Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: state the dish clearly, give 1–2 specific reasons, use correct grammar and avoid fillers. Improve vocabulary (e.g., “stir-fried pork with vegetables”), use linking words (because, and, also), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Pronounce words correctly and avoid repetition.

例: My favourite food is stir-fried pork with vegetables because it is savory and well-seasoned. It usually has pork, bell peppers, and soy sauce, which give it a rich flavor. I enjoy it because it’s quick to prepare and reminds me of home.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense (past), and give specific supporting details. Replace fillers with linking words (because, and, for example). Keep it within 3 sentences and correct grammar (e.g., “I liked eggs”).

例: When I was young, I liked eggs. I enjoyed them because they tasted good and could be prepared in many ways, such as boiled, fried, or omelette. Eating eggs reminds me of breakfast with my family.

提案: Answer the question directly (Yes or No) and then explain briefly with clear reasons. Use correct sentences and link ideas (because, so, therefore). Be specific about examples and avoid vague phrases like “etcetera.”

例: No, I usually do not eat very different foods during the year. When I started university, the on-campus food was low quality, so I often ate similar meals like hamburgers, pizza, and noodles. Because of that, I rarely changed my diet with the seasons.

提案: Give a clear yes/no answer, explain reason briefly and provide specific current favourites. Use correct past tense and avoid fillers and repetition. Mention one or two current favourite foods clearly.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. I ate eggs a lot as a child and eventually got bored of them, so now I prefer foods like hamburgers and fried chicken. Those foods appeal to me because they have more variety in flavor.

× My favorite food is stricto pork with vegetables because, uh, it takes delicious.

✓ My favorite food is spicy pork with vegetables because it tastes delicious.

'Stricto' is not an English adjective; likely intended 'spicy'. 'It takes delicious' is incorrect word choice and word order: use the stative verb 'taste' in present simple for general truth (it tastes delicious). Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: learn common food adjectives (spicy, salty, sweet) and collocations like 'it tastes delicious.'

× Meanwhile, it could technically contains the pork pepper and the soy sauce, et cetera.

✓ It could technically contain pork, pepper, soy sauce, etc.

'Contains' should be base form 'contain' after modal-like phrasing 'could'. Also 'the pork pepper and the soy sauce' uses unnecessary definite articles; use nouns without 'the' in lists. 'Technically contain' is the correct verb phrase. Suggestion: after modal verbs (could, can, should) use base verb; omit 'the' with general food items in lists.

× So it made me feel that I really enjoy it and would take the boat, much of the boat boat to eat.

✓ So it makes me feel that I really enjoy it and would eat a lot of it.

Tense and word choice are incorrect: 'made me feel' suggests past but context is general preference, so present 'makes' fits. 'Would take the boat, much of the boat boat to eat' is unclear and ungrammatical; likely means 'eat a lot of it.' Suggestion: use clear verbs and quantifiers like 'eat a lot of it' or 'have it often.'

× Uh, when I was young, I, I like a egg, uh, because the egg is tasting is taste so nice that I always enjoy.

✓ When I was young, I liked eggs because they tasted so nice and I always enjoyed them.

Sequence of tenses: talking about the past requires past tense 'liked' and 'tasted' not present. 'A egg' is wrong article; plural 'eggs' fits general preference. 'The egg is tasting is taste' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'they tasted' and 'enjoyed them.' Suggestion: match tense to time expressions (when I was young -> past tense) and use correct article/number for countable nouns.

× I just eat egg as well because there are many different methods to cook eggs.

✓ I also just ate eggs because there are many different ways to cook them.

Tense should be past 'ate' to match 'when I was young.' 'Different methods' is acceptable but 'ways' is more natural. 'Eat egg' needs plural 'eggs' and pronoun 'them' for reference. Suggestion: use plural for general countable items and ensure tense consistency.

× So, uh, it will remind me of my childhood.

✓ So, it reminded me of my childhood.

Within past-time narration, use past tense 'reminded' rather than future 'will remind.' Suggestion: maintain past tense when describing memories.

× Uh, maybe absolutely not because, uh, when I entered the university, uh, the food quality in my university is not good.

✓ Maybe not, because when I entered university, the food quality at my university was not good.

Tense consistency: 'entered' is past, so 'was not good' should be past, not 'is not good.' Also use preposition 'at' for location quality and omit repeated 'the' before 'university.' Suggestion: keep past tense for past events and use 'at my university.'

× So I just eat the quite the same kind of food like the hamburger, pizza, noodles, etcetera.

✓ So I just ate quite the same kinds of food like hamburgers, pizza, and noodles.

Past tense 'ate' matches 'when I entered university.' Use plural 'kinds of food' and plural 'hamburgers' for general items. Remove extra 'the' and reorder for natural phrasing. Suggestion: pluralize countable food items when speaking generally and keep tense consistent.

× Those because the quality of food, I very worry about it.

✓ That was because I was very worried about the quality of the food.

Original sentence is fragmented and uses incorrect pronoun/reference 'Those because...' Better: 'That was because I was very worried about the quality of the food.' Use past tense 'was worried' and proper noun phrase 'the quality of the food.' Suggestion: form complete clauses and place subject before verb.

× Yes, yes, because I eat because I ate too much eggs.

✓ Yes, because I ate too many eggs.

Redundant 'eat because I ate' should be 'ate.' 'Too much eggs' is incorrect quantifier: use 'too many' with plural countable nouns. Suggestion: use 'too many' for countable plurals and avoid repetition.

× So I I maybe get bored on it.

✓ So I maybe got bored of it.

Tense should be past 'got' to match 'ate' earlier. Preposition 'bored on' is incorrect; use 'bored of' or 'bored with.' Suggestion: use correct preposition collocations: 'bored of/with.'

× So I change my favorite food and so this time I enjoy the hamburger, 5 chicken and etcetera.

✓ So I changed my favorite food, and now I enjoy hamburgers, fried chicken, etc.

Tense inconsistency: 'change' should be past 'changed.' 'This time' -> 'now' for present preference. '5 chicken' is unclear; likely 'fried chicken' or 'chicken' and should be plural 'hamburgers' and 'fried chicken.' 'Etcetera' should follow a natural list. Suggestion: use clear food terms and correct tense when describing change.