Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details (ingredients, why you like it) using linking words. Reduce fillers (umm, you know) and avoid repeating phrases.

例: My favourite food is mohinga, a traditional Burmese dish. It is a rice-noodle soup made with fish broth and served with various toppings like fried onions and lime, which I love because the flavours are rich and comforting.

提案: Organize the answer: give a clear topic sentence about the snack, then describe it specifically and say why it is memorable. Avoid unclear words and fillers; use correct vocabulary for the food and sensory details.

例: As a child I loved a traditional snack called mobiya (a type of pancake). It is a small rice pancake topped with sweetened beans, and I remember it fondly because the warm, slightly sweet taste always made me feel at home.

提案: Make the answer specific and structured: state directly whether you change food seasonally or not, then give one or two concrete examples and use linking words (for example, in summer, during festivals). Remove hesitations and complete your sentence endings.

例: Yes, I do eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, in the rainy season I prefer warm soups like mohinga, while in summer I choose lighter dishes such as cold salads. Also, during festivals I try special seasonal sweets with my family.

提案: Answer directly and provide a clear reason. State that it hasn’t changed, then give one or two concise reasons with linking words. Correct sentence structure and avoid repetition and fillers.

例: No, my favourite foods have not changed. Mohinga and mobiya remain my favourites because they remind me of home and childhood; moreover, their comforting flavours are something I still enjoy today.

× it is basically combination with noodle and bean soup.

✓ It is basically a combination of noodles and bean soup.

Use of prepositions and articles is incorrect. 'Combination with' should be 'combination of' to show what is combined. Also include the article 'a' before 'combination' and pluralize 'noodle' to 'noodles' because multiple noodles are implied.

× When I was a child, I used to eat umm, you know, traditional dish, traditional snack, umm, which is called Mobiya the lad.

✓ When I was a child, I used to eat traditional dishes and snacks, such as one called Mobiya the lad.

Wrong word forms and punctuation make the sentence unclear. Use plural 'dishes and snacks' instead of repeating 'traditional' and replace the vague clause with 'such as' to introduce an example. This corrects adjective usage and improves sentence clarity.

× Uh, it looks like, you know, umm, pumice pancake topped wood beans, umm, it reminds me of Tahu memories whenever I eat them back.

✓ It looks like a pancake topped with beans; it reminds me of childhood memories whenever I eat it.

Several issues: adjective/noun ordering and word choice are incorrect. Use 'a pancake topped with beans' for correct noun phrase order and preposition. 'Tahu memories' is unclear; likely meant 'childhood memories'. Use singular 'it' to refer to the dish. Remove redundant words like 'back'.

× So I always trying to eat, I know uh, new out dishes or snacks whenever I go out with my friends, for example, if the restaurant offer a new meal, I try to.

✓ So I always try new dishes or snacks whenever I go out with my friends; for example, if a restaurant offers a new meal, I try it.

Present participle 'trying' is incorrectly used without auxiliary; use base form 'try' for simple present. 'New out dishes' is incorrect word order—use 'new dishes'. Use the article 'a' before 'restaurant' and correct subject-verb agreement 'offers'. Add the object 'it' after 'try' to complete the verb's meaning.

× Yes, I always do, uh, because I love trying uh, new, uh, you know new things.

✓ Yes, I always do, because I love trying new things.

Redundant fillers disrupt tense flow and clarity. Remove repeated 'new' and filler words. The present continuous 'trying' is fine, but streamline sentence for correctness and fluency.

× No, it is still the same. Uh, I have the route. I have that habit once once one thing is my favorite, it's always my favorite.

✓ No, it is still the same. I have that habit: once something becomes my favorite, it always remains my favorite.

Several structural problems and repetition. 'I have the route' is incorrect vocabulary; replace with 'I have that habit'. Rephrase to clear conditional idea: 'once something becomes my favorite, it always remains my favorite.' This corrects sentence structure and meaning.

× So mohinga and mobiadle is the mobiadela are stay my favorite dishes and snacks because it always umm uh, realize how it tastes.

✓ So mohinga and Mobiadela are my favorite dishes and snacks because they always remind me of their taste.

Multiple pronoun and subject-verb agreement errors. Use plural verb 'are' to match plural subject 'mohinga and Mobiadela'. Replace 'is the mobiadela are stay' with simple 'are'. Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to the dishes. 'Realize how it tastes' is incorrect; use 'remind me of their taste' or 'remind me how they taste.' Also capitalize proper names consistently.