Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural: state the food confidently, correct vocabulary and grammar, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also limit to 3–4 sentences. For example, say the dish name correctly, explain why you like it, then give a concrete example (ingredients or how you eat it).

例: My favourite food is hotpot because I can customise the broth and add a variety of nutritious ingredients. For instance, I usually choose a mild broth and add mushrooms, leafy greens and sliced potatoes to make it more balanced. I also enjoy sharing it with friends because it is social and warming.

提案: Good direct answer and clear reason. Improve by adding a linking phrase and one specific example or brief comparison to current habits, and keep it within 3 sentences for concision.

例: When I was young I loved junk food, especially chocolate bars and sweet candies. However, as I got older I cut down on them because they made me feel unwell and I learned about their health risks. Now I prefer fresh fruit or homemade snacks instead.

提案: Organise answer with a clear topic sentence and two concise supporting points linked with connectors. Correct grammar (e.g. "hotpot", "feel comforting" → "is comforting", "on those days") and avoid filler words. Give precise seasonal examples and one festival dish name.

例: Yes, I eat differently through the year. For example, in winter I enjoy hotpot because it keeps me warm and comforting, and in summer I prefer light salads to stay cool. Also during festivals like Lunar New Year I eat traditional dumplings that have cultural meaning.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and then specific contrasting examples. Correct grammar ("favourite food has changed") and avoid listing many items without structure. Explain briefly why preferences changed (health, taste, experiences) using a linking word.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since childhood. I used to like sweet fruits like kiwi and strawberries and fast food such as hamburgers and pizza, but now I prefer healthier and more varied dishes like rice noodles and vegetable-based meals because I care more about nutrition.

× That's hard to say, but if I had to pick one, I'd choose hot spots because I can customize the favor of both and add different nutritional ingredients.

✓ That's hard to say, but if I had to pick one, I'd choose hot pots because I can customize the flavor of both and add different nutritious ingredients.

The sentence contains word choice errors: 'hot spots' should be 'hot pots' (wrong noun) and 'favor' should be 'flavor'. 'Nutritional' describes information, while 'nutritious' better describes ingredients that provide nutrients. Use of correct vocabulary improves clarity and meaning. Suggestion: learn common food vocabulary and collocations (e.g., 'hot pot', 'flavor', 'nutritious'). Practice word choice in context.

× For example, I often put in vegetables such as potatoes.

✓ For example, I often add vegetables such as potatoes.

The phrasal verb 'put in' is informal and awkward here; 'add' is the appropriate verb to describe including ingredients. Also 'put in vegetables' is acceptable but 'add vegetables' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'add' when talking about including ingredients in food.

× When I was young I really liked junk food, especially chocolate and sweet candies.

✓ When I was young, I really liked junk food, especially chocolate and sweets.

'Sweet candies' is redundant and non-idiomatic in English; 'sweets' or 'candies' is preferred. Comma after introductory clause improves punctuation. Tense 'liked' is correct (past) so only word choice and punctuation were adjusted. Suggestion: use 'sweets' for general reference to sugary treats.

× As I grew up I stopped eating them because I learned they are bad for my health and often made me feel unwell.

✓ As I grew up, I stopped eating them because I learned they were bad for my health and often made me feel unwell.

Sequence of tenses: the main clause is in the past ('stopped'), so the subordinate clause should use past tense 'were' to match time frame. Comma after introductory clause improves clarity. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent when narrating past events.

× Sometimes I do, for example I like to eat hot spots in winter because it keeps me warm and feel comforting.

✓ Sometimes I do. For example, I like to eat hot pots in winter because they keep me warm and feel comforting.

Multiple issues: 'hot spots' -> 'hot pots' (vocabulary). Subject-verb agreement: 'it keeps me' refers to 'hot pots' (plural), so use 'they keep me'. 'Feel comforting' is awkward; better 'feel comforted' or 'are comforting'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches noun and choose correct adjective form ('comforting' for something that causes comfort, 'feel comforted' for the person).

× Umm and also I like when there are some special festival, I like to eat the food which have special meaning on that days.

✓ I also like when there are some special festivals; I like to eat the foods which have special meaning on those days.

Several errors fixed: 'some special festival' should be plural 'some special festivals' (number agreement). 'the food' changed to 'the foods' to match plural festivals and 'which have' needs plural verb. 'that days' should be 'those days'. Punctuation improved by splitting into clearer clauses. Suggestion: match singular/plural consistently and use 'those' for plural demonstratives.

× Yes, my favorite food have changed a lot since I was a child.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed a lot since I was a child.

Subject-verb agreement: 'food' as an uncountable singular noun takes singular verb 'has', not 'have'. If speaking of multiple foods, use 'foods have'. Suggestion: determine whether subject is singular or plural and use appropriate verb form.

× I remember that. I used to love Kiwi, strawberries and the hamburger and the pizza and hot spots and the rice noodles.

✓ I remember that. I used to love kiwifruit, strawberries, hamburgers, pizza, hot pots, and rice noodles.

Several pluralization and noun form issues: 'Kiwi' should be 'kiwifruit' or 'kiwi' lowercase; if listing multiple items, use plural forms like 'strawberries' and 'hamburgers'. Articles 'the' are unnecessary before many food items in a list. 'hot spots' -> 'hot pots'. Consistent pluralization improves fluency. Suggestion: when listing favorite foods historically, use plural forms for countable items and omit 'the' unless referring to a specific item.