Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子结构需更自然流畅，避免重复填充词（如 uh）。回答应以主题句开头，随后用一到两句具体细节支持，并使用连接词使逻辑更清晰。例如说明频率、时间和感受。发音注意动词形式和时态一致。

例: Yes, I walk quite regularly. Every evening after dinner I take a walk with my parents around our neighborhood, which usually takes about thirty minutes. It’s a nice chance to talk about our day and it helps us stay close as a family.

提案: 需要注意时态和语法（过去式）以及避免重复语气词。先用一句话直接回答，然后用一两句具体细节说明频率或原因，并举例说明影响。

例: Yes, I often went for walks as a child. My parents took me to the local park almost every weekend, and I met several friends there while we played games. Those outings helped me become more sociable.

提案: 回答要更简洁自然，避免重复词（如 'beautiful' 两次）。先陈述一般原因，再给具体细节或结果，使用衔接词使句子连贯。注意词汇拼写（breathe 而不是 braise）。

例: People enjoy walking in parks because the surroundings are pleasant and peaceful. For example, parks often have flowers and trees that make the air fresher, so walking there helps you relax and feel refreshed.

提案: 回答结构合理但句子过长且有语法错误。先直接回答地点，再说明原因并给一两个具体细节。注意名词复数和形容词形式（experience → experience/experiences），并用连接词改善流畅性。

例: I would like to hike up a mountain with my friends. They have a lot of hiking experience, so we could enjoy the scenery together, help each other on the trail, and use the time to talk and strengthen our friendship.

提案: 请使用一致的过去时态并注意动词形式（find → found, buy → bought, get → had）。回答应先直接说明地点和时间，然后用一两句具体细节补充活动和感受，尽量避免列举式且使用连接词。

例: Last week I went for a walk around the city center with a friend. We found many interesting shops and bought some clothes, and in the evening we had a very tasty meal together.

× Yes, walking into my daily routine, I always walk in after dinner with my parents.

✓ Yes, walking is part of my daily routine; I always walk after dinner with my parents.

原句中“walking into my daily routine”搭配不自然，應使用“walking is part of my daily routine”或“walking has become part of my daily routine”。同時“walk in after dinner”中“walk in”多餘，應簡化為“walk after dinner”。建議用法：把動名詞作主語補語表達習慣性行為，語序更清晰。

× Uh, we always uh, strolling around our community and share our interesting daily lives.

✓ Uh, we always stroll around our community and share our interesting daily lives.

原句中“we always ... strolling”主語後應用動詞原形或現在時態（stroll），而不是現在分詞“strolling”。動詞與主語要保持一致，故改為“we always stroll”。另外“and share”與前半句並列時保持動詞形式一致。

× Definitely when I was young, my parents really liked, uh, bring me go out and have a walk.

✓ Definitely when I was young, my parents really liked bringing me out to go for a walk.

此處應使用動名詞“bringing”而不是不定式“bring”，並且“bring me go out”語法錯誤，正確表達為“bringing me out to go for a walk”或“taking me out for a walk”。同時保持過去時態一致（liked + bringing）。

× Uh, in that period I make made many new friends.

✓ Uh, in that period I made many new friends.

句中出現“make made”混用，應使用過去式“made”來匹配“in that period”（過去時間狀語）。刪除重複的動詞，保持單一過去式動詞。

× Because parks have nice environment and you can see many beautiful views like beautiful flowers and green trees in there.

✓ Because parks have a nice environment and you can see many beautiful things, like flowers and green trees.

“nice environment”前應加不定冠詞“a”；“beautiful views like beautiful flowers”表達冗餘，改為“beautiful things, like flowers and green trees”。此外“in there”多餘，刪去以使句子更自然。

× You can braise the fresh air and keep refreshed.

✓ You can breathe the fresh air and feel refreshed.

“braise”是“燉、煎”的意思，誤用於此處；應用“breathe”表示“呼吸”。“keep refreshed”語法不自然，應用“feel refreshed”或“stay refreshed”。

× If I had a chance, I would like to climb a mountain with my friends because my best friends have many experience about it and during that period we can share our daily life and I think it is a good way to strengthen our friendship.

✓ If I had a chance, I would like to climb a mountain with my friends because my best friend has a lot of experience with it, and during that time we could share our daily lives; I think it would be a good way to strengthen our friendship.

多個問題：1) 主句使用虛擬語氣“would like”，從句中應將時態和語氣配合，故用“could”或“would”。2) “my best friends have many experience about it”中“friends”與“experience”數量和單複數錯配，應為“my best friend has a lot of experience with it”或“my best friends have a lot of experience”。3) “during that period we can share our daily life”時態應與假設情況一致，改為“could share our daily lives”。4) “daily life”改為複數“daily lives”以符合多人。

× Last week I went shopping with my friend around the city center.

✓ Last week I went shopping with my friend around the city center.

此句本身時態和結構正確，僅保留原句。沒有符合需改正的列舉語法錯誤。

× We find many interesting shops and buy some clothes.

✓ We found many interesting shops and bought some clothes.

句子中有時間標誌“Last week”，因此動詞應使用過去時，將現在時“find”與“buy”改為過去式“found”和“bought”。保持時態一致。

× On top of that, in the evening we get a delicious meal.

✓ On top of that, in the evening we had a delicious meal.

由於描述的是上週發生的事情，應使用過去時“had a delicious meal”而不是現在時“get”。此外“get a meal”不如“have a meal”自然。