Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 用词较简单且有重复与犹豫词（uh, we we），答题结构基本清楚但句子可更紧凑。建议：1) 去掉填词和重复，保持每句简洁（不超过5句）；2) 用连词连接理由（for example, furthermore）；3) 加入更具体的细节或偏好（比如最喜欢的配料或在哪家店吃）。举例练习时注意发音清晰。

例: My favourite food is pizza because it’s convenient and great to share. For example, I usually order a large pepperoni and vegetable pizza when I meet friends, and we enjoy it together at home. I also like it because you can customize the toppings to suit everyone’s taste.

提案: 表达有时不够准确（时态与单复数）且有重复与填词，内容泛泛且缺少具体例子。建议：1) 注意时态一致（past tense），2) 减少重复和犹豫词，3) 提供一两个具体例子或场景（如生日派对、节日），并用连词组织句子。

例: When I was young, I loved sweet foods. For example, I often ate cakes and candies at birthday parties, and I liked sharing them with my friends after school. Those treats felt special because we didn’t have them every day.

提案: 回答有条理并包含对比，但有冗余词（uh, and）和少量措辞问题（instead of 用法不当）。建议：1) 使用正确的对比短语（for example, in summer …, whereas in winter …）；2) 去掉多余填词，句子更紧凑；3) 可加入原因或具体场景说明（比如节日或气候影响）。

例: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, in summer I prefer light dishes such as salads, watermelon and ice cream to stay cool, whereas in winter I enjoy hot pot and dumplings because they keep me warm.

提案: 观点清楚但语法与词汇不够准确（prefer 时态，your sea diet 错误），有重复词。建议：1) 使用正确时态（past vs present）和词汇（balanced diet）；2) 减少重复，增添简短原因或结果；3) 用连词连接转变（however, now）。

例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed. When I was a child I preferred sweets like candies, which were unhealthy and harmed my teeth. However, now I prefer a balanced diet with more fruits and vegetables because it helps me stay healthy.

× My favorite food is pizza. We eat it with uh, with my friends and family and we share it happily. It is easy to order and we we can put lots of food, uh vegetables or meat on it.

✓ My favorite food is pizza. I eat it with my friends and family and we share it happily. It is easy to order and we can put lots of toppings, like vegetables or meat, on it.

原句存在人称和时态使用不一致的问题（将第一句陈述一般事实后，接句用复数主语“We eat”并不是时态错误本身，但这里指个人喜好时，使用“I eat”更自然）。另外有重复词“we we”。还使用了不太恰当的短语“put lots of food on it”，更常用的表达是“put lots of toppings on it”。建议：保持主语一致（若讨论个人喜好用“I”），删除重复词并使用地道搭配“toppings”。

× I like sweet food When I was young, uh, when I was a child, I often shared cakes and, uh, candy with my friends and we eat it together happily set uh, and most of these sweet food is very cute and lovely, so I love it very much.

✓ I liked sweet food when I was young. I often shared cakes and candy with my friends and we ate them together happily, and most of those sweet foods were very pretty and lovely, so I loved them very much.

原句出现时态混用：句首用“I like”但随后谈过去经历应使用过去时（when I was young）。此外“we eat”应为过去时“we ate”；“most of these sweet food is”主谓不一致且数不对，应为复数“sweet foods were”。建议：谈过去的经历时将所有动词改为过去时，并注意可数名词复数形式与主谓一致。

× Yes, I eat different foods throughout the year instead of for instance, in summer, I prefer to eat salads and ice cream and uh and watermelon in uh in winter, I prefer to eat hot pot and dumplings to keep me warm. Miss Jiang.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods throughout the year. For instance, in summer I prefer to eat salads, ice cream and watermelon; in winter I prefer to eat hot pot and dumplings to keep myself warm.

原句为复合句但时态主体为现在习惯性陈述，需分句清晰并保持代词与反身结构正确。原句中“to keep me warm”可用“to keep myself warm”更自然（反身代词）。另外句子中有多余填充词，建议断句并使用逗号或分号清晰分隔例子。

× Yes, it has changed a lot. When I was a child, I prefer to eat sweet, sweet food like candies and it is unhealthy and it's bad for my teeth. As I grew up, I prefer to eat your sea diet such as fruit and vegetables. It makes me healthy.

✓ Yes, it has changed a lot. When I was a child, I preferred to eat sweet foods like candies, which were unhealthy and bad for my teeth. As I grew up, I preferred to eat a healthier diet such as fruits and vegetables. It made me healthier.

句中时态不一致：描述过去习惯应使用过去时（preferred, were）；“it is unhealthy”谈过去应改为“were unhealthy”；“your sea diet”显然为拼写或发音误写，应为“healthier diet”或“healthy diet”；“fruit and vegetables”在这种语境下可改为“fruits and vegetables”。最后一句应与前文时态一致使用过去导致的结果“made me healthier”。建议：把表示过去习惯的动词改为过去式，修正拼写并使用恰当的名词形式及形容词比较级。