Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good direct answer and clear reason. To improve, make the response slightly more concise, add a linking word for cohesion, and include a brief specific example (e.g. frequency or distance) to strengthen content and precision.

例: Yes, I walk quite a lot. Because my roommate prefers walking, I often walk to the shops and to university instead of taking the bus, usually about 20 minutes each way, which also helps me stay active.

提案: Clear and relevant. Improve by adding a linking phrase for coherence and a brief specific memory or example to make the answer more vivid and personal.

例: No, I rarely went for walks as a child because my family preferred indoor activities; for example, we often spent rainy afternoons playing board games or watching TV together.

提案: Strong answer with reasons. To improve, add a linking word between ideas and include a concrete example of benefits or a specific activity people do in parks to illustrate the point.

例: People like walking in parks because the fresh air and greenery reduce stress, and additionally parks encourage light exercise such as brisk walking or jogging, which improves mood and fitness.

提案: Good vivid and personal answer. To improve further, shorten slightly for naturalness, add a linking word, and specify what you might do during the walk to give more detail.

例: If I could, I would take a long walk along the seaside because the ocean views and waves relax me; for example, I would stroll along the shore collecting shells and stopping to watch the sunset.

提案: Direct and relevant. Improve by avoiding repetition, adding a linking word, and giving a specific detail about the walk (route, duration, who you were with or what you noticed).

例: I took a walk around my university campus last week because the weather was perfect; I spent about 30 minutes walking along the lake path and noticed lots of students studying outside.

× Taking a walk in park can improve both mental and physical health because the fresh air and greenery help reduce stress.

✓ Taking a walk in a park can improve both mental and physical health because the fresh air and greenery help reduce stress.

This sentence misses the article before the singular noun 'park'. Use 'a park' for a nonspecific singular countable noun. Also 'Taking a walk in a park' correctly uses the verb + -ing form as a noun phrase.

× It also encourages light exercise which will benefit overall well-being.

✓ It also encourages light exercise, which benefits overall well-being.

The original mixes present 'encourages' with future 'will benefit', which is inconsistent. Using the simple present 'benefits' keeps tense consistent when stating a general truth. Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive 'which' clause.

× If I had the chance, I would love to take a long walk along the seaside because I enjoy the ocean view and the sound of the waves which make me relax and feel excited to be outside.

✓ If I had the chance, I would love to take a long walk along the seaside because I enjoy the ocean view and the sound of the waves, which make me feel relaxed and excited to be outside.

The relative clause needs a comma before 'which' for a nonrestrictive clause. The verb phrase 'make me relax' is unnatural here; use 'make me feel relaxed' to express the resulting state. Also 'feel excited' is fine but parallel structure 'feel relaxed and excited' is clearer.

× I took a walk on my university campus last week because the weather was perfect.

✓ I took a walk on my university campus last week because the weather was perfect.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable. 'On my university campus' is a correct prepositional phrase. No correction needed, included here for completeness.

× My roommate usually goes everywhere on foot and I've been influenced by her habits, so I often walk to the shops and to university instead of taking a bus.

✓ My roommate usually goes everywhere on foot and I've been influenced by her habits, so I often walk to the shops and to the university instead of taking a bus.

Use the definite article 'the' before 'university' when referring to a specific institution the speaker attends. 'To university' can be acceptable in British English when speaking generally, but given other phrasing ('my roommate','I'), 'the university' is clearer and more consistent.