Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, include a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler sounds and incomplete endings. Mention why it is special and when you eat it, using linking words for coherence.

例: My favourite food is Puran poli, a traditional Maharashtrian flatbread stuffed with a sweet filling made from yellow lentils and jaggery. I especially enjoy it during festivals because it is rich, nostalgic, and shared with family, which makes those occasions feel special.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence about childhood preferences, then give specific examples and link them with reasons. Correct grammar (past tense consistency) and avoid vague phrases like 'St. foods'.

例: When I was young, I loved eating restaurant food, especially pizza and pasta. I looked forward to weekends because my parents would take me out, and those meals felt like a special treat compared with the usual home-cooked food.

提案: Good structure and relevant details. To improve, be slightly more specific (mention particular fruits or soups) and use linking words to contrast seasons more clearly. Keep answers within four sentences and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I change what I eat with the seasons. For example, in summer I prefer fresh fruits like mangoes and watermelons and light salads because they are refreshing, whereas in winter I enjoy hot drinks and hearty soups such as tomato or chicken soup to keep warm.

× I'm Maharashtra and I love Maharashtrian food and my favorite dish is Puran boli which is a flat bread filled with a sweet pest which is made of umm whole grains and jaggery and it tastes amazing and I love to have it on festivals because.

✓ I'm from Maharashtra and I love Maharashtrian food. My favorite dish is Puran poli, which is a flatbread filled with a sweet paste made from whole grains and jaggery. It tastes amazing, and I love to have it during festivals.

The original sentence misuses the pronoun/phrase 'I'm Maharashtra' which should be 'I'm from Maharashtra' to indicate origin. Also 'pest' is a typo for 'paste', and 'Puran boli' is commonly 'Puran poli' or 'Puranboli'; 'flat bread' should be one word 'flatbread'. The long run-on sentence was split for clarity. Suggestions: use 'from' to indicate origin, correct vocabulary ('paste'), and break long sentences into shorter ones for clarity.

× As a child, I didn't have much choice over the food I ate because of the health reasons but I used to love the restaurant foods and St. foods the most.

✓ As a child, I didn't have much choice over the food I ate for health reasons, but I used to love restaurant food and street food the most.

'Because of the health reasons' is awkward; use 'for health reasons'. 'Restaurant foods' and 'St. foods' are incorrect forms; use uncountable 'restaurant food' and 'street food'. Also abbreviating 'street' as 'St.' is wrong. Suggestions: use natural fixed phrases like 'for health reasons' and treat 'restaurant food'/'street food' as uncountable nouns.

× I love pizza and pasta till date and I used to look forward to the weekends because my parents used to Take Me Out.

✓ I still love pizza and pasta, and I used to look forward to weekends because my parents would take me out.

'Till date' is nonstandard in this context; 'still' is more natural. 'Used to' is fine to describe past habitual actions, but 'used to Take Me Out' has incorrect capitalization and repetition; using 'would' is a common alternative for past habitual actions. Suggestions: use 'still' for ongoing preference and 'would' or 'used to' consistently for past habits; fix capitalization.

× Definitely, we eat different food at different time of the year depending on the season and the availability in the market.

✓ Definitely, we eat different foods at different times of the year depending on the season and availability in the market.

'Different food' should be plural 'different foods' because multiple types are implied. 'Different time of the year' should be plural 'different times of the year'. 'The availability' can be simplified to 'availability'. Suggestions: make nouns plural when referring to varieties and use natural collocations 'different times of the year' and 'availability in the market'.

× I usually prefer light and fresh fruits and salads in the summer because it refreshes my body and in winter I love to have hot drinks and soup.

✓ I usually prefer light, fresh fruits and salads in the summer because they refresh my body, and in winter I like to have hot drinks and soup.

The subject 'fruits and salads' is plural, so the verb should be 'they refresh' not 'it refreshes'. Also 'prefer light and fresh fruits' can be tightened to 'prefer light, fresh fruits'. 'I love to have' is acceptable, but 'I like to have' matches tone better. Suggestions: ensure verb agrees with plural subjects and keep adjective order concise.