Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify the main idea and correct vocabulary, reduce hesitation and unnecessary words, and use 2–3 coherent sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples and reasons using linking words. Also correct 'mocha' context (coffee/chocolate) and replace unclear phrase 'small cha' with 'small chunks' or 'matcha' if you meant green tea.

例: My favourite flavour is mocha because I enjoy the combination of coffee and chocolate. For example, I often drink mocha lattes and choose mocha cake for desserts. In addition, I like the balance of sweetness and gentle bitterness, which feels satisfying without being overpowering.

提案: Make the tense and grammar consistent and tighten the answer to two sentences: a clear topic sentence about past preference and a follow-up explaining the change with a reason using linking words (e.g., 'but' or 'however'). Avoid verb form errors ('I getting').

例: When I was young, I really liked steak because it tasted richer and more flavorful than other meats we had at home. However, as I grew older I ate it more often, so now it feels less special and I prefer other dishes.

提案: Produce a concise, grammatical response: one clear statement about seasonal changes and one or two specific examples with linking words. Remove filler and correct collocations (e.g., 'cooler foods' or 'to cool down my body').

例: Yes, I tend to choose different foods in summer to cool down. For instance, I often eat ice cream or drink cold beverages, while in winter I prefer hot soups and stews to stay warm.

× Mine is mocha.

✓ Mine is mocha.

No correction needed. The pronoun 'Mine' correctly stands for 'My favourite food' in this context, so keep as is.

× I love products, Uh any product that is made with small cha.

✓ I love any product that is made with mocha.

Original sentence has awkward redundancy and unclear word 'small cha'. This is a sentence structure and word choice issue. Combine phrases and replace the unclear term with 'mocha' to convey meaning clearly. Suggestion: state the idea directly: 'I love any product that is made with mocha.'

× For example mocha tea, mocha cake.

✓ For example, mocha tea and mocha cake.

List items should be connected with 'and' and a comma added after 'For example' for clarity. This fixes sentence structure and punctuation to form a proper list.

× I love the sweet and bitter flavour of mocha.

✓ I love the sweet and bitter flavours of mocha.

Use plural 'flavours' when referring to two different tastes. This fixes adjective/noun agreement: when mentioning multiple distinct tastes, pluralize the noun.

× I used to love steak very much because it tastes so different from other meats that I've tried at home, but as I grew up I feel that I getting too used to it and don't think it's special anymore.

✓ I used to love steak very much because it tasted so different from other meats I had tried at home, but as I grew up I felt I was getting too used to it and didn't think it was special anymore.

Multiple tense problems: 'used to' requires past descriptions, so change 'tastes' to past 'tasted' and 'I've tried' to past perfect 'I had tried' to show earlier experience. Then maintain past narrative: 'I feel' -> 'I felt', 'I getting' -> 'I was getting', and 'don't think' -> 'didn't think.' These changes ensure consistent past-tense narration.

× Do you eat different foods at different times of the year?

✓ Do you eat different foods at different times of the year?

No correction needed. The preposition 'at' with 'times of the year' is correct.

× Sure for hot weather like in summer I will it's something cooler to have a decrease the the my body temperature.

✓ Sure. In hot weather, like in summer, I will choose something cooler to lower my body temperature.

Original sentence has incorrect modal and auxiliary structure ('I will it's'), wrong verb choice ('have a decrease') and article repetition. Use 'will choose' to express future habit and 'to lower my body temperature' for correct verb and phrasing.

× For example I will have ice cream or cold drink.

✓ For example, I will have ice cream or a cold drink.

Insert article 'a' before 'cold drink' for countable noun. The structure 'I will have' is acceptable for future/habitual actions; adding comma after 'For example' improves clarity.