Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, avoid repetitions and incomplete sentences, and include a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct grammar (use past/present appropriately) and clear vocabulary (e.g., “pasta” not “pasta” as a verb).

例: My favourite food is pasta. I have loved it since childhood, and I used to ask my mother to cook it for every meal. For example, there is a small restaurant near my home where I go often because their homemade sauce is delicious.

提案: Give a clear direct answer naming the foods and then add a concise reason or habit using linking words. Reduce hesitations and fix grammar (e.g., “I couldn't live without” → “I couldn’t live without”). Mention specific frequency correctly.

例: When I was young I loved ice cream and bubble milk tea. I used to drink bubble tea twice a week because it was a special treat, but now I limit it to avoid health problems.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples tied to festivals using linking words for coherence. Avoid vague phrases and fillers; correct grammar (e.g., “ancestors”, “Moon Festival”, “mooncake”).

例: Yes, I do. We follow traditions and eat special foods during festivals. For example, during the Moon Festival we always eat mooncakes, and at the Lunar New Year we usually prepare rice dumplings and symbolic dishes to celebrate.

× I love pasta since I was little.

✓ I have loved pasta since I was little.

The sentence expresses an action that started in the past and continues to the present, so the present perfect tense is required. Use 'have loved' instead of simple present 'love'. Suggestion: Use present perfect ('have/has + past participle') for actions continuing from past to present.

× I, I, I was just yelling to my mom say I wanna pasta today.

✓ I was just yelling to my mom, saying 'I want pasta today.'

After 'yelling' to indicate the content of the speech, use the gerund 'saying' or a full clause. Also 'wanna' is informal and should be 'want'. Suggestion: Use 'saying' to connect the reporting verb to the quoted content and use standard 'want'.

× I wanna pasta from breakfast, lunch and dinner.

✓ I want pasta for breakfast, lunch, and dinner.

Use standard 'want' instead of 'wanna' and the preposition 'for' to indicate meals. Also include commas in a list. Suggestion: Use 'for' with meal times and avoid colloquial 'wanna' in formal responses.

× And then I have a pocket restaurant I would like to go every single day and then I've been eating there for.

✓ There is a small restaurant I would like to go to every single day, and I have been eating there for years.

The original is ungrammatical: 'pocket restaurant' is unclear, 'I would like to go every single day' needs 'to', and 'I've been eating there for' requires a time expression. Use 'There is' to introduce existence and complete the timeframe. Suggestion: Provide a clear noun phrase ('small restaurant') and finish the duration ('for years/for a long time').

× What kind of food did you like when you were young?

✓ What kind of food did you like when you were young?

No correction needed; question is correct. (No change required.)

× Umm, except pasta.

✓ Well, besides pasta,

A sentence fragment; 'except pasta' should be integrated into a full clause. 'Besides' or 'except for' plus a following clause is clearer. Suggestion: Use 'Besides pasta,' followed by the rest of the sentence.

× Pasta is one of my favorite, but I couldn't live without ice cream.

✓ Pasta is one of my favorites, but I couldn't live without ice cream.

Use 'favorites' plural when saying 'one of my ...' because it refers to one among many. Suggestion: Use plural noun after 'one of my'.

× Ha hold on probably milk tea.

✓ Hold on — probably milk tea.

Add punctuation and phrasing to make it a complete utterance; 'Ha' is filler. Clarify with 'probably'. Suggestion: Use 'Probably milk tea.' or 'Hold on — probably milk tea.' for clarity.

× I, I, I can have like twice a week.

✓ I can have it like twice a week.

Missing object pronoun 'it' referring to milk tea. Include 'it' to complete the verb's object. Suggestion: Use 'have it' when referring back to a previously mentioned item.

× I can, I can head everyday everyday, but I couldn't I I I'm afraid I'm get diabetes so I just trying to control my.

✓ I could go every day, but I'm afraid I'll get diabetes, so I'm trying to control it.

Multiple issues: use 'go' instead of 'head' in this context, 'every day' is two words, future probability 'I'll get' (will + base verb) is needed, and progressive 'I'm trying' plus object 'it' required. 'Could' fits habitual possibility in past/conditional; here 'could' or 'would' is colloquial — 'could go every day' is acceptable. Suggestion: Use 'go every day', write 'every day' as two words, use 'I'll get' for future possibility, and include object 'it' after 'control'.

× Do you eat different foods at different times of the year?

✓ Do you eat different foods at different times of the year?

No correction needed; the question is grammatically correct.

× Umm, yeah, we have a lot of festival and then we have to follow the tradition.

✓ We have a lot of festivals, and we have to follow the traditions.

'Festival' should be plural 'festivals' when saying 'a lot of', and 'tradition' should likely be plural 'traditions' or use 'the tradition' with a specific reference. Also join clauses with comma and conjunction. Suggestion: Use plural nouns with 'a lot of' and ensure noun number matches meaning.

× Umm well, like what is say from my ancestor when they say, oh this festival you have to eat the rice bowl then we have to eat the rice bowl.

✓ Well, according to my ancestors, they said, 'For this festival you have to eat the rice bowl,' so we have to eat the rice bowl.

Problems with verb forms and pronouns: use 'according to my ancestors' (plural), 'they said' for past reporting, and frame the quoted requirement clearly. 'Ancestor' should be plural if referring to more than one. Suggestion: Use clear reporting verbs ('said') and match singular/plural nouns and pronouns.

× Like for example, umm, when is moon festival we have to eat moon cake It's from.

✓ For example, during the Moon Festival we have to eat mooncakes.

Use 'the Moon Festival' with the definite article and 'mooncakes' as a plural noun. Remove unfinished fragment 'It's from.' Suggestion: Use 'the' with named festivals and pluralize 'mooncake' when speaking generally; finish sentences fully.