Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, avoid redundancy, and give a specific reason or example. Limit to up to 5 sentences and use linking words (for example, because, so). Correct errors (e.g., "This I think" → "I know", "eat this recipes" → "eat these recipes").

例: My favourite food is dessert, especially homemade cakes. I know they are not very healthy, but I enjoy baking because it relaxes me and I can control the ingredients. For example, I often make a chocolate sponge cake with fresh fruit, which I eat as an occasional treat.

提案: Use past tense consistently, give a clear topic sentence, and provide specific supporting details with linking words (for example, "because" or "so"). Remove fillers like "uh" and correct grammar ("I preferred", "I enjoyed").

例: When I was young, I preferred eating fish prepared in many ways. For example, my family often served fried fish on weekends and grilled fish at special gatherings, and I also liked fish soup because it warmed me up and was full of flavour.

提案: Answer the question directly and coherently. Use complete sentences, correct vocabulary ("junk" not "jump"), and explain how seasons or circumstances change your diet with specific examples and linking words. Avoid short fragments and hesitations.

例: Yes, I do eat different foods at different times of the year. For instance, in winter I prefer hearty, protein-rich meals like stews and roasted meat, but in summer I choose lighter foods such as salads and grilled fish because they are refreshing and easier to prepare when I am busy.

提案: Use clear, grammatical sentences and provide specific contrasts with linking words (e.g., "however", "because"). Replace vague phrases with precise descriptions and correct verb forms ("it has changed", "I depended"). Mention examples of foods to make the answer concrete.

例: Yes, my eating habits have changed since childhood. When I was a child I depended on fresh home-cooked meals, like vegetable stews and grilled fish that my mother made. However, because I am now very busy with work, I sometimes eat fast food or ready-made meals for convenience.

× My favorite food is dessert.

✓ My favorite food is dessert.

No change needed for this sentence; the article is optional with uncountable or category nouns like 'dessert' when speaking generally. Keep as is.

× I enjoy cooking a delicious dessert every day.

✓ I enjoy making delicious desserts every day.

Use 'making' instead of 'cooking' for desserts commonly and plural 'desserts' for a habitual action. Use consistent plural for general repeated items.

× This I think this is unhealthy but I like to eat this recipes like cake.

✓ I think this is unhealthy, but I like to eat recipes like cakes.

Remove redundant 'This', use comma before 'but', use 'recipes' with 'like' is awkward so 'recipes like cakes' or better 'foods like cake'; match plural 'cakes' with 'recipes'.

× When I was young, I prefer eating fish in different recipes, fried fish, grilled fish, even in soup because uh, I was enjoy enjoyable.

✓ When I was young, I preferred eating fish in different recipes: fried fish, grilled fish, even in soup, because I enjoyed it.

Shift tense to past 'preferred' and 'enjoyed' to match 'when I was young'. Remove 'enjoy enjoyable' redundancy and use a clear object 'it'.

× Yes, definitely. I used to eat.

✓ Yes, definitely. I used to eat them.

Complete the sentence by adding an object 'them' or specifying the food; 'used to eat' requires what was eaten.

× The food rich with proteins when I was young girl,

✓ The food rich in protein when I was a young girl,

Use 'rich in' and 'protein' as an uncountable noun; include article 'a' before 'young girl'.

× but nowadays I am very busy in work so I depend on the umm jump.

✓ but nowadays I am very busy with work, so I depend on junk food.

Use 'busy with work' rather than 'busy in work' and correct 'jump' to 'junk food'. Add comma before 'so' for clarity.

× Yes, it's very change.

✓ Yes, it has changed a lot.

Use present perfect 'has changed' to indicate a change since childhood; 'very change' is ungrammatical, use 'changed a lot'.

× When I was a child I depend on fresh food and umm delicious recipes that prepared by mom.

✓ When I was a child I depended on fresh food and delicious recipes that were prepared by my mom.

Use past tense 'depended' to match 'when I was a child', use passive 'were prepared' and include possessive 'my' before 'mom'.

× But nowadays, because the work and busy, I depend on the junk food.

✓ But nowadays, because of work and being busy, I depend on junk food.

Use 'because of work and being busy' to form correct phrase, remove definite article before 'junk food' when speaking generally.