Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve accuracy and fluency: correct small grammar mistakes and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise supporting details using linking words. For example, replace “watch” with “walk,” fix subject positioning (“I try to choose”), and remove redundant phrases.

例: Yes, I walk quite a lot. For example, I set a daily goal of 10,000 steps and use my Apple Watch to track my progress. Also, I often choose longer routes home because walking is good for both my physical health and mental well-being.

提案: Make the response more concise and coherent: state the main idea first, then add brief supporting details with linking words. Avoid filler words like “Umm” and awkward tense/use of passive. Provide a clear reason or a short anecdote if relevant.

例: Not really. When I was a child I preferred going by car because walking seemed tiring and less fun. Instead, I usually went outside to play with other children, which involved running and games rather than long walks.

提案: Improve grammar and variety: use correct verb agreement and combine ideas with linking words to avoid repetition. Be more specific about benefits and give one or two clear examples.

例: People enjoy walking in parks because they can breathe fresh air and admire nature, such as trees and flower beds. Furthermore, parks offer social opportunities—for instance, parents can watch children playing while chatting with neighbours.

提案: Be concise and organize ideas: begin with a direct answer, then explain why and give a specific example. Fix grammar and avoid hesitations and repetition (e.g., “classified/categorized,” “like”).

例: I would choose hiking trails because they offer varied scenery and challenges. For example, I use an app that categorises trails by difficulty, so I can select easy routes for relaxation and harder ones when I want more exercise.

提案: Polish fluency and accuracy: remove fillers like “uh,” correct minor word forms, and compress into two or three sentences. Add one specific detail to make the response more vivid.

例: Recently I walked along the beach. Strolling beside the shoreline I enjoyed the sea views, listened to the waves and felt warm sand under my bare feet, which made it a very relaxing experience.

× Yes, I try to watch a lot.

✓ Yes, I try to walk a lot.

The student used the verb 'watch' which is incorrect in this context. The correct verb is 'walk'. This is not an -ing form error but a wrong lexical choice; however it was corrected to match intended meaning. Suggestion: use 'walk' when referring to walking activity.

× I and try to choose a longer route to reach house because walking is very beneficial.

✓ I try to choose a longer route to reach my house because walking is very beneficial.

The sentence has two issues: the pronoun order and a missing possessive. 'I and try' is ungrammatical; the correct subject is 'I'. The phrase 'reach house' lacks a determiner or possessive; use 'my house' to indicate which house. Suggestion: Use 'I' as the subject followed by the verb, and include appropriate possessive determiners (my, the, etc.).

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

This question is already correct. The auxiliary 'did' correctly marks past tense and the bare infinitive 'go' is appropriate. No change needed.

× When I was a child, I didn't care about walking much and I usually wanted to go by car because walking made me tired and it was not fun for me.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't care about walking much and I usually wanted to go by car because walking made me tired and it wasn't fun for me.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable; only contraction consistency improved ('it wasn't' instead of 'it was not') which is stylistic. Tense use is correct: past simple throughout. Suggestion: maintain consistent contractions for natural spoken English.

× I was going outside to play with other kids.

✓ I used to go outside to play with other kids.

The progressive 'I was going outside' can be grammatically correct but is awkward for habitual past actions. Use 'used to' to express past habitual actions. Suggestion: use 'used to' for repeated past habits.

× Parks gives you the opportunity to enjoy the fresh air and also enjoy the nature, the trees and gardens and meet other people as well like kids playing in the playground.

✓ Parks give you the opportunity to enjoy the fresh air, nature, the trees and gardens, and to meet other people, for example children playing in the playground.

Subject-verb agreement error 'Parks gives' should be 'Parks give' (plural subject with plural verb). Also 'enjoy the nature' is unnatural; 'enjoy nature' is preferred. The sentence was long and needed commas and parallel structure ('enjoy..., and to meet...'). Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use parallel structure with commas for clarity.

× I like to go to hiking trails.

✓ I like to go to hiking trails.

This sentence is acceptable as is. No article correction necessary. 'Hiking trails' plural is fine for general statement.

× There is a an app that classified categorized trails for hiking.

✓ There is an app that categorizes trails for hiking.

Two issues: double article 'a an' should be 'an' before a vowel sound. 'Classified categorized' is redundant and incorrect form; use 'categorizes' (present simple) to describe the app's function. Also maintain subject-verb agreement with singular 'app'. Suggestion: remove redundancy and choose correct verb form 'categorizes'.

× Like from easy to very difficult and with different levels.

✓ They range from easy to very difficult and have different levels.

Fragment corrected into a full sentence. Use plural subject 'they' (trails) and present simple 'range' and 'have' to describe general facts. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; ensure subject and verb are present.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

'Lately' is typically used with present perfect; with 'did' (simple past) use 'recently'. To ask about recent past with 'did', 'recently' is more natural. Suggestion: match adverb with tense: 'lately' with present perfect, 'recently' with past simple.

× I went for a walk along the beach.

✓ I went for a walk along the beach.

This sentence is correct. The article usage is appropriate; no change needed.

× Walking beside the shoreline, uh gave me the chance to see the views and listen to the waves and feel the warm sand with my barefoot.

✓ Walking beside the shoreline gave me the chance to see the views, listen to the waves, and feel the warm sand with my bare feet.

The participial phrase 'Walking beside the shoreline' correctly modifies the subject but the filler 'uh' should be omitted. 'My barefoot' is incorrect: use 'my bare feet' (plural). Also use parallel gerunds 'see, listen, and feel' and commas for clarity. Suggestion: use correct noun form 'feet' and maintain parallel structure.

× It was a very pleasant experience.

✓ It was a very pleasant experience.

Sentence is correct and well-formed. No change necessary.