Keys— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сократите и упорядочьте ответ: начните с прямого утверждения, затем добавьте одно-два конкретных пояснения. Избегайте лишних слов и грамматических ошибок (например, „case from house or car“, „parents flat“). Используйте связку для плавного перехода, например «because» или «so».

例: No, I don't. I'm only 16, so I don't have a house or car key yet; I only carry my school keys and a key to my parents' flat.

提案: Упорядочьте рассказ и исправьте ошибки: не путайте слова (например, «kids» → «keys»). Начните с краткого утверждения, затем опишите два случая по очереди с временными маркёрами. Используйте связки («first», «the second time», «after that»).

例: Yes, I have. The first time I lost my keys at school and I found them three days later. The second time they fell into the grass and I never managed to find them.

提案: Сделайте ответ более естественным и точным: исправьте словосочетания («forget my case», «hiring to catch a bus», «return a locksmith»). Начните с краткого ответа, затем приведите конкретный пример с хронологией и результатом. Используйте соединительные слова («especially», «for example», «so»).

例: Yes, occasionally I do, especially when I'm in a hurry in the morning. For example, last month I left my house key on the kitchen table because I rushed to catch a bus, so I had to wait for my roommate to come home and let me in.

提案: Выражайте мнение ясно и стройно: начните с прямого утверждения (Yes/No/both), затем приведите причины «за» и «против» с связками. Избегайте неопределённых фраз («I think bad», «I don't»). Приводите конкретные условия, когда это удобно.

例: I think it can be a good idea in some situations. For example, leaving keys with a trusted neighbour is useful in emergencies or for collecting deliveries. However, I wouldn't do it if I wasn't close to them because of security concerns.

× No because I'm only 16 so I don't have a case from house or car so I take only these for school and from parents flat.

✓ No, because I'm only 16, so I don't have a house or car key case; I only take these keys for school and my parents' flat.

The sentence uses incorrect and unclear pronouns and possessives ('case from house or car', 'from parents flat'). Also punctuation and possessive form are wrong. Suggestion: use 'house or car key case' or simply 'a case for house or car keys', and use the possessive 'my parents' flat'. Add commas to separate clauses. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Yes, there are several situations. When I lost my kids.

✓ Yes, there have been several situations. Once, I lost my keys.

'There are several situations' is awkward; 'have been' fits present perfect. 'I lost my kids' is wrong pronoun/word choice ('kids' vs 'keys') and sentence fragment. Suggestion: replace with 'I lost my keys' and combine into a full sentence. Grammar problem type ID:12

× At first, I lost them at school and I found them after three days.

✓ At first, I lost them at school and found them three days later.

The tense is past and consistent, but phrasing 'after three days' is less natural than 'three days later'. Remove the repeated subject 'I' to improve flow. Grammar problem type ID:5

× At the second time, I lost them in the grass so I couldn't find them.

✓ The second time, I lost them in the grass, so I couldn't find them.

'At the second time' is incorrect word order; use 'The second time'. Also add a comma before 'so'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, occasionally I do forget my case and end up locking myself out, especially when I'm in a rush in the morning.

✓ Yes, occasionally I do forget my keys and end up locking myself out, especially when I'm in a rush in the morning.

'Forget my case' is unclear—use 'forget my keys' for correct object. Pronoun use otherwise fine. Grammar problem type ID:12

× For instance, last month I left my house key on the kitchen table because I was hiring to catch a bus, which meant I had to wait for a roommate to return a locksmith.

✓ For instance, last month I left my house key on the kitchen table because I was hurrying to catch a bus, so I had to wait for a roommate to return with a locksmith.

'Hiring to catch a bus' is incorrect verb choice; use 'hurrying'. 'Return a locksmith' is incorrect—use 'return with a locksmith' or 'call a locksmith'. Also 'which meant' is wordy; 'so' is more natural. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Actually, I think bad.

✓ Actually, I think it's a bad idea.

'I think bad' is incorrect because 'think' requires a noun phrase or clause. Use 'I think it's a bad idea' to express opinion. Grammar problem type ID:13

× It can be very useful for some ways, for example, if you await an emergency or when you need someone to collect deliveries.

✓ It can be very useful in some situations, for example, in an emergency or when you need someone to collect deliveries.

'For some ways' is incorrect collocation; use 'in some situations'. 'Await an emergency' is wrong verb use—use 'in an emergency'. Grammar problem type ID:16

× And I think it's really convenient and Peace of Mind.

✓ I think it's really convenient and gives peace of mind.

'Peace of Mind' capitalized and used as noun alone is awkward. Use 'gives peace of mind' and lower-case. Grammar problem type ID:13

× But if you don't very close with your neighbor, I don't.

✓ But if you are not very close with your neighbor, I wouldn't do that.

The sentence has incorrect verb and pronoun usage: 'don't very close' is ungrammatical; use 'are not very close'. 'I don't' is incomplete—use 'I wouldn't do that' to complete the thought. Grammar problem type ID:12