Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and structured: start with a clear topic sentence naming the dish, give one or two specific reasons (taste, cultural importance), and mention a brief example of when you eat it. Reduce repetition and correct grammar.

例: My favourite food is khinkali, a traditional Georgian dumpling. I love it because of its juicy, savoury filling and the soft, elastic dough. It also has cultural importance for me — my family always eats khinkali together on New Year’s Eve and at Christmas, which makes it feel special.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and organise supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and use past tense consistently since you’re talking about childhood. Give a specific example or short anecdote to make the answer more vivid.

例: As a child I liked both healthy foods and junk food. For example, I often ate fruits and vegetables at home, but I also loved pizza and fries because they tasted delicious and remind me of family outings to fast-food restaurants. These treats are connected to happy childhood memories.

提案: Answer directly and avoid filler words. Use linking words (for example, 'however' or 'when') to make comparisons clear. Be specific about which seasons or occasions affect your diet and give a brief reason.

例: Yes, my diet changes depending on whether I am with my family. When I am at home with my parents we eat healthier meals, such as salads and steamed vegetables, because they encourage a balanced diet. However, when I’m away from home I tend to eat more convenience foods.

提案: Be direct and clear. Use past and present tenses correctly and avoid vague pronouns ('him'). Explain briefly why it has remained your favourite with specific reasons and perhaps one memory. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: No, my favourite food has not changed since I was a child — I have always loved the Georgian dish khachapuri. I still enjoy it because of its warm, cheesy filling and the memories of eating it with my family on weekends. Those flavour and memories keep it special to me.

× As Georgian, I love my culture and our kitchen, so I love King Ali and because this too is really taste, unbelievably taste for me.

✓ As a Georgian, I love my culture and our cuisine, so I love khachapuri; it is really tasty, unbelievably tasty to me.

The original sentence misuses nationality reference and pronouns. 'As Georgian' needs the article 'a'. 'Our kitchen' is better as 'our cuisine'. 'King Ali' appears to be a mistranslation of 'khachapuri' (a Georgian dish); replace with the correct dish name or keep generic. 'because this too is really taste' uses the adjective 'taste' instead of 'tasty' and has redundant connectors. Correction fixes pronoun/article use and adjective form. Suggestion: use 'a Georgian' to indicate nationality, use 'tasty' for describing food, and simplify clauses.

× We in my family, we always eat it on New Year's Eve, Christmas.

✓ In my family, we always eat it on New Year's Eve and at Christmas.

Word order and preposition use were incorrect and 'Christmas' needs a preposition 'at' to indicate the time. Also combine occasions with 'and'. Suggestion: start with 'In my family' and use 'on' for New Year's Eve and 'at' for Christmas.

× When I was young, I love the fruit and vegetables but I always but I always love the junk food like pizzas, fries, burgers because it is so tasty for me and it reminds me my childhood memories.

✓ When I was young, I loved fruit and vegetables, but I always loved junk food like pizza, fries, and burgers because they were so tasty to me and they remind me of my childhood.

Tense inconsistency: main clause is past 'When I was young' so verbs should be past ('loved') not present ('love'). 'Fruit and vegetables' can be uncountable/plural; 'fruit' often uncountable. 'Pizzas' better as 'pizza' in general; 'it is so tasty' should agree in number with plural foods ('they were so tasty'). 'Reminds me my childhood memories' needs 'remind me of my childhood' or 'bring back childhood memories'. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout and use correct plural agreement and 'remind me of'.

× When I'm with my family, my parents encourages the healthy lifestyle.

✓ When I'm with my family, my parents encourage a healthy lifestyle.

Subject 'my parents' is plural, so the verb should be 'encourage' not 'encourages'. Also use 'a healthy lifestyle' (article) and remove 'the' which implies a specific lifestyle. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and use appropriate articles.

× So, uh, when I'm with my family, we usually eat umm, healthier than my other days of week.

✓ So, when I'm with my family, we usually eat healthier than on my other days of the week.

'Healthier' is correct comparative, but the preposition and noun phrase are incorrect: use 'on my other days of the week' or better 'on other days of the week'. Also remove filler words. Suggestion: use 'on' before days and 'other days of the week'.

× When I'm not with my family, uh, but uh, in my family we eat fruits and vegetables a lot.

✓ When I'm not with my family, I don't, but in my family we eat a lot of fruit and vegetables.

Sentence is disfluent and pronoun/reference is unclear. 'Fruits' often used as 'fruit' in general; better to say 'we eat a lot of fruit and vegetables'. Clarify contrast: 'When I'm not with my family, I don't' (eat healthily) or rephrase fully. Suggestion: complete the contrast and avoid repetition.

× No, uh, it hasn't changed in my childhood.

✓ No, it hasn't changed since my childhood.

Use 'since' to indicate from that time to now. 'In my childhood' is grammatically possible but 'since my childhood' better fits 'hasn't changed'. Tense 'hasn't changed' (present perfect) is correct to describe change from past to present. Suggestion: use 'since' for time starting point.

× I loved about him.

✓ I loved it.

'Loved about him' is incorrect because food is an 'it', not 'him', and 'loved about' is not used. Use 'I loved it' or 'I loved that dish'. Suggestion: refer to the dish with 'it' or its name.

× This is Georgian dish and now my favorite umm meal is also adding because it is uh, great for me.

✓ This is a Georgian dish, and now my favorite meal is still the same because it is great for me.

Missing article 'a' before 'Georgian dish'. 'Is also adding' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'is still the same' or 'remains the same'. Remove unnecessary fillers. Suggestion: use correct articles and clearer verbs like 'remains' or 'is still'.

× It tastes so good and it's reminds me the great tastes on weekend.

✓ It tastes so good and it reminds me of the great tastes from the weekend.

'It's reminds' is wrong: contraction with 'is' plus verb 'reminds' causes double auxiliary; should be 'it reminds'. Also 'reminds me the great tastes' needs 'reminds me of' and 'on weekend' needs article 'the' or 'on weekends' or 'from the weekend'. Suggestion: use 'it reminds me of' and correct verb form 'reminds'.