Keys— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid filler words (uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Also correct unclear or irrelevant words (e.g. "justice").

例: Yes, I usually carry several keys. For example, I have keys for my house and for the laboratory at work, because I need to open different rooms and storage cabinets.

提案: Reduce hesitation and make the sequence clear by using linking words (first, later) and concise explanations. Give a brief consequence or feeling to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, I have lost keys twice. First, when I was a child I misplaced our house keys, and later I lost my car keys, which was stressful because I couldn't drive and had to call for help.

提案: Good direct answer and practical detail. Improve by using a linking word and a slightly more natural phrasing; avoid absolute statements like "won't forget it at all."

例: No, I rarely forget my keys. I usually hang my key ring on the door handle so they are visible, which helps me avoid locking myself out.

提案: Good structure (opinion and reason). Remove hesitation, use a clearer linking phrase (however), and be specific about why you prefer a friend (reliability, availability).

例: I used to think it was practical, however now I wouldn't leave keys with a neighbour because I don't know them well. I prefer to give a spare key to a close friend who is reliable and can help in an emergency.

× Some of them are for unlocking my house and the rest are for the lab where I work because I need to uh, open different rooms and storage cabinets.

✓ Some of them are for unlocking my house, and the rest are for the lab where I work because I need to open different rooms and storage cabinets.

The sentence had filler 'uh' but the main grammatical issue is punctuation/structure causing awkward flow rather than a present participle error; however the list requires only errors from the provided types. The present participle 'unlocking' is acceptable here, so the correction improves clarity by adding a comma before 'and the rest' to separate clauses. Suggestion: remove fillers and use proper clause separation for clarity. Note: This entry is included because the instruction 2 limits corrections to listed types; the sentence itself did not require tense or participle changes, so minimal punctuation adjustment was applied.

× Yes, twice, uh, when I was a child, I lost our house keys and later, uh, when I got older, I lost my car's keys, which was really hard because, uh, there is nobody, uh, to unlock it.

✓ Yes, twice. When I was a child, I lost our house keys, and later, when I got older, I lost my car keys, which was really hard because there was nobody to unlock it.

The sentence mixed present tense 'is' with past events. Use past tense consistently: 'there was nobody' refers to past situation. Also remove fillers 'uh' and unnecessary comma placement. Suggestion: keep past-tense verbs consistent and avoid hesitation words.

× No, I am very careful with these. I usually put my key rings on the handle of the door so they are really visible and I won't forget it at all.

✓ No, I am very careful with them. I usually put my key rings on the door handle so they are really visible and I won't forget them at all.

Pronoun 'these' is less natural here; 'them' matches plural 'key rings'. 'Handle of the door' is awkward; 'door handle' is idiomatic. Finally, 'it' incorrectly refers to plural 'key rings'—use 'them'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents and use natural noun phrases.

× Uh, well, to be honest, I used to think it is a practical solution, but nowadays I live in an apartment building where I don't know my neighbors well, so I can not trust them and I prefer to leave my keys with my friend.

✓ Well, to be honest, I used to think it was a practical solution, but nowadays I live in an apartment building where I don't know my neighbors well, so I cannot trust them and I prefer to leave my keys with a friend.

Tense inconsistency: 'used to think' refers to past, so follow with past 'was' not present 'is'. 'Can not' is usually written as 'cannot'. 'My friend' implies one known friend; 'a friend' is more natural if not previously mentioned. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense after 'used to' and use standard modal spelling 'cannot'.