Keys— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific reason using a linking word. Avoid redundancy and small grammar mistakes.

例: No, I don't. I usually carry only the keys I need because having many keys is inconvenient and heavy, so I prefer to keep them to a minimum.

提案: Use past tense correctly and give a brief sequence of events with linking words. Be specific about consequences and feelings, and avoid incorrect grammar.

例: Yes. Last month I lost my bicycle key, so I had to break the lock to get my bike back, which was frustrating and costly.

提案: Correct grammar and vocabulary: use correct verb forms and nouns. Give one clear topic sentence and a supporting reason or example, using linking words to connect ideas. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I often forget my keys, so I try not to carry many. For example, last week I was locked out for an hour because I left my spare key at work.

提案: Organize the answer: start with a clear opinion, then give specific conditions and a brief reason. Use natural vocabulary (trustworthy rather than trustful/faithful) and correct grammar.

例: It depends. If you have a trustworthy neighbour with a good relationship, it's fine to leave a spare key with them because they can help in emergencies.

× Actually not. I don't always bring a lot of keys with me because I find it not suitable for me.

✓ Actually, no. I don't always bring a lot of keys because I find it unsuitable for me.

The sentence uses 'Actually not' which is unnatural; 'no' is better. 'Find it not suitable for me' is awkward; 'find it unsuitable for me' is correct adjective use. Remove redundant 'with me' after 'bring' as 'bring' already implies carrying; keep 'for me' to show personal preference.

× Last month I lost my bicycle keys and I have to broken the locks and it was an undesirable experience for me.

✓ Last month I lost my bicycle keys and I had to break the locks; it was an unpleasant experience for me.

Mixed tenses and wrong verb form: 'have to broken' is ungrammatical. Use past obligation 'had to' plus base verb 'break'. 'Undesirable' is awkward in this context; 'unpleasant' is more natural.

× Actually. Quite frequently I forget my keys and lock, so I doesn't like to bring a lot of kids with me. So it's a very complicated things that I find.

✓ Actually, quite frequently I forget my keys and lock myself out, so I don't like to bring a lot of keys with me. It is a very complicated situation for me.

Multiple errors: 'Quite frequently' should follow 'Actually,' with comma. 'lock' needs object 'myself out' to be clear. 'doesn't' is wrong with subject 'I'; use 'don't'. 'kids' is a typo for 'keys'. 'a very complicated things' has number agreement and article error; use singular 'a very complicated situation'.

× Actually it depends on the situation and also the relationships, how much the neighbor trusted to the people. So I think if the neighbor is trustful and also faithful, you may leave the keys.

✓ Actually, it depends on the situation and on the relationship and how much the neighbor trusts people. So I think if the neighbor is trustworthy and reliable, you may leave the keys with them.

Problems with prepositions and word choice: use 'depends on' and 'on the relationship' (singular) or 'relationships' with context. 'Trusted to the people' is incorrect; use 'trusts people' or 'is trusted by people'. 'Trustful' and 'faithful' are not natural here; use 'trustworthy' and 'reliable'. Also add 'with them' to indicate leaving keys with the neighbor.