Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (especially verb forms and articles), and use linking words to organise supporting details. Mention frequency and purpose with specific examples and avoid redundant phrases.

例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk to the bus stop and to the nearby grocery store about three times a week, and I often walk to pick up my children from school. Because I walk daily for short errands and to collect my kids, it helps me stay fit and saves money on transport.

提案: Answer in past tense and give a clear reason or specific memories. Use linking words (for example, when, because) and precise vocabulary (playground, clay). Keep it within a few sentences.

例: No, I did not go for walks often when I was a child. Instead, I spent most afternoons playing at the local playground, where I liked to make shapes from modelling clay with my friends. Because I enjoyed those activities, walking for pleasure was not common.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and organise supporting reasons with linking words (for example, because, moreover). Use accurate vocabulary (greenery, scenery) and give specific examples of benefits (fresh air, exercise, relaxation). Avoid repetition.

例: People enjoy walking in parks because of the natural scenery and fresh air. Moreover, parks often have trees, flowers and water features like ponds or small waterfalls that make walks relaxing. As a result, many prefer parks to busy streets for exercise and stress relief.

提案: Start with a direct answer naming the place, then give specific reasons and details (distance, scenery, who you would go with). Use linking words (because, so) and correct word choice (lake, walk to, rather than).

例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk to the nearby lake, which is about two or three kilometres from my house. I prefer walking there rather than driving because the route is scenic and not too difficult, and it would be a peaceful way to spend an afternoon.

提案: Use past simple correctly and be specific: say when and where you walked and why. Keep sentences coherent with linking words (for example, so, because). Avoid contradictory statements (saying you didn't walk then describing a walk).

例: I went for a short walk yesterday of about one kilometre around my neighbourhood to do some shopping. I bought some clothes at a nearby shop, and walking there saved me time compared with waiting for the bus.

× Yes I walk a lot.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot.

This sentence needs punctuation rather than a grammatical change; add a comma after 'Yes' for natural speech written form. (No change to verb form because subject I uses base verb.)

× I preferly do the work with the work.

✓ I prefer to do the work on foot.

The word 'preferly' is not correct English. Use the verb 'prefer' followed by an infinitive (prefer to do). Also 'with the work' is unclear; likely meant 'on foot' to indicate walking to do work. Suggest using 'prefer to' + infinitive and clearer phrase.

× I walk to the bus station to the grocery while the walk I take my kids from the school back to work.

✓ I walk to the bus station and to the grocery; while walking I take my kids from school back to work.

Prepositions and conjunctions are used incorrectly. Use 'and' to connect destinations, 'to the grocery' is fine but 'the grocery' is acceptable with 'the'. Use the gerund 'walking' after 'while' to show simultaneous actions. Remove extra articles before 'school' and reorder for clarity.

× It helps us keep me fit and good.

✓ It helps keep me fit and healthy.

Pronouns 'us' and 'me' are mixed incorrectly. If referring to the speaker alone, use 'me'. Also 'good' is not the right adjective for health—use 'healthy'. Use 'helps + verb (base)' for structure: 'helps keep'.

× No, I don't want to.

✓ No, I didn't want to.

The question asks about past habit. Use past tense 'didn't want to' instead of present 'don't want to' to match timeframe.

× I did not go outside to have a walk when I was child.

✓ I did not go outside for walks when I was a child.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' and awkward infinitive 'to have a walk'. Use plural 'walks' for habitual actions and add 'a' for 'a child'.

× I usually play at the play when I was child.

✓ I usually played at the playground when I was a child.

Tense should be past 'played' for a past habit. 'Play at the play' is incorrect; use 'playground'. Add article 'a' before 'child'.

× I usually use the clay.

✓ I usually used clay.

Past context requires past tense 'used'. 'Use the clay' is unnatural; 'used clay' is concise. Remove unnecessary article 'the'.

× Oh yeah.

✓ Oh, yes.

For formal speech, 'Oh, yes' is clearer; add comma after interjection. 'Oh yeah' is colloquial but acceptable in speech.

× People like to walk in the park because there is too much greeneries there and most of people like the green sceneries.

✓ People like to walk in the park because there is a lot of greenery there, and most people like green scenery.

'Greeneries' and 'sceneries' are incorrect plural forms. Use uncountable 'greenery' and 'scenery' with 'a lot of' for quantity. Also 'most of people' should be 'most people'.

× Waterfalls are also there.

✓ There are also waterfalls.

More natural English places the existential 'there are' before the noun. This matches common park descriptions.

× So usually they are trying to walk in the parks as compared to walk in the street.

✓ So usually they try to walk in parks rather than walk in the streets.

Use simple present 'try' for habitual action. Use 'rather than' to compare activities and pluralize 'parks'/'streets' for general statements. Avoid continuous 'are trying' unless emphasizing ongoing effort.

× People go to the park.

✓ People go to the park.

This sentence is acceptable; no grammatical change needed. It is a general statement using simple present.

× I would like to take a long walk when I have a chance to the look because it's like a two or three kilometres from my house.

✓ I would like to take a long walk if I had the chance because it's about two or three kilometres from my house.

Use conditional 'if I had the chance' to match 'would like'. Remove unclear phrase 'to the look' and use 'about' for approximation. Use singular 'kilometres' phrasing 'two or three kilometres' is fine; 'like' should be 'about'.

× It's not too hard.

✓ It's not too hard.

Sentence is correct in present tense; no change required.

× Instead of using my car, I prefer to go.

✓ Instead of using my car, I prefer to walk.

'Prefer to go' is vague; use 'prefer to walk' to indicate the mode of travel. 'Prefer' + infinitive is correct modal-like preference structure.

× I didn't go for a walk today for samples like 1 kilometer in my area for shopping.

✓ I didn't go for a walk today; I walked about 1 kilometre in my area to do some shopping.

Mixes negative 'didn't go for a walk' with describing walking. If the speaker did walk, use past simple 'I walked'. 'For samples' is incorrect; likely 'for example' but better phrased. Use 'about 1 kilometre' and 'to do some shopping' for purpose.

× I purchased the clothes from there and it saves my time using bus instead of walking.

✓ I bought some clothes there, and it saved me time compared to taking the bus instead of walking.

'Purchased the clothes' is awkward; 'bought some clothes' is more natural. Tense should be past 'saved'. 'Using bus' needs article 'the' or rephrase; clarify comparison: it saved time compared to taking the bus rather than walking.