Keys— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Use more natural phrasing, avoid short hesitations or incorrect words, and keep answer concise (max 5 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Also correct minor grammar and vocabulary choices (e.g., say “Not really” instead of “Not real”).

例: Not really. I rarely carry many keys these days because most buildings use keypad codes or keyless entry systems. For convenience, I usually memorize access codes or unlock doors with my phone, which saves me time and reduces the chance of losing keys.

提案: Organize the story with a clear topic sentence and concise supporting details. Avoid filler words like “uh” and unnecessary repetition. Use linking words (e.g., “so,” “therefore,” “because”) to make the sequence clear, and be specific about consequences and solutions.

例: Yes. When I was in primary school I often forgot my house key, so I had to wait outside until my father returned from work. This was embarrassing and sometimes made him late, so he eventually started leaving a spare key with a neighbour for emergencies.

提案: Reduce hesitations and repetition; give a direct topic sentence then one or two clear supporting sentences. Use past vs. present contrast words (e.g., “used to,” “now”) to show change. Avoid over-explaining and keep it within five concise sentences.

例: I used to when I was a child, but not anymore. Nowadays many places use keyless systems, so I memorize access codes or use my phone and I haven't been locked out in years.

提案: Avoid absolute statements that may sound unrealistic (e.g., “completely trust them” and “that's impossible”). Provide balanced reasoning and a clear recommendation. Use linking words (e.g., “however,” “because,” “therefore”) and be specific about alternatives.

例: Generally I wouldn't recommend leaving a key with a neighbour unless you really trust them, because there is always a small risk it could be lost or misused. Instead, consider keeping a spare in a secure hidden spot or giving it to a close, trusted friend.

× Not real.

✓ Not really.

'Real' is an adjective; the adverb 'really' is needed to modify the verb phrase 'Not really' meaning 'Not usually/No'. Use 'really' to form a correct negative response.

× Nowadays lock technology and security standards have improved, so many doors use keypad codes or keyless entry systems.

✓ Nowadays lock technology and security standards have improved, so many doors use keypad codes or keyless-entry systems.

The original sentence is mostly correct but 'keyless entry' is typically hyphenated when used as a compound modifier before 'systems' ('keyless-entry systems') to improve clarity. This is a style/clarity correction rather than a grammar tense error.

× I rarely carry physical keys, I just memorize the access codes or use my phone to unlock doors.

✓ I rarely carry physical keys. I just memorize the access codes or use my phone to unlock doors.

The original is a comma splice joining two independent clauses with a comma. Replace the comma with a period or use a coordinating conjunction. Also 'memorize' and 'use' are correct present tense verbs to describe habitual actions.

× Yes, when I was in primary school I often forgot my house key so I had to wait outside until my father came back from work to let me in.

✓ Yes. When I was in primary school, I often forgot my house key, so I had to wait outside until my father came back from work to let me in.

Add punctuation and commas to separate clauses for clarity. The past tense verbs 'was', 'forgot', 'had', 'came' are correct for a past habitual event; this correction focuses on punctuation and clause separation rather than tense.

× It was embarrassing and made him late sometimes, so after a while he started leaving the spare key with a neighbor or just put it, uh, in a small corner.

✓ It was embarrassing and sometimes made him late, so after a while he started leaving the spare key with a neighbor or just putting it in a small corner.

Change word order to 'sometimes made him late' for natural flow. Use parallel verb forms: 'started leaving' and 'putting' should be parallel; 'just put it' should be 'just putting it' after 'started' or restructure the sentence. 'In a small corner' is acceptable but 'in a small corner' stays; main issue is verb form parallelism.

× Uh, yes, when I was a kid, but nowadays, uh, we don't use keys anymore, Uh, so we just have to memorize the access codes.

✓ Uh, yes, when I was a kid. But nowadays we don't use keys anymore, so we just have to memorize the access codes.

Avoid comma splice and capitalise 'But' starting a new sentence for clarity. Pronoun 'we' is fine if speaker includes themselves; this correction is about sentence boundaries and capitalization rather than pronoun error.

× So, uh, I, I have never been locked out since, uh, there is no key at all.

✓ So, I have never been locked out since there is no key at all.

Remove filler and extra commas. 'There is no key at all' is grammatically acceptable; no 'there be' problem. This suggestion cleans up redundancy and pauses.

× I don't think it's a good idea to leave your house key with a neighbor unless you completely trust them, and I think that's impossible.

✓ I don't think it's a good idea to leave your house key with a neighbor unless you completely trust them, and I think that's unlikely.

'Impossible' is too strong if you mean 'not advisable' — suggesting 'unlikely' or 'not advisable' is clearer. Pronoun 'them' is acceptable as singular gender-neutral. This correction is word choice rather than strict grammar; it improves accuracy and register.

× Even if you know them, there is the risk the key could be lost, stolen or used without your permission.

✓ Even if you know them, there is a risk that the key could be lost, stolen, or used without your permission.

Use 'a risk' instead of 'the risk' for general possibility and insert 'that' to introduce the clause. Add serial comma for clarity. This fixes article and clause introduction.

× So it's safer to leave a spare in a secure place or use a trusted friend.

✓ So it's safer to leave a spare in a secure place or give it to a trusted friend.

'Use a trusted friend' is awkward; 'give it to a trusted friend' clarifies the action and corrects the verb-object relationship.