Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a brief example. Avoid vague phrases and redundant exclamations, and keep to under five sentences. Use linking words (because, so, for example) to connect ideas.

例: My favourite food is burgers because I enjoy the combination of juicy meat, melted cheese, and fresh lettuce. For example, I often go to a local diner that grills burgers to order, and the flavour always cheers me up after a long day.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition: give a clear topic sentence about your childhood preference, then add a specific memory or reason. Correct grammar for past habits (e.g., 'I loved' or 'I used to'). Keep sentences concise and relevant.

例: When I was young, I loved eating burgers because my parents often took me to a small café that made them. I remember choosing a cheeseburger with pickles after school, which became a favourite treat.

提案: Provide a structured answer with seasonal details and reasons. Use linking words (for example, in summer, because) and correct phrasing (e.g., 'once a day', 'twice a day'). Mention specific foods for different seasons to show variety and avoid contradictions.

例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For example, in summer I prefer light meals like salads and a burger once a day because it's hot, while in winter I eat heartier foods such as soups, stews and sometimes burgers twice a week to stay warm.

提案: Answer the question directly with a clear statement about change or no change, then support it briefly with reasons. Use correct tense and concise language. Avoid repeating the same phrase; give one reason why it has or has not changed.

例: No, my favourite food has not changed; I've loved burgers since childhood because of their flavour and convenience. Even now I still choose burgers when I want comfort food, although I sometimes choose healthier toppings.

× My favorite food is burger because I like ingredients in here and the taste of the burger makes me happy.

✓ My favorite food is burgers because I like the ingredients here and the taste of the burger makes me happy.

Use plural 'burgers' when speaking generally; use article 'the' with 'ingredients' or 'the ingredients' and 'here' does not need 'in'. Correct: 'the ingredients here'. This fixes preposition misuse and article/number agreement.

× It gives me to another planet when I have it.

✓ It transports me to another planet when I have it.

The verb 'give' is incorrect with the preposition 'to' in this context. Use a verb like 'transport' or 'takes' + 'to' to express movement to a metaphorical place: 'transports me to another planet' or 'takes me to another planet'.

× It's so gorgeous. Awesome. What I feel this feeling till Monday. Good.

✓ It's so delicious and awesome. I feel this way until Monday. It's great.

Original fragments and incorrect clause 'What I feel this feeling till Monday' are ungrammatical. Rephrase into complete sentences: combine adjectives, use 'I feel this way until Monday' to express duration, and add a clear concluding sentence.

× It was definitely burgers because I love burgers so much.

✓ It was definitely burgers because I loved burgers so much.

Question asks about past preference 'when you were young', so verbs referring to that period should be past tense. Change present 'love' to past 'loved' to match time frame.

× They're so tasty, they're so delicious.

✓ They were so tasty; they were so delicious.

Again, referring to past time, use past tense 'were' instead of 'they're'. This keeps pronoun usage consistent with past-tense context.

× And I lo, I've been love eating burgers since my childhood Burgers.

✓ I have loved eating burgers since my childhood.

Remove filler 'lo' and fix verb construction: 'have loved' (present perfect) expresses a continuing preference from childhood to present. Remove the extra word 'Burgers' and ensure a single clear clause.

× It's really part of my life.

✓ They are really part of my life.

If referring to burgers (plural), use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'are'. If speaker means 'eating burgers', rephrase: 'Eating burgers is really part of my life.' The correction assumes reference to burgers.

× I can live without them.

✓ I cannot live without them.

Context suggests the student means burgers are essential, so the negative 'cannot' expresses inability to live without them. Original 'I can live without them' contradicts prior enthusiasm; fix to match intended meaning.

× Yes I do, but in all times of the year there includes a burger because burger it's so delicious.

✓ Yes, I do, but at all times of the year I include a burger because burgers are so delicious.

Use 'at all times' instead of 'in all times', rephrase 'there includes a burger' to active 'I include a burger', use plural 'burgers are' for general statement, and remove awkward 'burger it's' structure.

× For example, in the summer I prefer to eat burgers for one time in the day, but in the winter I eat for twice and never mind what, it's unhealthy for health.

✓ For example, in the summer I prefer to eat burgers once a day, but in the winter I eat them twice a day; although I know it's unhealthy for my health.

Use 'once a day' and 'twice a day' instead of 'one time in the day' and 'for twice'. Use 'them' for plural object. Replace 'never mind what' with a contrast 'although I know' and say 'unhealthy for my health' (or simply 'unhealthy').

× Now it happened because I have been eating burgers since my childhood.

✓ It hasn't changed because I have been eating burgers since my childhood.

Question asks 'Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?' The intended meaning is that it has not changed. Use present perfect 'hasn't changed' to answer correctly, and keep 'have been eating' to show continuous action from childhood to present.

× I love burger, I love eating burgers.

✓ I love burgers; I love eating burgers.

When speaking generally, use plural 'burgers' rather than singular 'burger' or use 'the' if referring to a specific burger. Making both phrases plural keeps consistency and correct article/number usage.

× It's really delicious.

✓ They are really delicious.

If referring to burgers (plural), use plural pronoun and verb: 'They are really delicious.' If referring to 'burger' singular, use 'It is really delicious.' Ensure pronoun number matches the noun being discussed.