Keys— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use correct sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence stating how many keys you carry, then give a brief reason and one supporting detail. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly and avoid redundant phrases.

例: I usually carry just one key when I go out because I only need the house key. For example, I don’t carry a bunch of keys since I prefer to keep my pockets light.

提案: Improve grammar and coherence. Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g., 'No, I have never lost my keys') and then explain specific habits that help you avoid losing them. Use correct verb forms and linking words such as 'because' or 'so' and avoid awkward phrases like 'there any rooms to lose.'

例: No, I have never lost my keys because I am quite anxious about it. I always check my pockets before leaving the house, and I keep my key on a small keyring so it’s harder to misplace.

提案: Give a direct answer and one clear supporting detail. Use correct tense and complete sentences. Link ideas clearly: state you never forget them, explain the habit that prevents this, and conclude briefly.

例: No, I never lock myself out because I always check my pockets before I leave. Also, I keep a spare key in my bag just in case, so I’m well prepared.

提案: Avoid unsupported generalizations and explain your opinion with a calm, logical reason. Provide a clear topic sentence, a relevant reason, and a brief alternative. Avoid mentioning sensitive topics that are irrelevant to the question.

例: I don’t think it’s a good idea to leave keys with a neighbour unless you trust them completely. Instead, I prefer to leave a spare key with a close family member or use a secure key-safe.

× I always bring keys when I go out that I only have one key to take on because the key for house door is only the necessity in my life.

✓ I always bring my keys when I go out, but I only have one key to take because the house key is the only necessity in my life.

Errors: missing possessive adjective with 'keys', incorrect clause 'that I only have one key to take on', 'key for house door' unnatural and article misuse. Suggestions: add 'my' before 'keys', use a contrasting conjunction 'but', simplify to 'I only have one key to take' and use 'the house key' or 'my house key' and 'the only necessity' to fix article and word order issues.

× I've never lost my keys at all because I'm very anxious person.

✓ I've never lost my keys because I'm a very anxious person.

Error: article missing before 'very anxious person' and redundant 'at all' clumsy here. Suggestions: add 'a' before 'very anxious person' and remove 'at all' for naturalness in present perfect contexts.

× When I go out I always check my pocket whether key is there.

✓ When I go out, I always check my pockets to see whether my key is there.

Errors: 'check my pocket whether' incorrect structure, singular/plural mismatch 'pocket' vs typical 'pockets', missing possessive 'my' before 'key'. Suggestions: use 'check my pockets' and 'to see whether my key is there' for correct preposition/phrase and clarity.

× So there any rooms to lose.

✓ So there is no chance of losing them.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. Suggestions: use 'there is no chance of losing them' or 'so there's no room for losing them' but 'no chance' is natural; ensure subject and verb present.

× I never forget the keys because I'm very anxious person as I said before.

✓ I never forget my keys because I'm a very anxious person, as I said before.

Errors: missing possessive 'my', missing article 'a' before 'very anxious person', and comma before 'as I said before'. Suggestions: include 'my keys', 'a very anxious person' and add a comma for sentence flow.

× It is necessary for me to check my pockets to make sure my keys, so it never.

✓ It is necessary for me to check my pockets to make sure I have my keys, so I never forget them.

Errors: sentence fragments 'make sure my keys' and 'so it never' incomplete. Suggestions: complete the clause with 'I have my keys' and finish the result clause 'so I never forget them' to convey meaning.

× I think it's too dangerous to leave my keys with their neighbor.

✓ I think it's too dangerous to leave my keys with a neighbor.

Errors: 'their neighbor' mismatches context and person, and 'a neighbor' is more natural. Suggestions: use 'a neighbor' or 'my neighbor' depending on meaning; avoid 'their' unless referring to someone previously mentioned.

× Recently many immigrants came to Japan and there's no place to be safe, so we should manage my key.

✓ Recently many immigrants have come to Japan, and there is no place that feels completely safe, so I should keep my key secure.

Errors: tense wrong ('came' should be present perfect for recent events), 'there's no place to be safe' unnatural, 'manage my key' unclear and wrong pronoun 'we' then 'my'. Suggestions: use present perfect 'have come', use 'feels completely safe' and 'I should keep my key secure' to clarify personal responsibility and natural phrasing.'