Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid tense errors and redundant phrases, and give one specific supporting detail. Use linking words if adding extra information.

例: Yes, I walk regularly. I usually walk for about half an hour every day to keep fit, and I prefer walking in the evening because it helps me relax after work.

提案: Clearly state past habits with correct past tense and concise supporting details. Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'and' to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I often went for walks as a child because my family liked spending time outdoors. Walking gave me new experiences, such as meeting neighbors and exploring nature, and it also kept me healthy.

提案: Answer directly and use precise vocabulary. Correct word choice (walk vs work) and plural forms matter. Give one or two specific reasons and link them with 'because' or 'for example'.

例: People like walking in parks because they can enjoy fresh air and natural scenery. For example, parks have trees and birds, which make walks relaxing and more pleasant than walking on busy streets.

提案: Give a concise conditional statement and use correct verbs. Avoid repetition and unnecessary filler. Provide a clear reason why you would choose that place, using linking words like 'because' or 'since'.

例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk at Gurgaon Stadium because it has a large, well-maintained track and many exercise facilities. Also, several colleagues walk there, which makes it more enjoyable.

提案: Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. State when and where you went, then add one specific detail about the experience using a linking word like 'because' or 'and'.

例: I went for a walk in my village garden late last week because it is spacious and well maintained. I met some friends there and we walked together for about an hour.

× Yes, I used to do walking whenever I get a free time and almost I half an hour day to keep myself fit.

✓ Yes, I used to go for a walk whenever I had free time and I would walk for about half an hour a day to keep myself fit.

The verb phrase 'do walking' is unnatural; use 'go for a walk' or 'walk'. Tense mismatch: 'used to' refers to past habitual actions so 'get' should be past 'had'. Word order and articles: 'a free time' is incorrect; use 'free time' without an article. 'almost I half an hour day' is ungrammatical; correct to 'about half an hour a day'. Suggestions: use 'used to + base verb' for past habits, keep consistent past tense, and use natural collocations like 'go for a walk' or 'walk'.

× Yes, it was the most memorable part of my life when I was a child to work because walking give me new experience.

✓ Yes, it was the most memorable part of my childhood because walking gave me new experiences.

Tense agreement: 'give' should be past 'gave' to match 'was' and 'when I was a child'. Word choice: 'part of my life when I was a child' is wordy; use 'part of my childhood'. 'New experience' should be plural 'new experiences' if referring to multiple encounters. Suggestions: keep past tense consistent and use concise noun phrases like 'my childhood'.

× I met with different people and also keep help working helps me in making my body fit.

✓ I met different people, and staying active by walking helped me keep fit.

Problems: 'met with' can be simplified to 'met'; 'keep help working helps me in making my body fit' is ungrammatical and confusing. Use a clear subject and verb: 'staying active by walking helped me keep fit' expresses cause and effect. Suggestions: avoid redundant verbs, use clear gerund phrases ('staying active') and consistent past tense ('helped').

× Most of the people like to work in natural environment and see different types of the birds, different type of trees as well as grass, so they mostly prefer to walk in the parks.

✓ Most people like to be in a natural environment and see different types of birds, trees, and grass, so they prefer to walk in parks.

Preposition and article issues: 'like to work in natural environment' is incorrect; 'be in a natural environment' or 'walk in a natural environment' is appropriate. 'The birds' and 'different type of trees' need plural forms and no unnecessary articles. 'Prefer to walk in the parks' is too specific; use 'in parks' for general statement. Suggestions: use 'be in' for environment, pluralize nouns when describing varieties, and avoid unnecessary definite articles for generalizations.

× Well, whenever I would like, whenever I would like to take a long walk, I would mostly prefer to work in Gurgaon Stadium because it is a very big stadium.

✓ Well, whenever I want to take a long walk, I would prefer to walk in Gurgaon Stadium because it is very large.

Modal and conditional awkwardness: Repeating 'whenever I would like' is redundant; use 'whenever I want' or 'if I had the chance'. 'Prefer to work' is incorrect; use 'prefer to walk'. 'Very big stadium' can be simplified to 'very large'. Suggestions: simplify conditional phrasing, use correct verb collocations ('walk in' not 'work in'), and avoid repetition.

× Many of my colleagues also do do working there and moreover, the ground is very big as well as has many equipments.

✓ Many of my colleagues also walk there, and the ground is very large and has a lot of equipment.

Redundancy and word choice: 'do do working' contains duplication and incorrect verb form; use 'walk there'. 'Has many equipments' is incorrect: 'equipment' is uncountable and should be 'a lot of equipment' or 'many pieces of equipment'. Suggestions: remove duplicated words, use correct verb forms, and treat 'equipment' as uncountable.

× So that's why.

✓ That's why I prefer it.

Fragment: 'So that's why' is a sentence fragment without clear connection. Make it a complete statement that explains preference, e.g., 'That's why I prefer it.' Suggestions: avoid short fragments; link reasons to conclusions with a complete clause.

× I went for a walk in my village garden late last week because my village garden is very spacious and well maintained and also I meet with my new meet with my friends and we do work together.

✓ I went for a walk in my village garden late last week because it is very spacious and well maintained, and I met my friends there and we walked together.

Tense consistency: 'I went' is past, so subsequent actions should be past too: 'I met' not 'I meet'. 'My new meet with my friends' is redundant and ungrammatical. 'We do work together' should be 'we walked together' to describe the activity. Suggestions: keep past tense consistent, remove redundant phrases, and use appropriate past verbs for activities.