Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your favourite food, then give one or two specific examples and a short reason. Avoid asking the examiner questions and unnecessary items (e.g. calling a food a drink). Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use correct names.

例: My favourite food is Indian cuisine, especially dishes like dal makhani and matar paneer because I love rich, creamy sauces. I also enjoy appetizers such as samosas and golgappas for their spicy, tangy flavours.

提案: Use past tense consistently and be more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence about your childhood preferences, then give a brief reason or contrast with examples. Limit list length and use linking words like 'because' or 'and' to connect ideas.

例: When I was young I liked different kinds of food, especially pizza and pasta because they were easy to eat. I also enjoyed spicy snacks like samosas and golgappas, which I ate at festivals.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: use present tense for habitual actions and provide clearer seasonal examples. Start with a direct sentence, then give specific summer and winter examples linked with 'for example' or 'in contrast'. Correct names and phrasing (e.g. 'makki di roti', 'saag').

例: Yes, I usually eat different foods each season. For example, in summer I eat ripe mangoes and light salads, while in winter I enjoy hearty dishes like sarson ka saag with makki di roti.

提案: Be concise, consistent in tense, and avoid informal fillers. Begin with a clear statement about change, give a brief reason and an example of current preference. Correct awkward phrases and reduce repetition (e.g. 'pizza to go').

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I loved pasta, but now living in Canada I often prefer pizza because it’s convenient when I don’t feel like cooking, so I sometimes order from a local pizzeria.

× My favorite food is Indian cuisine. Do you like Indian cuisine? For example, Dal makhani, matar paneer. If I talk about the appetizers, I just know samosa, chaat, dahi, balli, golgappa as a drink.

✓ My favorite food is Indian cuisine. Do you like Indian cuisine? For example, dal makhani and matar paneer. If I talk about appetizers, I only know samosa, chaat, dahi bhalla, and golgappa (as a snack).

The phrase 'I just know' is informal and unclear; 'only know' is more appropriate. 'As a drink' is incorrect for golgappa and other snacks; golgappa is a snack, so specify '(as a snack)'. Also use 'and' to join items and lowercase typical dish names. Suggestion: use clear inventory language (e.g., 'I only know...') and ensure items are correctly labeled (drink vs snack).

× When I was young, I like different kind of food such as pizza, pasta, burger, samosa, chaat, golgappa which are full of tangy and spicy taste.

✓ When I was young, I liked different kinds of food such as pizza, pasta, burgers, samosa, chaat, and golgappa, which were full of tangy and spicy flavours.

The main clause refers to the past ('When I was young'), so the verb should be past tense 'liked' (present tense 'like' is incorrect). 'Different kind of' should be plural 'different kinds of'. Plural nouns like 'burgers' match 'kinds'. The relative clause should use past tense 'were'. Also add commas and 'and' for list clarity. Suggestion: match verb tenses and plural forms to the time context and use consistent list punctuation.

× Yes, in India I ate different foods at different times of the year. For example, during summers I ate mango, different kind of vegetables. But in winter I ate the favor all of one of the favorite saag with maki di roti.

✓ Yes, in India I ate different foods at different times of the year. For example, during summer I ate mangoes and different kinds of vegetables. But in winter I ate my favourite saag with makki di roti.

Tense 'ate' is correct for past, but there are plurality and word choice errors: use 'summer' (not 'summers') when speaking generally, 'mangoes' plural, and 'different kinds of vegetables' for correct quantifier and noun agreement. The phrase 'favor all of one of the favorite saag' is garbled; replace with 'my favourite saag' for clarity. Suggestion: simplify phrases, use correct plurals and standard collocations ('saag with makki di roti').

× Of course, when I was a child, my favorite food was pasta, but nowadays here in Canada, I really like pizza whenever I do not have to move for cooking. So that time I usually order pizza from pizza to go. Actually, they really cook the well pizza and.

✓ Of course, when I was a child, my favorite food was pasta, but nowadays here in Canada I really like pizza when I do not feel like cooking. At those times I usually order pizza from Pizza To Go. Actually, they make really good pizza.

Several tense and phrasing issues: 'whenever I do not have to move for cooking' is unnatural; use 'when I do not feel like cooking' (present habitual). 'So that time' should be 'At those times'. 'Order pizza from pizza to go' needs capitalization and correct name 'Pizza To Go'. 'They really cook the well pizza and.' is ungrammatical; use 'they make really good pizza.' Suggestion: use natural English collocations for habits ('feel like cooking', 'order from'), correct restaurant names, and simple adjective phrase order ('really good pizza').