Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct redundancy and grammar, and add one specific detail about why you like it (e.g. aroma, texture, how it’s cooked). Use linking words for coherence.

例: My favourite food is rice with spicy meat. I especially enjoy it because the meat is marinated with garlic and chili, which gives it a strong aroma and a rich, savory flavour. Also, the soft rice balances the spicy meat, making each bite enjoyable.

提案: Use past tense consistently and give a clear topic sentence. Eliminate repetition and fillers, and add a specific reason or memory to make the answer richer. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly.

例: When I was young, I loved ice cream. I enjoyed it because it was very sweet and came in many colours and flavours, and I remember getting a cone every weekend as a treat.

提案: Answer the question directly and in the correct tense. Provide a clear statement about seasonal differences (now vs past), avoid rambling, and give one or two specific examples of foods you eat in different seasons with a linking phrase like 'in summer' or 'during winter'.

例: Yes. As a teenager I often ate sugary, colourful snacks, especially in summer when ice cream was popular. Now I prefer seasonal fruits and warm soups in winter because they feel healthier and more comforting.

提案: Give a clear, complete sentence stating the change and explain why with specific reasons. Use correct grammar (past vs present) and avoid trailing off. Include linking words such as 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I preferred sweet and colourful snacks, but now I prefer savoury, well-seasoned dishes because I value healthier ingredients and stronger flavours.

× My favorite food is rice with the meat.

✓ My favorite food is rice with meat.

Using the definite article 'the' before a non-specific noun like 'meat' is incorrect here. Say 'rice with meat' to refer to meat in general. Remove 'the' to make the noun uncountable and generic.

× I like this meal very, very much, uh, because, uh, it, uh, is uh, spicy and uh, delicious.

✓ I like this meal very much because it is spicy and delicious.

The original has filler sounds and repeated words that disrupt sentence flow. Remove fillers ('uh') and redundant repetition ('very, very') to form a clear declarative sentence. Ensure conjunction 'because' connects clause to a single clean clause.

× I and delicious.

✓ (delete fragment)

'I and delicious' is an incomplete fragment with no verb or clear meaning. Delete it or combine with the previous sentence (already corrected) to avoid sentence fragments.

× When I was a child, I like, I like it.

✓ When I was a child, I liked it.

The time expression 'When I was a child' refers to the past, so the past tense 'liked' must be used instead of present 'like'. Remove repetitions and use past tense for consistency.

× I like it ice cream very, very much because it is it has a lot of sugar and different color.

✓ I liked ice cream very much because it had a lot of sugar and different colors.

Combine and simplify: use past tense 'liked' and 'had' to match past time reference. 'A lot of' is correct with 'sugar' (uncountable). 'Different color' should be plural 'different colors' when referring to multiple colors. Also remove the extra 'it'.

× Yes, uh, in when I was umm, uh, teenager, I like, uh, I like it, uh, eat uh, food with a lot of sugars and uh, the colorful, but uh, when I was uh.

✓ Yes. When I was a teenager, I liked to eat foods with a lot of sugar and bright colors, but...

'When I was a teenager' sets past time so use past tense 'liked' and 'to eat'. 'A lot of sugars' is incorrect; 'a lot of sugar' (uncountable) is correct. 'The colorful' is ungrammatical—use 'bright colors' or 'colorful appearance'. The sentence also contained many fillers and an unfinished final clause; keep structure clear and complete or indicate continuation with 'but...'.

× because it is it has a lot of sugar and different color.

✓ because it had a lot of sugar and different colors.

This repeats earlier issue: with past context use 'had'. 'Different color' should be plural 'different colors' when meaning various colors. Also remove duplicated 'it is it has'.

× Yes, of course, because when I. Child that I love I love the food with a lot of sugar and colorful but nowadays I like food with the a lot of.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child I loved food with a lot of sugar and bright colors, but nowadays I like healthier food.

Fix sentence fragments and tense: 'When I was a child' requires past tense 'loved'. 'Colorful' needs a noun ('bright colors') or adjective before a noun. 'Food with the a lot of' is ungrammatical—replace with a clear phrase such as 'healthier food' to complete the contrast. Remove punctuation errors and run-ons.

× When I was a child, I like, I like it ice cream very, very much because it is it has a lot of sugar and different color.

✓ When I was a child, I liked ice cream very much because it had a lot of sugar and different colors.

This addresses pronoun repetition 'it is it has' which is redundant and incorrect. Use a single clause with appropriate past tense verbs. Also correct agreement and plurality for 'colors'.