Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and confident; start with a clear topic sentence and add one or two specific reasons or a brief example. Avoid filler words like “and” or “I think” at the beginning.

例: My favourite food is beef. I especially enjoy grilled beef because it has a rich, smoky flavour and tender texture. For example, I like to have it with steamed rice and a spicy dipping sauce.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and then support it with specific details and a complete explanation. Use correct tense and grammar, and avoid leaving sentences unfinished. Include an example of the animal names to make the story vivid.

例: When I was young, I liked eating vegetables. My mother made them fun by giving them animal names, for example she called broccoli “little trees” and spinach “baby horses,” so I was excited to try them.

提案: Organise your answer: state the general idea, then give specific seasonal examples with correct vocabulary. Reduce hesitations and finish your sentences. If you are unsure of a word, describe it instead of pausing.

例: Yes, we eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, in winter we often eat dumplings during Chinese New Year, while in summer we prefer light dishes such as cold noodles or a steamed rice roll called zongzi when celebrating Dragon Boat Festival.

× 'And my favorite food is beef, I think.'

✓ 'My favorite food is beef.'

'I think' is unnecessary and makes the sentence less direct. The sentence is a simple present-state statement, so use the present simple without adding the tentative phrase. To improve, omit unnecessary hedging or place it separately: "I think my favorite food is beef." Also American/British spelling: 'favorite' (US) or 'favourite' (UK) should match speaker preference.'

× 'OK, that is very interesting because when I was young I like to eat vegetables which is really weird for a child.'

✓ 'OK, that is very interesting because when I was young I liked to eat vegetables, which is really weird for a child.'

'When I was young' sets the action in the past so the verb should be in the past tense (liked) rather than the present (like). Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause "which is really weird for a child." To improve, ensure verbs match the time reference: use past tense after "when I was...".'

× 'So I think this is because my mother like to name vegetables with animals names like.'

✓ 'So I think this is because my mother liked to give vegetables animal names.'

'Mother' is singular so the verb must agree: 'mother liked' (past) or 'likes' (present). Because context refers to the past habit, use past tense 'liked.' Also restructure the phrase: 'give vegetables animal names' is idiomatic; 'animals names' is incorrect word order and missing punctuation. To improve, ensure subject-verb agreement and use the correct noun phrase order.'

× 'Of course, uh, at different time of the year, especially in China, we have different, uh, traditions.'

✓ 'Of course, at different times of the year, especially in China, we have different traditions.'

'At different time of the year' is ungrammatical; use the plural 'times' when speaking generally. Remove filler 'uh' and the repeated comma. The present simple 'we have' is correct for general truths. To improve, use 'times' for repeated occasions and avoid filler words.'

× 'Like in the winter we will eat dumplings and uh, uh, in the summer we will eat uh, zones that, that is uh, a kind of, umm, food that.'

✓ 'For example, in the winter we eat dumplings, and in the summer we eat zongzi, which is a kind of food.'

'Zongzi' (traditional rice dumplings) is the likely word; 'zones' is incorrect. Use present simple 'we eat' or 'we will eat' depending on meaning; general traditions are best expressed in present simple. Also correct singular/plural and clause structure: 'which is a kind of food' properly identifies zongzi. Remove filler words. To improve, use the correct noun 'zongzi' and present simple for habitual/traditional actions.'