Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Focus on clear, direct answers and correct vocabulary. (Vietnamese) Nên trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó thêm 1–2 câu chi tiết cụ thể. Chú ý phát âm tên món ăn, dùng từ đúng (ví dụ: 'top pocket' và 'Crimson teas' có vẻ sai). Tránh lặp từ và câu dài không rõ nghĩa. Sử dụng linking words như 'because' hoặc 'so' để liên kết ý rõ ràng.

例: My favourite food is kimchi stew. I really enjoy it because I love spicy flavours and it is a famous Korean dish. I usually eat it in the evening with rice, and it warms me up after a long day.

提案: Clarify meaning and use correct vocabulary; avoid confusing or incorrect words. (Vietnamese) Cần diễn đạt rõ ràng: nếu ý bạn là 'sweets' (kẹo, đồ ngọt) thì không dùng 'snake'. Dùng một câu chủ đề rồi giải thích ngắn gọn lý do và thay đổi theo thời gian. Tránh hesitations như 'umm' và ngữ pháp sai như 'when I older'.

例: When I was young, I loved sweets such as candies and yogurt. My mother sometimes limited them because she was worried about my health. However, as I grew older I began to prefer savoury and spicy foods.

提案: Give specific, coherent examples and correct grammar. (Vietnamese) Trả lời trực tiếp rồi nêu vài ví dụ cụ thể cho từng mùa. Tránh lặp từ (‘apple, apples’) và sai cấu trúc ('is depends on reasons'). Dùng linking words như 'for example' hoặc 'in summer' để tổ chức ý.

例: Yes, I do. For example, in spring I eat a lot of fresh fruits like strawberries and apples. In summer I prefer cold dishes and salads, while in winter I usually enjoy hot soups and stews.

提案: State change clearly with correct tense and vocabulary. (Vietnamese) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề khẳng định sự thay đổi, dùng thì quá khứ cho thời thơ ấu và hiện tại cho hiện tại. Sửa từ sai ('kill snake' → 'like sweets' or 'kids' snacks'). Hạn chế tiếng lấp và sửa cấu trúc lỗi như 'when I older'.

例: Yes, my tastes have changed. As a child I liked sweet snacks like yogurt and milk tea, but now I prefer spicy food such as kimchi stew and spicy noodles, so my preferences have shifted significantly.

× I show out to top pocket which is the most famous food in Korea.

✓ I was pointing to tteokbokki, which is the most famous street food in Korea.

The original sentence has incorrect verb choice and sentence structure. 'I show out to top pocket' is ungrammatical and likely intended to say 'I was pointing to tteokbokki' (a Korean spicy rice cake). 'Top pocket' is incorrect vocabulary; use 'tteokbokki' or 'street food'. Use a relative clause with 'which' correctly. Suggestion: Use clear subject + correct verb phrase (e.g., 'I was pointing to tteokbokki') and correct noun ('street food' or specific dish).

× Well, I can't eat it every day, every night because of is Crimson teas and I love the spicy food.

✓ Well, I can't eat it every day or every night because it is very rich, and I love spicy food.

The sentence has tense and word choice problems: 'because of is Crimson teas' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'because it is very rich' or 'too rich' to explain inability to eat frequently. Use 'or' for alternatives 'every day or every night.' Suggestion: Keep present simple for general habits and use clear adjectives ('rich').

× So this is the best thing, the best one for me to choose every evening, every.

✓ So this is the best choice for me to eat in the evening.

Redundant phrasing and an incomplete ending ('every'). Simplify to 'the best choice for me to eat in the evening.' Ensure sentence completes the thought and remove repetition. Suggestion: Use concise noun phrases and complete temporal phrases ('in the evening').

× Well, I was upset with snake when I was a little child.

✓ Well, I was upset with snakes when I was a little child.

'Upset with snake' is singular and unnatural. Use plural 'snakes' or better 'afraid of snakes.' Also 'a little child' is awkward; 'a child' or 'young' works. Keep past tense: 'I was afraid of snakes when I was a child.' Suggestion: Use natural collocations ('afraid of') and correct pluralization when referring generally to animals.

× I remember that my mom didn't allow me to either because it's really umm, harmful for my umm, physical health.

✓ I remember that my mom didn't allow me to either because she thought it was harmful to my health.

Pronoun reference and wording are unclear: 'didn't allow me to either' lacks the object; 'either' misplaced. Replace with 'she thought it was harmful to my health.' Use 'to my health' rather than 'for my physical health.' Suggestion: Make pronoun references clear ('she thought') and use natural phrases ('harmful to my health').

× So when I older I just like to eat them a lot.

✓ So when I was older I used to like eating them a lot.

Missing auxiliary 'was' for past reference: 'when I older' should be 'when I was older' or 'as I got older.' Also use 'used to' or past continuous/habit 'liked eating them a lot.' Suggestion: Use correct past-time expressions and appropriate habitual past ('used to like').

× Yes, actually is depends on reasons.

✓ Yes, actually it depends on the reasons.

Missing subject 'it' causes ungrammatical sentence. Add 'it' and optionally specify 'the reason' or 'the season.' Suggestion: Always include a subject in English sentences ('it depends').

× For example, in this spring I can eat some kind of fruit such as uh, such as apple, umm, apples, the cheese, some kind of that.

✓ For example, in the spring I can eat fruits such as apples and cheese.

Use 'in the spring' not 'in this spring.' 'Some kind of fruit such as apple, apples' is redundant; use plural 'apples.' 'Cheese' is not a fruit but can be included in general foods. Remove filler words. Suggestion: Use correct seasonal preposition ('in the spring') and parallel lists ('fruits such as apples and cheese').

× Oh yes, when I was a little child, I'm keen on sweet foods to kill snake yogurt and some uh, like milk tea.

✓ Oh yes, when I was a little child, I was keen on sweet foods like yogurt and milk tea.

Mixing past and present: 'when I was a little child' requires past tense 'I was keen.' 'to kill snake' is unintelligible and likely mispronounced; remove it. Use 'like' for examples and list items correctly. Suggestion: Maintain consistent past tense for childhood habits and use clear food names ('yogurt').

× But when I older now I love spicy food more so I just wanna, I think I it's change a lot.

✓ But now that I'm older, I love spicy food more, so I think it has changed a lot.

Problems: 'when I older now' needs 'now that I'm older.' 'wanna' is informal; use 'want to' or omit. 'I think I it's change a lot' mixes pronouns and tenses; use present perfect 'it has changed a lot.' Suggestion: Use 'now that' for change over time and present perfect to describe change ('has changed').