Keys— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar and vocabulary, and avoid repetition and mispronunciations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one short reason. Use correct words (e.g., “keys” not “kisses”) and remove duplicated phrases. Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

例: I usually carry just one key — my house key. I find having many keys uncomfortable, so I prefer to keep them to a minimum.

提案: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence about whether you lost keys, then give a specific example with correct tense and clearer details. Avoid filler words and correct basic grammar (past simple for past events). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and include a time or age if helpful.

例: Yes. When I was a child I often lost my keys while playing outside with friends. I remember one night when we searched until midnight before we finally found them.

提案: Answer directly first (yes/no or rarely), then give a brief, specific example in correct grammar and tense. Remove hesitations and use linking words like “once” or “one time” to structure the story. Use past simple for past events and correct verb forms.

例: I rarely lock myself out. One time at university I accidentally left my key at home, so I called my sister and she brought a spare key to let me in.

提案: Start with a clear opinion (Yes/No/It depends), then give two concise reasons or conditions using linking words (e.g., “if” / “however”). Avoid repetition and finish with a clear recommendation. Use natural phrasing and correct articles.

例: It depends. If you trust your neighbour and they are reliable, it's fine to leave a spare key with them; however, if you are not sure about their trustworthiness, it's safer to use a locked key box or keep a spare with a family member.

× The only key I carry every day is my key to home, so I don't really need to need to bring a lot of key every day.

✓ The only key I carry every day is my house key, so I don't really need to bring a lot of keys every day.

Uses incorrect article and noun form: 'key to home' is unnatural; 'house key' is standard. Also plural 'a lot of key' should be 'a lot of keys'. Use 'house key' and plural 'keys' to match meaning. Suggestion: Say 'house key' or 'key to my house' and use plural 'keys' after 'a lot of'.

× Actually it feels uncomfortable for me to have so many kisses.

✓ Actually it feels uncomfortable for me to have so many keys.

The word 'kisses' is incorrect here (wrong lexical choice); context requires the noun 'keys'. Choose the appropriate word to match meaning. Suggestion: Replace with 'keys' to convey the intended object.

× Yeah, when I was a kid I owe I used to lost my kids very frequent while I'm playing outdoor with my friends and I remember how old I was looking for my key until 12:00 AM with my friends.

✓ Yeah, when I was a kid I used to lose my keys very frequently while I was playing outdoors with my friends, and I remember how long I was looking for my key until midnight with my friends.

Multiple tense and word errors: 'owe' is extraneous; 'used to lost' uses past-tense auxiliary with past participle incorrectly — use base form 'lose' after 'used to'. 'kids' is wrong word; should be 'keys'. 'very frequent' should be adverb 'very frequently'. 'I'm playing' should be past progressive 'I was playing' to match past context. 'outdoor' should be adverb 'outdoors'. 'how old I was' is wrong choice; use 'how long I was' to indicate duration. '12:00 AM' better expressed as 'midnight'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past habits ('used to lose') and correct nouns and adverbs.

× I don't remember umm time I forget the case inside umm Oh yeah, when I was in university student, I forgot my key in my home and I called my sister and she brings me care key.

✓ I don't remember the exact time I forgot the case inside. Oh yeah, when I was a university student, I forgot my key at home and I called my sister and she brought me a spare key.

Tense and article errors: 'don't remember umm time I forget' mixes present and past incorrectly — use 'don't remember the exact time I forgot'. 'university student' needs article 'a university student'. 'forgot my key in my home' is unnatural; use 'forgot my key at home'. 'she brings me care key' uses wrong tense and words — use past 'she brought me' and 'a spare key'. Suggestion: Use 'forgot' for past events and 'brought' for the act of giving in the past; add articles where needed.

× It depends on the occasion. In my opinion. If your neighbor, if your neighbor is a neighbor, feels so safe to you, you of course can leave leave your key in your neighbor's house. But if you are not sure, I will say.

✓ It depends on the situation. In my opinion, if your neighbor is someone you trust, you can, of course, leave your key at your neighbor's house. But if you are not sure, I wouldn't recommend it.

Awkward phrasing, repetition and incomplete sentence: 'It depends on the occasion' is acceptable but 'situation' is more natural. 'In my opinion.' is a sentence fragment; combine with next clause. Redundant 'if your neighbor, if your neighbor is a neighbor' should be simplified. 'feels so safe to you' is incorrect phrase; use 'someone you trust'. Double 'leave leave' is a repetition error. 'leave your key in your neighbor's house' is less idiomatic than 'at your neighbor's house'. Final fragment 'But if you are not sure, I will say.' is incomplete—replace with 'I wouldn't recommend it.' Suggestion: Simplify and complete sentences, avoid repetition, and use natural collocations like 'someone you trust' and 'at your neighbor's house'.