Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details (flavour, ingredients, when you eat it), and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas. Also aim to keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: My favourite food is chicken biryani because of its rich blend of spices and tender meat. I often choose it when I’m very hungry since it’s filling and satisfying. For example, I enjoy it most at family gatherings where the aroma and flavours make it feel like comfort food.

提案: Organise the answer with a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Mention one specific childhood favourite and explain briefly why you liked it, using linking words to make it coherent. Correct grammar mistakes (e.g., avoid duplicate phrases) and keep it concise.

例: When I was young I was very picky about food, but I especially liked curd because it felt cool and easy to eat. My mother often worried I wasn’t eating properly, yet I would always ask for curd with my meals because it was mild and comforting.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, then provide specific examples with correct seasonal matches and linked reasons. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like "for example" and "because" to show logic and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I usually eat different foods according to the season, especially seasonal fruits. For example, in summer I eat mangoes because they are sweet and refreshing, while in winter I prefer oranges and guavas for their vitamin C. Eating seasonally helps me enjoy fresher and cheaper produce.

提案: Provide a concise topic sentence then specific contrasts with examples and a linking phrase to explain the change. Mention one or two concrete examples of foods you ate then and now to make the answer vivid and specific.

例: Yes, my tastes have changed: as a child I ate a lot of junk food like chips and fast food, but now I focus on healthier choices such as grilled chicken and salads. For instance, I used to prefer burgers, but today I choose a home-cooked meal because I prioritise my long-term health.

× 'It is an amazing rice item with spices.'

✓ 'It is an amazing rice dish flavored with spices.'

'Rice item' is not natural English; 'rice' is uncountable and 'dish' is the correct countable noun. 'Flavored with spices' is a more idiomatic way to describe seasoning.'

× 'I prefer chicken biryani over any other biryani and it almost immediately takes away my hunger and it is my comfort food.'

✓ 'I prefer chicken biryani to other varieties; it almost immediately takes away my hunger and is my comfort food.'

'Prefer' is correct but collocation is 'prefer A to B', not 'prefer A over any other B'. Repeated 'it' is redundant; combine clauses and use semicolon or conjunction. Third-person singular verb 'takes' is correct.'

× 'I do not remember much from my childhood as I was a very picky as I was very picky about food.'

✓ 'I do not remember much from my childhood because I was very picky about food.'

Duplicate phrase 'as I was a very picky' is a repetition and ungrammatical. Use 'because' to link reason and remove redundant words. 'Picky' needs the preposition 'about' for the object.'

× 'I never used to eat properly.'

✓ 'I did not use to eat properly.'

'Used to' in negative form is normally written 'did not use to' (or 'never used to' is acceptable conversationally). 'I never used to eat properly' is passable, but 'I did not use to eat properly' is grammatically clearer in formal writing.'

× 'My mother always used to complain but the thing that the food that I enjoyed the most I think I would say curd which I hate now.'

✓ 'My mother always complained, but the food I enjoyed most was curd, which I dislike now.'

Sentence has multiple structural problems and incorrect conjunction use. 'Used to' with 'always' is redundant; simple past 'complained' is clearer. Remove extra relative clauses and reorder: 'the food I enjoyed most was curd' and add comma before 'which'. 'Hate' can be softened to 'dislike' for tone.'

× 'As I live in India, the foods that are available at different types of years are fruits mainly.'

✓ 'As I live in India, the foods available at different times of the year are mainly fruits.'

Incorrect phrases 'at different types of years' should be 'at different times of the year' or 'in different seasons'. Also move 'mainly' to modify 'fruits' correctly.'

× 'So I eat seasonal fruits.'

✓ 'So I eat seasonal fruits.'

This sentence is grammatically correct in present simple to describe habitual action; no change required.'

× 'For example, in summer I eat mango, in winter I eat some other fruit like watermelon.'

✓ 'For example, in summer I eat mangoes; in winter I eat fruits such as watermelon.'

Use plural 'mangoes' for habitual statements and parallel structure for the second clause. 'Some other fruit like watermelon' is vague; 'fruits such as watermelon' is clearer.'

× 'Uh, so, so mainly seasonal fruits are available in India and the one thing that is available in.'

✓ 'Mainly seasonal fruits are available in India.'

The original is fragmented, repetitive and ends abruptly. Remove filler 'uh, so, so' and the incomplete clause to produce a complete, clear sentence.'

× 'Yes, I would definitely say my taste changed from my childhood to now.'

✓ 'Yes, I would definitely say my taste has changed from my childhood to now.'

Present perfect 'has changed' is appropriate to link past change with present relevance, rather than simple past 'changed.' 'Would definitely say' is acceptable but 'I would definitely say that' could be used; main correction is tense.'

× 'And now as I'm an adult I think I am focusing more on healthy foods.'

✓ 'Now, as an adult, I think I am focusing more on healthy foods.'

Grammar is largely correct; add commas for clarity and remove contraction if formal. Present continuous 'am focusing' is acceptable because it indicates current ongoing preference.'

× 'While I was younger I preferred junk foods.'

✓ 'When I was younger, I preferred junk food.'

Use 'when' rather than 'while' for simple time clause here and use uncountable 'junk food' when speaking generally. Add comma after the time clause for clarity.'

× 'As I am growing up, I am prioritizing my health over my taste buds.'

✓ 'As I am growing older, I am prioritizing my health over my taste buds.'

'Growing up' usually refers to becoming an adult from childhood; if speaker is already adult, 'growing older' is more natural. Present continuous 'am prioritizing' is fine for ongoing action.'