Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and add one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid filler words like 'actually'.

例: Yes, I walk a lot. I walk every morning before work because it helps me wake up and stay fit, and I usually walk for about 30 minutes along my neighborhood streets.

提案: Use past-tense consistently and reduce hesitations. Give a short topic sentence, then explain with a specific reason and a brief example using a linking word like 'because' or 'so'.

例: No, I didn't go outside much as a child because my mother preferred staying at home, so we often spent weekends indoors watching TV or reading.

提案: Avoid starting with uncertainty; answer directly. Use smoother linking phrases and correct count nouns. Provide a specific benefit with an example to make it natural and effective.

例: People like walking in parks because it's relaxing and sociable; for example, I often meet neighbors and we exchange greetings while enjoying the fresh air.

提案: Be concise and accurate. Use conditional structure correctly and avoid unclear phrases (e.g. 'Chinese off'). Add one specific reason why you chose that place using a linking word like 'because'.

例: If I had the chance, I would walk along the Great Wall of China because of its history and spectacular views, which I think would make the experience unforgettable.

提案: Respond directly in past or present perfect with a complete sentence. Remove hesitations and finish thoughts. Provide a specific detail about the place and mention why you chose it using a linking word.

例: Lately I went for a walk near my home in a nature reserve that is surrounded by lakes and trees, because I find it peaceful and good for clearing my mind.

× Walking is one of my favorite activities and I try to do it every morning before go to work.

✓ Walking is one of my favorite activities and I try to do it every morning before going to work.

The verb after a preposition ('before') should be in the -ing (gerund) form. Use 'going' not the base form 'go'. Suggestion: after prepositions use gerund forms (before going, after eating).

× Sadly no, because my mom wasn't, uh, an active person. So, uh, we spend most of the time inside the house.

✓ Sadly no, because my mom wasn't, uh, an active person. So, uh, we spent most of the time inside the house.

The speaker refers to habitual action in the past, so the past tense 'spent' is required rather than the present 'spend'. Ensure consistent past tense for past contexts.

× I like to walk in parks because I can meet another people doing the same and I can share a greeting or a few words.

✓ I like to walk in parks because I can meet other people doing the same and I can share a greeting or a few words.

The phrase 'another people' is ungrammatical: 'people' is plural, so use 'other people'. 'Another' is used with singular count nouns (another person). Use 'other' with plural nouns.

× If I had a chance, I would like to go to China and walk along the Great Wall, Chinese off. I think it would be an unforgettable experience.

✓ If I had a chance, I would like to go to China and walk along the Great Wall, of course. I think it would be an unforgettable experience.

'Chinese off' is incorrect and unclear. Likely intended filler 'of course'. Replace with 'of course' to convey emphasis. Also maintain conditional 'If I had a chance, I would...' which is correct.

× I've been working. Near to my home, actually, uh, in a reserve that is surrounded by lakes, trees, and I find.

✓ I went for a walk near my home, actually, in a reserve that is surrounded by lakes and trees. I really enjoyed it.

The original is fragmented and mismatched in tense and structure. 'I've been working' does not answer 'Where did you go for a walk lately?'. Use a past tense statement that directly answers: 'I went for a walk near my home...' Also remove extraneous 'to' after 'near' and complete the sentence logically (e.g., 'I really enjoyed it').