Keys— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence saying you do not carry many keys, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because / so). Avoid repeating words and filler sounds. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and correct small grammar mistakes (e.g. “I keep only the original key” instead of “I really keep the the original key”).

例: No, I don't carry many keys. I usually keep only the original house key because I prefer to avoid bulky keychains, so I don't have to carry extra weight or search for the right key.

提案: Give a clear answer and a specific example. Begin with a direct statement (Yes or No), then briefly describe frequency and a short reason or consequence. Use linking words (for example, because / so) and avoid repetition. Limit to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I have lost my keys several times. For example, when I was a student I often misplaced them because I was in a hurry, so I started making spare copies to avoid being locked out.

提案: Answer directly and tell one clear, specific past incident using correct tense and linking words (for example, then / after / so). Avoid hesitation and repetition; keep the story brief and coherent (2–4 sentences). Correct verb forms (e.g. “I left my phone” not “I lo I I left”).

例: Yes, it has happened a few times. Once I left my phone and keys inside my room and only realized it after I went outside, so I had to call the landlord to let me back in.

提案: Give a clear opinion followed by two concise reasons connected with linking words (for example, because / however). Use precise vocabulary (neighbour, trustworthy, stranger) and avoid fillers. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and correct grammar (e.g. “It depends” not “I would say it will depend”).

例: It depends. If the neighbour is trustworthy and lives nearby, it's convenient to leave a spare key with them, but if they are a stranger, it's safer to keep the keys with you to avoid security risks.

× No, that's not my style. I I really keep the the original key with me.

✓ No, that's not my style. I really keep the original key with me.

The sentence contains repetitive words ('I I', 'the the') which are unnecessary and impede clarity. Remove the duplicate pronoun and article to produce a grammatically correct sentence. Also ensure single spacing between words.

× Is it? I would, I admit that it is a bad habit.

✓ I admit that it is a bad habit.

The fragment 'Is it?' is extraneous and creates an awkward sentence structure. Removing it results in a clear declarative sentence. Keep clauses concise to match the intended meaning.

× So like if you if you lost your case or you don't have a copy key, so you don't know what to do, So you have to you have a.

✓ For example, if you lose your keys or don't have a spare key, you won't know what to do, so you will need to call for help.

This sentence has repetition ('if you if you', 'so' multiple times) and incorrect word choice ('lost your case', 'copy key'). Restructure the sentence, use correct verbs and nouns ('lose your keys', 'spare key'), and avoid repeating conjunctions. Complete the final clause to avoid a sentence fragment.

× I would say that's been happening to me all my life.

✓ I would say that has happened to me all my life.

The original uses present perfect continuous ('has been happening') awkwardly for a repeated past action. 'Has happened' is more natural for a recurring experience over one's life. Keep tense consistent with the meaning of repeated past occurrences.

× Like I said earlier, I really keep, I really copy my keys.

✓ Like I said earlier, I usually keep a copy of my keys.

The phrase 'I really copy my keys' is unnatural and contains redundant 'I really'. Use 'usually' to express frequency and 'keep a copy of my keys' for correct wording.

× So does happen to me always. So there's a regular, regular habit to me.

✓ So it always happens to me; it's a regular habit.

The original has incorrect word order ('does happen to me always') and repetition. Reorder to 'it always happens to me' and combine sentences for clarity. Use 'regular habit' without repeating 'regular'.

× Yes I it happened many times.

✓ Yes, it has happened many times.

The sentence combines 'I it' and uses simple past 'happened' with an ongoing relevance. 'It has happened many times' (present perfect) is more appropriate to indicate repeated events up to now. Remove the extra pronoun 'I'.

× One time I was I lo I I left my phone in the room.

✓ One time I left my phone in the room.

There are multiple false starts ('I was I lo I I') creating a disfluent sentence. Remove fillers and repetitions to produce a clean past-tense narrative.

× Then when I get outside I realized that I lost I leave my phone and the keys also.

✓ Then when I got outside, I realized that I had left my phone and my keys inside.

Tense inconsistency: 'get' should be past 'got', and realization occurred after the action, so past perfect 'had left' is appropriate. Also fix word order and remove extra pronoun 'I lost I leave'. Use 'inside' to clarify location.

× So I logged out outside the room.

✓ So I was locked out of the room.

'Logged out' is incorrect in this context. The correct idiom is 'locked out'. Use passive construction 'was locked out' to indicate the state resulting from the action.

× So I need to call the landlord to open for me.

✓ So I needed to call the landlord to let me in.

Mismatch of tense and awkward phrasing: in a past narrative use past 'needed'. Also use 'let me in' rather than 'open for me' for natural English. Modal verb 'need' should match past narrative.

× I would say it will depend because if the niver is your is close to you so I don't see any problems.

✓ I would say it depends, because if the neighbor is close to you, I don't see any problems.

Use 'depends' instead of 'will depend' in this general statement. Correct spelling 'neighbor' and remove extra words. Keep present simple for general truths.

× But you know if the nearby is like totally strange so you better keep with keep the keys with you to avoid like umm potential problems.

✓ But if a nearby person is a complete stranger, you'd better keep your keys with you to avoid potential problems.

'Nearby' is an adjective or adverb, not a noun; use 'a nearby person'. 'Totally strange' is colloquial; 'complete stranger' is clearer. 'You better' should be 'you'd better' for advice. Remove filler words ('like', 'umm') and duplicate 'keep'.