Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar, and produce a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Avoid hesitation and repetition. Use linking words if adding reasons (e.g., "because", "as", "so").

例: My favourite food is hamburgers because they are tasty and convenient. For example, I like the combination of juicy beef, cheese, and fresh vegetables, and I often eat them when I am out with friends.

提案: Correct verb tense and subject-verb agreement, give a clear topic sentence, and add a specific detail about why you liked it. Keep it to two or three sentences and use linking words like "so" or "therefore" for coherence.

例: When I was young, I ate pasta almost every day, especially at lunch and dinner. I liked it because it was quick to prepare and my family often made different sauces, so it never got boring.

提案: Be more fluent and specific: correct phrasing ("at different times of the year"), name the festival food clearly and give one reason or detail. Use a linking phrase such as "however" or "but" to contrast general habit with exceptions.

例: I don't usually change my diet with the seasons; however, during festivals I eat special treats. For example, at Christmas I enjoy a special cake called pandoro, which my family only buys for the holidays.

提案: Avoid hesitation and fix grammar and word choice (e.g., "was" not "were", "complete meal", "offers"). Give a clear comparison: state what you liked then and now, and give a concise reason. Use linking words like "but" or "now" to show change.

例: Yes. When I was a child I liked pizza, but now I prefer hamburgers. I find hamburgers more satisfying because they combine meat, bread and vegetables in one complete meal.

× I have a lot of favorite food, but maybe the one that I always want to eat and it never sunk on me is hamburgers.

✓ I have a lot of favorite foods, but maybe the one that I always want to eat and that never sinks in for me is hamburgers.

The noun 'food' should be plural as 'favorite foods' when referring to multiple items (singular/plural issue). Also use 'that never sinks in for me' (present tense and idiomatic) and 'sinks' agrees with singular subject 'that'. Replace 'it' with 'that' to refer to the preceding clause. Suggestion: use plural for countable list and ensure pronoun and verb agree with the grammatical subject.

× When I were young, I always eat a plate of pasta at dinner and also at lunch, so I think that it's kind of my favorite food when I was young, but I also like it now, so it's the same.

✓ When I was young, I always ate a plate of pasta at dinner and also at lunch, so I think it was my favorite food when I was young, but I also like it now, so it's the same.

Use past tense for actions and states in the past. 'Were' should be 'was' for first person singular (subject-verb agreement and past tense). 'Eat' should be 'ate' to match past time frame. 'I think' can be 'I think' but referencing past preference use 'it was my favorite'. Suggestion: keep past-tense verbs consistent when describing past habits.

× I don't really eat different things, different foods on different times of the year, but maybe some festivals week I have something different like the Pandora that is a cake, special cake that I enjoy a lot to eat during Christmas.

✓ I don't really eat different foods at different times of the year, but maybe during some festival weeks I have something different, like Pandoro, which is a special cake that I enjoy a lot at Christmas.

Use preposition 'at' with 'times' (at different times of the year). 'During' is correct for festivals. 'Festival week' should be 'festival weeks' (plural) or 'some festivals'. 'Pandora' appears to be the wrong name; likely 'Pandoro' or 'Panettone'—here corrected to 'Pandoro' and introduced with 'which is' to define it. Also use 'at Christmas' rather than 'during Christmas' for customary foods. Suggestion: choose correct prepositions ('at', 'during') and correct noun forms for time expressions.

× Yes, uh, when I was a child, I umm, I like to eat pizzas.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I used to like eating pizza.

Describing a past habitual preference requires past tense: 'used to like' or 'liked'. 'I like' is present tense and inconsistent with 'when I was a child'. Also use uncountable 'pizza' or singular/plural consistently; 'pizza' as a food in general is more natural. Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habits and 'eat' -> 'eating' after 'like'.

× I love pizzas and now I'm reconsidering, uh, hamburgers.

✓ I loved pizza and now I'm reconsidering hamburgers.

If contrasting past childhood preference with current reconsideration, use past tense 'loved' for the childhood statement. 'Pizzas' can be 'pizza' to refer to the food in general. 'I'm reconsidering hamburgers' is acceptable; remove filler words. Suggestion: match tenses when comparing past and present preferences.

× I think that hamburgers are a completed, umm, meals that offers you all the nutrition that we need and it's the taste of hamburgers are.

✓ I think that hamburgers are a complete meal that offers you all the nutrition you need, and I like the taste of hamburgers.

Adjective 'completed' is incorrect; use 'complete'. 'Meals' should be singular 'meal' because 'a complete meal' is singular. Verb agreement: 'that offers' matches 'a complete meal'. Remove redundant and ungrammatical clause 'it's the taste of hamburgers are' and replace with 'I like the taste of hamburgers'. Suggestion: choose correct adjective form, ensure noun number matches article, and fix verb agreement and sentence structure.