish our homework, and always go out to the main square to hang out with friends.

Multiple problems: missing article 'a child' (There be/article issue), incorrect adjective 'stupid area' likely misworded—replaced with 'small town'. Tenses inconsistent: mixing present and past; use past habitual 'used to' or 'would'. 'come our home' incorrect pronoun/order and verb forms; corrected to 'come home'. 'main super area' unclear—'main square' fits context. 'tourists' likely wrong—'friends' more logical. Suggestion: keep past habitual actions consistent and use correct articles and nouns.

× This is the reason park are made for so people like to walk on parks because there won't be any traffic or other sort of disturbance, but they can only walk in the park and everybody goes there for that purpose so that they can even make friends.

✓ This is the reason parks are made, so people like to walk in parks because there is no traffic or other disturbances; they can walk safely and everyone goes there for that purpose so they can even make friends.

Subject-verb agreement and article usage: 'park are' should be 'parks are'. 'walk on parks' is incorrect preposition—use 'walk in parks'. 'there won't be any traffic' better as 'there is no traffic' when stating a general fact. 'other sort of disturbance' should be plural 'other disturbances'. Suggestion: use plural agreement, correct prepositions, and appropriate singular/plural forms for general statements.

× Oh if I had a chance I would like to walk on the Everest, three buses and I'm even planning to go trekking someday.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to walk on Everest, take three buses, and I'm even planning to go trekking someday.

Missing comma after conditional clause. 'the Everest' is often 'Everest' without 'the' when referring to the mountain; or 'on Mount Everest'. 'three buses' was unclear—added verb 'take' to make sentence grammatical. Suggestion: include commas, use correct mountain name form, and add verbs to clarify actions.

× But yes that would be my go to place for walk and I want to spend more than month over there just by walking and enjoying the nature.

✓ But yes, that would be my go-to place for walking, and I would want to spend more than a month there just walking and enjoying nature.

Hyphenate 'go-to' and use gerund 'walking' after 'place for'. Add article 'a month'. Use 'there' not 'over there' for smoother phrasing. 'enjoying the nature' should be 'enjoying nature' (no article). Maintain conditional/modal consistency: 'would want'.

× OK, I live nearby the Civil Board National Park area, so most of the time I go there and recently I went Shiva Puri Pig from the Tarabir side which is in my area.

✓ OK, I live near the Civil Board National Park area, so most of the time I go there, and recently I went to Shiva Puri Park from the Tarabir side, which is in my area.

Use 'near' instead of 'nearby' with 'live' or 'live nearby' (positioning). 'recently I went Shiva Puri Pig' missing preposition 'to' and many words were likely mistranscribed: 'Pig' should be 'Park'. Added commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'went to [place]'.

× So yes, I went to hike Singapore Pig is the best in the world.

✓ So yes, I went hiking; Singapore Park is the best in the world.

Run-on and wrong verb form: 'went to hike' should be 'went hiking' for the activity. 'Singapore Pig' seems misheard; corrected to 'Singapore Park'. Split into two clauses with appropriate punctuation. Suggestion: use 'went hiking' for past activity and ensure correct place names.

× You know they're right.

✓ You know, they're right.

Missing comma for clarity; pronoun 'they're' is vague but acceptable if referring to previous statement. If intended to mean 'you are right', use 'you're right'. Suggestion: clarify referent: use 'you're right' if addressing examiner, or keep 'they're right' if referring to others.