Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 语法和用词需改进，句子冗长且有时态/拼写错误。回答应先直接回应问题，然后简短补充原因，避免重复（例如两次使用“recently”）。注意单复数、动词时态和介词用法。

例: Not really. I don't walk much nowadays because I recently got my driving licence, so I drive to work and shopping. Driving saves me a lot of time compared with commuting by public transport.

提案: 回答结构基本正确，但要注意语法一致性（如动词形式）和句子结尾完整性。可用连接词使逻辑更清晰，并给出更具体的细节（例如频率或活动）。

例: Yes. I often walked with my family in the park near our home. My mother believed that evening walks after dinner were healthy and helped prevent weight gain, so we usually went out three or four times a week.

提案: 表达需要更自然和准确，注意名词单复数和词序（例如 'parks have a lot of trees'）。避免重复“people”，用代词或同义词替换。最后一句要完整并自然地衔接。

例: People like walking in parks because parks usually have many trees and greenery, so they offer fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere that helps reduce stress. Also, parks are great for socialising or doing light exercise like jogging or stretching.

提案: 内容清楚但句式有语法错误（例如 'roads has' 应为 'roads have'）。避免口语平台名称拼写或大写错误（TikTok）。可以合并句子使表达更紧凑，并补充更具体的理由或期望感受。

例: I would love to walk around the large lake in Hangzhou because I've seen many stunning videos of it on TikTok. The scenic views and well‑maintained paths would make for a relaxing and memorable long walk.

提案: 句子碎片较多、重复且有语法错误（如 'listing' 应为 'lasting' 或更自然表达）。要先直接回答并用一两句说明时间、地点和感受，注意单复数和连贯性。避免重复短语。

例: Last week I walked in a national park about ten minutes from my home. I spent an hour walking around the lake after work and felt very relaxed because the park was peaceful and quiet.

× Recently I have not been work a lot because I recently got my driving license so I can drive myself everywhere.

✓ Recently I have not been working a lot because I recently got my driving license, so I can drive myself everywhere.

此句错在动词形式与现在完成进行时的使用。“have not been work”不正确，正确的现在完成进行时应为“have not been working”，表示近期持续的动作减少。建议：使用“have/has + been + 动词-ing”来表达从过去持续到现在的状态。

× Driving save me a lot of time comparing working especially when I commuted to work or go to shopping.

✓ Driving saves me a lot of time compared with working, especially when I commute to work or go shopping.

“Driving”作为单数主语，动词应为第三人称单数“saves”（对应类型2/27）。“comparing working”用法不自然，改为“compared with working”。时态要和一般现在时一致，用“commute”而非“commuted”，并且“go shopping”不加介词。建议：主谓一致要注意，比较结构用“compared with”或“compared to”，动词时态与句子时间状况保持一致。

× In my memory, when I was a child, I often went to a park near my home to enjoy walking with my family.

✓ In my memory, when I was a child, I often went to the park near my home to enjoy walking with my family.

这里“a park”与后文特指“near my home”较为特定，通常用定冠词“the park”。（类型17/22）建议：当说到自己家附近的某个特定地点时，用“the”。

× This is because my mom believes that taking an evening walk after dinner is beneficial for our health and reduce the risks of obesity, so we spend a lot of time on.

✓ This is because my mom believes that taking an evening walk after dinner is beneficial for our health and reduces the risk of obesity, so we spend a lot of time doing it.

并列谓语应保持主谓一致：主语“taking an evening walk”为单数概念，动词应为“reduces”。“the risks of obesity”改为更自然的“the risk of obesity”。句尾“spend a lot of time on”不完整，正确说法为“spend a lot of time doing it”。（类型27/13/22/26）建议：核对主语单复数，完成固定搭配如“spend time doing sth”。

× Because park highs a lot of trees and greenery, people can enjoy fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere, which helps people reduce stress and clear their minds.

✓ Because parks have a lot of trees and greenery, people can enjoy fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere, which helps them reduce stress and clear their minds.

“park highs”明显错误，应为复数或通用名词“parks have”。“people”后面再次用“people”重复，改用代词“them”。（类型1/11/12）建议：注意常用动词搭配（park have），避免重复名词，使用代词代替已提到的名词。

× Moreover, parks are pleasant places which allow people to chat with their friends or exercise they.

✓ Moreover, parks are pleasant places which allow people to chat with their friends or exercise.

句尾“exercise they”不正确，重复且代词位置错误。应直接用动词不带代词宾语。（类型12/26）建议：在表示“锻炼”时直接用动词“exercise”，不需要再加代词。

× If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk around the vast lake which is located in Hangzhou.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk around the vast lake that is located in Hangzhou.

此句语法基本正确，但更自然的连接词可以用“that”或省略“which”。（类型16/17）建议：在限定性定语从句中通常用“that”或直接省略关系词以更口语化。

× This is because I have seen so many beautiful videos about it in Tiktok.

✓ This is because I have seen so many beautiful videos about it on TikTok.

介词应为“on TikTok”，且平台名应大写“TikTok”。（类型11/22）建议：常见媒体平台用“on”表示在平台上看见，注意专有名词大写。

× The beautiful landscape attracts me a lot. Moreover, the roads has been built.

✓ The beautiful landscape attracts me a lot. Moreover, the roads have been built.

“roads”为复数，助动词应为“have been built”而非“has been built”。（类型27）建议：复数主语要用复数动词形式；若想说“路已经修好了”也可用“the roads have been built”。

× Last week I went for a walk at a National Park which is not far from my home.

✓ Last week I went for a walk at a national park which is not far from my home.

“national park”在这里泛指一个国家公园，通常小写；若为专有名词需使用确切名称和大写。（类型22/17）建议：普通名词短语用小写，专有名词或正式名称才大写。

× About 10 minutes walk.

✓ It was about a 10-minute walk.

原句为片段，缺少谓语和连接结构。应完整表述为“It was about a 10-minute walk.”（类型23/26）建议：避免使用片段句，补充主语和动词，使用复合形容词“10-minute”。

× I walked around the lake listing one hour after working.

✓ I walked around the lake for about one hour after working.

“listing”为拼写错误，应为“lasting”或更自然的“for about one hour”。且“after working”可保留，但更常见是“after work”。（类型13/5/6）建议：注意常用时间表达“for about one hour”或“for an hour”，以及“after work”比“after working”更自然。

× I felt I felt so relaxing and enjoyable.

✓ I felt so relaxed and enjoyed myself.

“I felt I felt”重复，且“relaxing”是形容事物的，现在应使用形容人“relaxed”；“enjoyable”通常描述事物，故改为“enjoyed myself”。（类型13/26）建议：注意形容词用法区分“relaxing”(使放松的)与“relaxed”(感到放松的)，避免重复。

× This is because the park is a peaceful places can.

✓ This is because the park is a peaceful place.

原句结构混乱，“places can”不合语法，且“a peaceful places”中冠词与复数名词不一致，应为“a peaceful place”。（类型22/1/26）建议：确保冠词和名词数一致，删除多余词汇，保持句子完整。