Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence naming the dish, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Reduce fillers (umm, uh) and correct vocabulary (use "cuisine", not "cousins").

例: My favourite food is Khinkali, a traditional Georgian dumpling. I love it because the dough is freshly made and the spiced meat filling tastes rich and comforting, which reminds me of home and helps me relax.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence about past preference, then briefly compare with present habits using linking words (however, now, because). Avoid vague phrases and repetitive fillers; be specific about foods and changes.

例: When I was young, I preferred junk food such as burgers and fries. However, now in my twenties I choose healthier options like salads and grilled fish because I noticed they improve my digestion and overall mood.

提案: Give a clear statement and specific examples for seasons, use linking words (for example, in summer, whereas in winter) and correct grammar and word choice. Avoid vague endings and ensure each sentence adds information.

例: Yes. For example, in summer I eat more fresh salads and tomatoes because they are in season and taste better. In winter I prefer warm stews and root vegetables because they are comforting and locally available.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence about whether it changed, then give specific examples and reasons. Avoid hesitation and unclear references (e.g., 'Ali', 'home and a chocolate'). Keep to two to three sentences and use linking words like 'although' or 'also'.

例: My favourite food has mostly stayed the same; I have loved Georgian dishes since childhood. Although I also enjoyed pizza and chocolate when I was younger, Khinkali remains my favourite because it connects me to family traditions.

× My favorite food is King Ali because I really like umm, the Georgian traditional cousins and umm, it's also, uh, really fresh and really good and it tastes like something historical food because it makes me feel like I, umm, I'm from Georgia and I relax.

✓ My favorite food is Khachapuri because I really like Georgian traditional cuisine, and it is very fresh and delicious. It tastes like a piece of history and makes me feel like I am from Georgia and relaxed.

Errors: 'cousins' should be 'cuisine' (wrong word choice); 'King Ali' likely misnamed — corrected to 'Khachapuri' as a common Georgian dish; 'really fresh and really good' is repetitive and uses informal 'really' twice — use 'very fresh and delicious'; 'something historical food' is incorrect word order and choice — use 'a piece of history' or 'historic'; 'I relax' is wrong tense/structure — use 'I feel relaxed' or 'I am relaxed'. Suggestion: choose correct nouns, avoid repetition, use appropriate adjective order, and use 'feel' + adjective for emotional/physical states.

× When I, when I was young, I really like junk food, but where I am in my 20s right now and I realized that, uh, the term health food is very good for your gut and for your stomach and for your mental health.

✓ When I was young, I really liked junk food, but now that I am in my 20s, I have realized that 'health food' is very good for your gut, your stomach, and your mental health.

Errors: Mixing past 'when I was young' with present 'I really like' — tense inconsistency. Use past tense 'liked' for habits in the past. 'Where I am in my 20s right now' is awkward — use 'now that I am in my 20s'. 'I realized' should be present perfect 'I have realized' to show change up to present. Suggestion: keep consistent tenses for time frames and use concise phrasing.

× And I really prefer now a more healthy food and I try to improve my, umm, stomach.

✓ And now I prefer healthier food, and I try to improve my digestion.

Errors: 'prefer now a more healthy food' has incorrect word order and adjective form — use 'prefer healthier food' (comparative adjective). 'Improve my stomach' is unnatural; English uses 'improve my digestion' or 'improve my stomach health.' Suggestion: place 'now' at the start or after the verb, use comparative adjective 'healthier', and use correct collocations for body functions.

× I think it also depends on the time of the year.

✓ I think it also depends on the time of year.

Error: 'the time of the year' is wordy; native phrasing is 'time of year' without 'the'. Suggestion: use concise expressions commonly used by native speakers.

× If it's summer, I will like tomatoes and because it's really fresh and summer, but in the winter it's not that good and I think there are also really much for that good.

✓ If it's summer, I like tomatoes because they are really fresh, but in winter they are not as good. I think there is not as much of that quality then.

Errors: 'I will like' is incorrect for habitual preference — use present simple 'I like'. 'Because it's really fresh and summer' is ungrammatical; use 'because they are really fresh'. 'In the winter it's not that good' — change 'the winter' to 'winter' and agree plural 'they are'. 'There are also really much for that good' is unclear and incorrect — corrected to 'there is not as much of that quality then.' Suggestion: use present simple for habitual statements, ensure subject-verb agreement and clearer comparative phrasing.

× Uh, I, I don't really remember what was my favorite food, uh, in my childhood, but umm, I think I really like Georgian traditional food since I was young and I think Ali is my favorite food.

✓ I don't really remember what my favorite food was in my childhood, but I have liked Georgian traditional food since I was young, and I think khachapuri is my favorite.

Errors: Word order 'what was my favorite food' should be 'what my favorite food was'. Mixing 'I think I really like ... since I was young' — use present perfect 'have liked' to indicate a preference continuing from past to present. 'Ali' likely misnamed; corrected to 'khachapuri' as a typical Georgian dish. Suggestion: use correct question-word order in reported questions, use present perfect for actions or states that continue to present, and use correct names/spelling.

× Uh, and also home and a chocolate, but when I was in, I really liked pizza also.

✓ Also, homemade chocolate, and when I was younger I really liked pizza too.

Errors: 'home and a chocolate' is unclear; likely intended 'homemade chocolate' — use correct compound noun. 'When I was in' is incomplete; 'when I was younger' fits context. 'Also' placement and 'also' vs 'too' — 'too' is more natural at sentence end. Suggestion: use complete time phrases, form compound nouns correctly, and place 'too' or 'also' in natural positions.