Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more precise and natural: state the food and then give clear, specific details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "sometimes another thing" and correct article/verb use (e.g., "its ingredients are"). Keep it concise (max 5 sentences).

例: My favourite food is a Turkish dish called Luna. It is a traditional wrap made with roast chicken, a special tangy sauce, lavash bread and mayonnaise. Sometimes it also includes pickled vegetables for extra texture and flavor. I enjoy it because the sauce balances the richness of the chicken.

提案: Use a clear topic sentence and correct vocabulary and grammar. Replace informal fillers like "UMM" and incorrect forms like "sweetie" with "sweet" or specific examples. Explain briefly why you liked them with a linking word (e.g., "because"). Keep it under five sentences.

例: When I was young I liked sweet foods, such as cakes and candy. I still enjoy these treats because I prefer mild flavors and cannot tolerate spicy food. For example, I often choose desserts over spicy snacks.

提案: Answer directly and expand briefly with coherent reasons and linking words. Avoid listing inconsistent items (meats, fish, broccoli) without explanation. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "I tend to avoid certain foods") and correct word forms like "sweet" instead of "sweetie."

例: Not really; my diet stays quite similar throughout the year. However, I tend to avoid certain foods such as meat and fish because they make me feel nauseous. Therefore I usually prefer milder, sweeter foods like pastries and fruits.

× I love Turkish food and my favorite food is Luna. It's a traditional food and its ingredients chicken, a special sauce, lavash and mayonnaise and sometimes another thing.

✓ I love Turkish food and my favorite dish is Luna. It's a traditional dish and its ingredients are chicken, a special sauce, lavash, mayonnaise, and sometimes other things.

The phrase 'my favorite food is Luna' is acceptable but 'favorite dish' is more natural. Missing verb 'are' before the list of ingredients is an instance of sentence structure and verb omission; this falls under definite article/list construction issues. Also use commas to separate list items and 'other things' is more natural than 'another thing'. Suggestion: include the verb 'are' after 'ingredients' and use parallel, properly punctuated list items. (Grammar types applied: 17 Article use for 'a traditional food' -> 'a traditional dish' is stylistic; 26 Sentence structure for missing verb 'are')

× I did like some sweetie food when I was young and I do that now to UMM because I love sweetie things and I don't like spicy things.

✓ I liked sweet foods when I was young and I still do now because I love sweet things and I don't like spicy foods.

Using 'did like' is unnecessary emphatic past; simple past 'liked' is correct. 'Sweetie food' is unidiomatic; use 'sweet foods' or 'sweet things'. 'I do that now to UMM' is unclear and ungrammatical; replace with 'I still do now' to indicate continuation into present. Use plural 'spicy foods' for consistency. Suggestion: use simple past for past habits and present simple for current habits, and choose standard nouns ('sweet foods'). (Grammar type applied: 9 past participle? Actually correction involves past tense and word choice — Primary types: 5 Past tense issue and 13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs.)

× Not really. I avoid several types of food, especially meats, fish, or broccoli.

✓ Not really. I avoid several types of food, especially meat, fish, and broccoli.

List punctuation: do not mix singular/plural inconsistently—'meat' is uncountable here; use 'and' before the final item in a list (Oxford comma optional). Using 'or' is incorrect in this context. Suggestion: use 'and' to join list items and use consistent noun forms. (Grammar type applied: 11 Incorrect use of prepositions/list conjunctions and 1 Singular and plural issue)

× I actually feel nauseous when I eat meat, so I prefer sweetie things.

✓ I actually feel nauseous when I eat meat, so I prefer sweet things.

Use the adjective 'sweet' rather than the informal 'sweetie' when describing types of food. Tense is correct (present simple for general truths). Suggestion: replace colloquial 'sweetie things' with 'sweet things' or 'sweet foods' for natural English. (Grammar type applied: 6 Present tense issue? Primary is 13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs for 'sweetie' but sentence tense is fine.)