Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 注意语法和表达的自然性，简化句子并直接回应问题。使用正确的动词形式和单复数，避免多余赘述。例如用一句话给出偏好，再用一两句具体说明原因或感受，使用连接词使逻辑更清晰。

例: I'm not very picky, but if I had to choose I'd say dumplings. They remind me of family gatherings and comfort food, so they mean a lot to me.

提案: 注意时态一致，使用过去时描述过去的喜好。避免重复词汇（sugars 不常用）。可以给出简短的原因或具体例子来丰富内容。

例: When I was little, I had a sweet tooth and loved candy and cakes because they made me happy. For example, I always looked forward to birthday cakes.

提案: 注意单词拼写和搭配（seasonable→seasonal，lesser chemical polluted→less affected by chemicals / less pesticide residue）。句子应更简洁并使用连接词。提供具体季节和蔬菜例子会更好。

例: Yes, I do. I usually buy seasonal vegetables, like asparagus in spring and pumpkins in autumn, because they're cheaper and usually have fewer pesticides.

提案: 时态和表达混乱，注意用过去时和现在时的区分。纠正语法（allergic to it，contains，nutritious / nutrients），结构上先直接回答是否改变，再解释原因并举例。避免重复和语法错误。

例: Yes, it has changed. I used to dislike coriander because of its taste, and I even thought I might be allergic. But as I grew older I learned it's nutritious, so now I enjoy it in salads and soups.

× But if you like me help to choose one, I will say dumplings because it contain many feelings.

✓ But if you were to ask me to choose one, I would say dumplings because they contain many feelings.

原句中存在多处问题：1) “if you like me help to choose one” 结构不正确，应使用虚拟语气或委婉表达：“if you were to ask me to choose one” 或 “if you asked me to choose one”。2) “I will say” 在此类假设或偏好表达中更自然用条件句的 would：“I would say”。3) “it contain” 主谓不一致且代词错误；dumplings 为复数，应使用复数代词和动词“they contain”。建议使用更自然的表达并注意主谓一致和代词指代。

× When I was little, I have a sweet tooth.

✓ When I was little, I had a sweet tooth.

句子描述过去的状态，应使用一般过去时。原句用现在时“have”不符合时间背景。建议将动词改为过去式“had”。

× I like sugars and cakes because they make me feel happy and lift my mood.

✓ I liked sweets and cakes because they made me feel happy and lifted my mood.

1) “sugars” 用法不自然，sugar 通常不可数，表示各种甜食应使用复数名词“sweets”。2) 上下文为过去（When I was little），动词时态应一致使用过去时，故将 like → liked, make → made, lift → lifted。建议使用“sweets”表示多种甜食，并统一过去时。

× Yes I do, I usually buy the season seasonable vegetables not only because they are cheaper but also the uh they are lesser chemical polluted by the fertilizer.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually buy the seasonal vegetables not only because they are cheaper but also because they are less contaminated by fertilizers.

原句问题较多：1) “season seasonable” 重复并且词形错误，应为“seasonal”。2) “the uh they are lesser chemical polluted by the fertilizer” 语序混乱且用词不当，应改为“less contaminated by fertilizers”。3) “lesser” 用法不当，比较级应为“less”。4) “fertilizer” 多指不可数或泛指，复数“fertilizers” 更自然。建议简化并使用“less contaminated”表达更清晰。

× Yes, it changed a lot when I was little. I don't like the flavor of coriander, you know maybe I have allergic to them.

✓ Yes, it changed a lot since I was little. I didn't like the flavor of coriander; maybe I was allergic to it.

原句时态和代词指代错误：1) 第一部分谈变化应使用“since I was little” 或保持过去时一致，且“changed a lot when I was little” 含义不清，改为“since I was little”。2) “I don't like” 与过去背景不一致，应为“I didn't like”。3) “maybe I have allergic to them” 语法错误，应为“maybe I was allergic to it”（allergic to + 名词，且 coriander 单指香菜用 it）。建议统一时态并修正被动/形容词搭配。

× But when I grow up I think it contain many nutritions it could to my health so I love it re when I grow.

✓ But when I grew up I thought it contained many nutrients that are good for my health, so I grew to like it.

原句存在时态、词形和句子结构问题：1) “when I grow up” 与叙述过去经历不符，应为过去式“when I grew up”。2) “I think” 改为过去“I thought”。3) “contain many nutritions” 用词错误，应为“contained many nutrients”。4) “it could to my health” 语法错误并且表达不自然，应为“that are good for my health”。5) “so I love it re when I grow” 混乱，应改为“so I grew to like it” 或 “so I started to like it”。建议统一为过去时，使用正确名词形式“nutrients”，并改写为自然表达。