Keys— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Используйте корректную лексику (keys вместо «kiss»), начинайте с чёткого тематического предложения, сократите повторения и добавьте связку для плавности. Укажите конкретное количество или предметы, чтобы сделать ответ более информативным. Максимум 3–4 предложения.

例: No, I don't usually carry many keys. I only bring the key to my apartment and the key to my workplace. Usually I keep any spare keys at home or with a trusted person, so I only need those two.

提案: Начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте одну-две конкретные детали и причину/последствие. Избегайте тавтологии и грамматических ошибок; используйте связки (for example, then, so) для логики. Не более 3 предложений.

例: Yes, I have. For example, when I was a student I returned home and discovered I couldn't find my apartment keys. I searched everywhere and eventually had to ask my roommate for help, which was very stressful.

提案: Дайте короткий прямой ответ и объяснение с ясной логикой; исправьте ошибки согласования и словообразования (e.g., "quickly" неуместно). Уточните процедуру или результат, чтобы добавить конкретику. Ограничьтесь 2–3 предложениями.

例: No, I rarely lock myself out because the door cannot be locked from the outside without the key. If my keys are inside, I usually call a roommate or landlord to let me in, so the problem is resolved quickly.

提案: Используйте точную лексику и исправьте ошибки (keys, safe). Начните с явного мнения, затем добавьте условия и причину, используя связки (if, because). Дайте конкретный пример ситуации, когда это приемлемо. 2–3 предложения достаточно.

例: I think leaving keys with a neighbour can be a good idea if you fully trust them and have known them for a long time. Otherwise it's not safe because anyone with a key could access your home without permission.

× Natural. I don't usually bring a lot of kiss with me.

✓ Of course. I don't usually bring a lot of keys with me.

The noun 'kiss' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'keys'. Also 'a lot of' requires a plural noun: 'keys'. 'Natural' is unnatural in this context; 'Of course' or 'Naturally' is appropriate. Use correct vocabulary and ensure countable nouns match plural form when using 'a lot of'.

× I often bring with me kiss from my apartment and kiss from work room at my job and that's all.

✓ I often bring keys from my apartment and from the workroom at my job, and that's all.

Preposition and word order are incorrect. 'Bring with me' is redundant; 'bring' alone is fine. Use 'from' to indicate origin: 'keys from my apartment' and 'from the workroom'. 'Work room' should be one word 'workroom' or 'workplace'. Ensure plural 'keys'.

× Yes, I had such bad experience.

✓ Yes, I had such a bad experience.

Missing article 'a' before 'bad experience'. In past tense 'had' is correct, but countable noun requires an article. Use 'I had such a bad experience' or 'I had a very bad experience'. Russian: Перед исчисляемым существительным 'experience' в единственном числе требуется артикль 'a'.

× I lost my keys when I was a student at my school and once I came to my house, to my apartment and I didn't find keys and I searched for it elsewhere but didn't find.

✓ I lost my keys when I was a student at school. Once I came to my apartment and couldn't find my keys, so I searched everywhere but didn't find them.

Run-on sentence with incorrect articles and pronouns. Use 'at school' or 'school' without 'my' for general schooling. 'My apartment' is fine. 'Didn't find keys' needs 'my keys' and plural pronoun 'them' not 'it'. 'Searched for it elsewhere' should be 'searched everywhere' or 'searched elsewhere' and match plural pronoun. Russian: Предложение слишком длинное и грамматически неправильно построено; нужно разделить на два предложения, поставить артикль 'my' перед 'apartment' и использовать местоимение 'them' для множественного числа.

× No, I'm not familiar with this problem because it's impossible to lock my door from my apartment without having any keys.

✓ No, I'm not familiar with this problem because it's impossible to lock my apartment door from the inside without any keys.

Word order and article use: 'lock my door from my apartment' is awkward; better 'lock my apartment door from the inside'. 'Any keys' is acceptable but more natural is 'without any keys' or 'without my keys'. Russian: Улучшите порядок слов: 'lock my apartment door from the inside'. 'Any keys' можно оставить, но 'without my keys' звучит естественнее.

× So if the keys stays indoors when I walk out, I find that's very quick quickly.

✓ So if the keys stay indoors when I walk out, I find it very quick to get them back.

Subject-verb agreement: 'keys' is plural so the verb should be 'stay', not 'stays'. The original 'I find that's very quick quickly' is ungrammatical and redundant; better: 'I find it very quick to get them back' or 'I can get them back quickly'. Russian: Глагол должен согласоваться с подлежащим множественного числа ('keys stay'), и выражение 'very quick quickly' неверно; используйте 'quickly' or 'very quick to...'.

× I think it's a good idea to leave Kissy with a neighbor only if you can fully trust this person and you know him for a very long time, I think it's appropriate to leave Kiss to him, but in other situations I think it's not very safety.

✓ I think it's a good idea to leave keys with a neighbor only if you can fully trust that person and have known them for a long time. I think it's appropriate to leave the keys with them, but in other situations I don't think it's very safe.

Multiple errors: 'Kissy' is incorrect word; should be 'keys'. Pronoun gender: avoid 'him'—use 'them' or 'that person' for neutrality. 'You know him for a very long time' should be present perfect 'have known them for a long time' to indicate duration up to now. 'Not very safety' is wrong; adjective 'safe' is needed. Use 'leave the keys with them' and proper articles. Russian: Замените 'Kissy' на 'keys', используйте нейтральное местоимение 'them', применяйте Present Perfect 'have known' для длительности, и 'safe' вместо 'safety'.