Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản, loại bỏ lỗi lặp từ và dùng câu trả lời trực tiếp, súc tích. Nên nói rõ tần suất và lý do bằng cấu trúc đơn giản, kèm liên từ hợp lý. Ví dụ: trả lời trực tiếp (“No, I don't walk a lot.”), nêu lý do rõ ràng (“because I get tired easily”) và bổ sung ngắn gọn về cách di chuyển thay thế (“so I usually take public transport or drive to school and work”).

例: No, I don't walk a lot because I get tired easily when I walk long distances. Therefore I usually take public transport or drive to school and work, which is quicker and more convenient.

提案: Chú ý về thì quá khứ (use past simple), tránh lặp từ và hoàn thiện cấu trúc câu. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm chi tiết cụ thể với liên từ thích hợp. Ví dụ: dùng 'Yes, I did' và mô tả hành động cụ thể ('I often ran and played football and badminton in the park').

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often ran around and played football and badminton in the park, which made me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: Cần rõ ràng về ý tưởng và dùng từ vựng phù hợp (park, walk). Tránh nhầm lẫn từ (work → walk, pack → park) và cung cấp lý do hợp lý với ví dụ. Dùng linking words để liệt kê lý do (for example, because, and).

例: I think people like walking in parks because the atmosphere is peaceful and there is fresh air. For example, parks often have trees and flowers, and walking there can be relaxing and good for health.

提案: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp điều kiện (use 'If I had the chance' or 'If I had time'), dùng từ đúng (quiet/peaceful not 'right fuel'), và diễn đạt rõ địa điểm cùng lý do ngắn gọn. Kết hợp câu chủ đề và lý do bằng linking word như 'because' hoặc 'so'.

例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the countryside because it is quiet and peaceful, which helps me relax and forget about city noise.

提案: Dùng thì quá khứ đơn đúng (e.g. 'I went recently to...'), sắp xếp câu rõ ràng: nêu địa điểm, thời gian và lý do. Tránh cấu trúc lộn xộn; thêm linking word như 'because' hoặc 'so' để diễn giải kết quả.

例: I went to the park recently because after school and work I wanted to relax. Walking there helped me reduce stress and feel refreshed.

× No, I don't because I I feel tired when I walk a lot in text. I go to the bath in the school and the work.

✓ No, I don't because I feel tired when I walk a lot. I go to the bathroom at school and at work.

Student used a repeated word 'I I' and 'in text' which is incorrect; 'bath' should be 'bathroom' and 'in the school and the work' should be 'at school and at work'. Use correct pronouns/words and prepositions: remove duplicate word, change 'in text' to nothing, use 'at' for locations. Use 'bathroom' for restroom.

× Yes I do when when I were a child. I like run and play the football and badminton. Is a happy and relaxed.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a child. I liked to run and play football and badminton. It was happy and relaxing.

Incorrect tense and form: 'do' should be past 'did' to match 'when I was a child'; 'were' should be 'was' for singular first/third person; 'like run' needs infinitive or gerund 'liked to run' or 'liked running'; 'the football' should be 'football' without 'the'; 'Is a happy and relaxed' lacks subject and uses present tense—change to 'It was happy and relaxing'.

× I think that people like to work in the back because in the pack have any more, such as Monkey, Tiger and habits in the pack have.

✓ I think that people like to walk in the park because the park has many animals, such as monkeys and tigers, and other wildlife.

Many preposition and word choice errors: 'work in the back' should be 'walk in the park'; 'in the pack have any more' is ungrammatical—use 'the park has many' and 'such as monkeys and tigers' (plural, lowercase for common nouns). Use 'wildlife' or 'animals' instead of 'habits'.

× If you has the trigger I would like to take along a walk. This is away from drive through because right fuel it is relaxed and true.

✓ If you had the chance, I would like to take a long walk. It would be away from busy roads because it is relaxing and peaceful.

Incorrect verb form in conditional: 'has' should be past 'had' for the hypothetical 'if' clause. 'Trigger' is wrong word—use 'chance'. 'Take along a walk' should be 'take a long walk'. 'Away from drive through' should be 'away from busy roads'; 'right fuel it is relaxed and true' is unclear—replace with 'it is relaxing and peaceful'.

× I lately were the form of work the park because in the park. I feel relax and reduce stress after the school and work.

✓ Lately I went to the park after work because in the park I felt relaxed and less stressed after school and work.

Tense and word order errors: 'lately were' incorrect—use 'Lately I went' (past simple). 'the form of work the park' is garbled—intended 'went to the park after work'. 'I feel relax' should be past 'I felt relaxed' to match past visit; 'reduce stress' should be 'less stressed' or 'reduced my stress'. Ensure correct verb tense consistency and normal word order.