Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, accuracy and coherence. Use singular/plural correctly (pasta not pastas), fix verb forms and articles, and avoid redundant phrases. Provide one clear topic sentence then 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "for example", "also"). Use more precise vocabulary for sauces. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: My favourite food is pasta because it is a traditional Italian dish and very versatile. For example, I often eat it with tomato sauce or a creamy mushroom sauce, which I find delicious. I also like pairing pasta with a meat sauce for a more filling meal.

提案: Correct tense and vocabulary, remove unclear words ("Internet sushi"), and avoid repetition. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then give a specific reason and a brief example. Use linking words like "because" or "so". Keep sentences natural and concise.

例: When I was young, I loved sushi because it is a traditional Japanese dish and I found it tasty. I also thought it was healthy because it mainly consists of fresh fish and rice. Therefore my parents often took me to sushi restaurants.

提案: Clarify meaning and correct many errors. Answer directly about seasonal food habits. Use past/present tenses correctly and logical linking words ("when", "but", "now"). Provide specific seasonal examples (e.g., summer fruits, winter soups) rather than unrelated items. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes. When I was a child I often ate fried foods like chicken nuggets and fries, especially in summer. But as a teenager I became more health-conscious, so now I choose organic vegetables and soups in colder months.

提案: Organize response chronologically with accurate vocabulary and grammar. Use past simple for childhood and clear nouns ("porridge" instead of "kanji" if unclear). Avoid odd phrases like "favorite words." Provide a concise explanation of how tastes changed and a reason. Use linking words like "then" and "now".

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. At about six months old I mostly ate porridge and other baby foods because I had no teeth, but as I grew older I liked sweets such as ice cream. Now I prefer savory dishes like pasta and salads.

× I love eating pastas because it's a traditional Italian food, is very versatile and I can pair with different sauces.

✓ I love eating pasta because it's a traditional Italian food, it is very versatile and I can pair it with different sauces.

Use uncountable noun 'pasta' not plural 'pastas' and include the subject 'it' before 'is' and 'pair it' to form complete clauses; this fixes article and sentence structure errors.

× For example, tomato and mushroom green meat sauces is very tasty for me.

✓ For example, tomato, mushroom, and pesto sauces are very tasty to me.

Plural subject 'tomato, mushroom, and pesto sauces' requires plural verb 'are'. Also 'green meat' is unclear; 'pesto' is a likely intended sauce and 'tasty to me' is natural.

× When I was young, I like Internet sushi I because it's very traditional Japanese food and very yummy.

✓ When I was young, I liked sushi because it was a traditional Japanese food and very tasty.

The time expression 'When I was young' requires past tense 'liked' and 'was'. Remove unrelated word 'Internet' and duplicate 'I'. Use 'tasty' instead of informal 'yummy' for clarity.

× And I I think it's very healthy because we just only need a fish, fish and rice.

✓ And I think it's very healthy because we only need fish and rice.

Remove duplicated 'I'. Use 'we only need' (correct adverb placement) and uncountable 'fish' without article or comma; avoid repeating 'fish'.

× Yes, in the childhood I ate steak because I found the taxes.

✓ Yes, in my childhood I ate steak because I liked the taste.

Use 'my childhood' instead of 'the childhood'. 'Found the taxes' is incorrect; likely meant 'liked the taste' so replace to correct meaning.

× It's very crispy.

✓ It was very tasty/crispy.

Ensure tense consistency with previous past-tense context: use 'was'. Also choose 'tasty' if describing flavor; 'crispy' describes texture—pick the appropriate adjective.

× For example, chicken Nuggets best fries.

✓ For example, chicken nuggets and French fries.

Provide parallel plural nouns and correct terms: use lowercase 'chicken nuggets' and 'French fries' to form a coherent phrase.

× However, when I turn to teenagers, I focus my healthy so I I just use some organic.

✓ However, when I became a teenager, I focused on my health, so I used organic foods.

Match past-tense narrative: 'became' and 'focused' are past. Use correct collocations 'focused on my health' and 'used organic foods'. Remove duplicate 'I'.

× Yes, certainly. As the age of 6, I only ate kanji and some baby food because I had no teeth.

✓ Yes, certainly. At the age of six, I only ate porridge and some baby food because I had no teeth.

Use 'at the age of six' not 'as the age of 6'. 'Kanji' likely intended 'congee' or 'porridge'—use 'porridge' for clarity. Spell out numbers in simple text and keep past tense consistent.

× However, when I turned to the teenagers, I changed my favorite words, which was ice cream.

✓ However, when I became a teenager, my favorite food changed to ice cream.

Use 'became a teenager' and 'favorite food changed to ice cream' for correct structure and meaning; 'favorite words' is incorrect. Maintain past tense consistency.