Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words (uh), and use appropriate grammar and specific details (ingredients, flavours, occasions). Keep answer within 3–4 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: My favourite food is chicken biryani. It’s a famous Pakistani dish made of fragrant basmati rice layered with spiced chicken, caramelized onions, and yogurt-based masala. Because of its rich aroma and balanced spices, I often eat it on special family occasions or weekends.

提案: Clarify the dish and correct vocabulary mistakes; avoid vague phrases and fillers. Give a topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details (how it was prepared, why you liked it), and a closing remark. Use linking words like because or especially.

例: When I was young I often ate Chinese-style chicken made by my mother. She stir-fried chicken with vegetables and a sweet-savory sauce, which I loved because it was crispy and slightly tangy. I especially remember enjoying it at family dinners with a cold soda.

提案: Organize answer with a clear structure: state the general pattern, then give concrete seasonal examples and reasons. Remove unclear words (e.g., 'Affordable') and fillers, and use linking words (for example, in contrast).

例: Yes, I change what I eat depending on the season. For example, in summer I prefer light meals such as salads or Singapore rice and I often dine out with my family. In contrast, during winter I choose warmer, hearty dishes and prefer eating indoors to stay comfortable.

提案: Be accurate and specific: start with a clear statement about change, explain reasons with specific examples (which spicy foods, what milder meals), and correct grammar (tense and count/agreement). Avoid filler sounds and unclear phrases like 'flour food' — use correct words.

例: Yes, my tastes have changed. When I was younger I often ate very spicy foods such as chilli curries and fried snacks, but now I prefer milder, balanced meals like grilled chicken with steamed vegetables because they are gentler on my stomach.

× Food My favorite dish is chicken biryani.

✓ My favorite dish is chicken biryani.

The sentence begins with an extraneous word 'Food' which is not needed and creates a sentence fragment. Remove 'Food' to make a complete, grammatical sentence. Also ensure the sentence starts with a subject 'My' followed by the verb 'is'.

× I would say it is one of the most popular cuisine in Pakistan.

✓ I would say it is one of the most popular cuisines in Pakistan.

The phrase 'one of the most' requires a plural noun after it. 'Cuisine' should be pluralized to 'cuisines' because you are referring to chicken biryani as one among many popular cuisines.

× In India it is a matter of with uh using of different spices like layer of rice, chicken and ingredients.

✓ In India, it is often made with different spices and layers of rice, chicken, and other ingredients.

Original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect preposition usage ('matter of with', 'using of'). Rephrase to 'made with' and use plural 'layers' and include 'other' before 'ingredients' for clarity. Add comma after introductory phrase 'In India'.

× Overall the dish it gives delicious taste and aroma.

✓ Overall, the dish gives a delicious taste and aroma.

The subject is duplicated ('the dish it gives'). Remove the extra pronoun 'it' and add the article 'a' before 'delicious taste'. Include a comma after 'Overall' for correct punctuation.

× During my childhood, I remember I used to eat chicken Chinese most often.

✓ During my childhood, I remember I used to eat Chinese-style chicken most often.

Word order and adjective use are incorrect: 'chicken Chinese' should be 'Chinese chicken' or 'Chinese-style chicken'. 'Used to' correctly indicates habitual past; keep past tense. Clarify adjective-noun order.

× My mother used to make it uh, with using of different ingredients on it.

✓ My mother used to make it using different ingredients.

'With using of' and 'on it' are incorrect. Use 'using different ingredients' or 'with different ingredients'. Remove filler 'uh' and redundant preposition 'on it' to make the sentence concise and grammatical.

× And at the same time, I really enjoyed eating this dish, especially with coke.

✓ At the same time, I really enjoyed eating this dish, especially with Coke.

Sentence is mostly correct but 'Coke' is a brand name and should be capitalized. Also remove leading 'And' for a more formal response; 'At the same time' suffices.

× Overall, the test was delicious.

✓ Overall, the taste was delicious.

'Test' is a typographical or pronunciation error; context requires 'taste'. Correct the noun to 'taste' to convey meaning.

× Yes, uh, it depends on my mood as well as the weather condition.

✓ Yes, it depends on my mood as well as the weather.

Remove filler 'uh' and use the uncountable noun 'weather' rather than 'the weather condition' for natural phrasing.

× Affordable.

✓ (Remove fragment)

'Affordable.' appears as an isolated fragment unrelated to the question. It should be removed or integrated into a complete sentence, for example: 'Cost is also a factor.' Fragments without a verb are ungrammatical.

× If there is summer season, I like to spend more time with my family by dining out with them, by, uh, trying some special seasonal foods like salad, uh, Singapore rice.

✓ If it is the summer season, I like to spend more time with my family by dining out and trying some special seasonal foods like salad and Singapore rice.

Use 'the summer season' or 'summer' rather than 'there is summer season'. Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary repetition of 'by'. Use 'and' to connect items and include articles appropriately.

× Or the other hand, whenever there's winter season, I like to eat in indoor places.

✓ On the other hand, whenever it's winter, I like to eat indoors.

Use the correct phrase 'on the other hand'. Say 'it's winter' or 'the winter' not 'winter season'. 'Eat indoors' is the natural prepositional phrase, not 'eat in indoor places'.

× Yes, over the time my my eating habits has changed a lot.

✓ Yes, over time my eating habits have changed a lot.

Use 'over time' (not 'over the time'). Subject 'eating habits' is plural so verb should be 'have changed' (subject-verb agreement). Remove duplicate 'my'.

× In the past I usually prefer to eat spicy food because they were flour food, but now as being adult I like to prefer to eat more miter meals because they do not upset my stomach.

✓ In the past I usually preferred to eat spicy food because it was flavorful, but now as an adult I prefer to eat milder meals because they do not upset my stomach.

Tense consistency: use past tense 'preferred' for past habits. 'Spicy food' as a singular category takes singular verb 'it was flavorful' or better rewrite to 'because it was flavorful'. 'Flour food' is incorrect — likely 'flavorful'. 'As being adult' is ungrammatical; use 'as an adult'. 'Miter' is misspelling of 'milder'. Also use 'prefer' (not 'like to prefer') for natural phrasing.