Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitations and repetition, correct vocabulary and give one or two specific supporting details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a linked reason and an example. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

例: My favourite food is fettuccine Alfredo. I like it because the creamy sauce is rich yet comforting, and the pasta soaks up the flavors well. For example, I often add mushrooms and spinach to make a quick, balanced meal.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, avoid sounds like “MMM,” and provide a specific example of a dish and why you liked it. Use a linking phrase to expand your answer.

例: When I was young I enjoyed simple home-cooked meals, especially my mother’s stewed chicken. I liked it because it was flavorful and made me feel comforted, for example she always served it with rice and vegetables.

提案: Speak more fluently and avoid filler words. Give a clear comparison between seasons and specific food examples. Use linking words like “in summer” and “in winter” to structure the answer.

例: Yes, I change what I eat depending on the season. In summer I prefer light meals such as salads and grilled fish, whereas in winter I enjoy heartier dishes like stews and dumplings to keep warm.

提案: Clarify tense and be precise: either say it has changed or not. If unchanged, explain why with specific reasons and examples. Use connecting words like “because” and “nowadays.”

例: My favourite food has changed since childhood. As a child I preferred junk food like hamburgers and fries, but nowadays I prefer homemade pasta because it tastes better and is healthier.

× Actually, uh, my favorite food is pasta, uh, which is name Alfredo fettuccine.

✓ Actually, my favorite food is a pasta called fettuccine Alfredo.

The original sentence misuses 'name' and has awkward word order. Use the adjective phrase 'called' or 'named' and place the article 'a' before 'pasta'. This corrects word choice and noun phrase structure. Suggestion: say 'a pasta called fettuccine Alfredo' to be clear and grammatical.

× I really love this pasta because, uh, it is delicious and versatile.

✓ I really love this pasta because it is delicious and versatile.

The sentence is mostly correct but contains filler 'uh'; removing disfluencies makes it clearer. Pronoun 'it' correctly refers to 'pasta'. Suggestion: avoid filler words in spoken or written responses.

× Uh, additionally, uh, they, they have a very species.

✓ Additionally, it has a very distinctive flavor.

Original has wrong pronoun 'they' for 'pasta' (singular) and uses 'species' incorrectly. Replace with singular pronoun 'it' and appropriate noun 'distinctive flavor' or 'unique taste'. Suggestion: match singular/plural and choose appropriate vocabulary.

× I loved simple home cooked dishes when I was young, especially my mother's dishes and they have a MMM.

✓ I loved simple home-cooked dishes when I was young, especially my mother's cooking.

The phrase 'home cooked' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective 'home-cooked'. 'They have a MMM' is unclear; replace with 'my mother's cooking' to express the idea. Also remove nonsensical 'MMM'. Suggestion: use 'home-cooked' before a noun and use clear nouns like 'cooking' to refer to dishes.

× Yes umm, I eat uh, different foods at different times. Uh, especially, uh, when umm, summer I prefer it the light meals, uh, in winter I like. Dough.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods at different times. For example, in summer I prefer light meals, and in winter I prefer heartier foods.

Original has tense and word order issues: 'when umm, summer I prefer it the light meals' is ungrammatical. Remove fillers, use 'in summer' and 'prefer light meals' without 'it the'. 'Dough' is irrelevant; replace with 'heartier foods' for contrast. Ensure parallel structure 'in summer... in winter...'. Suggestion: use 'in summer'/'in winter' and parallel verbs 'I prefer...'.

× No, because when I was a child I have always prefer it junk food such as hamburger and fries and nowadays I love this food.

✓ No. When I was a child, I always preferred junk food such as hamburgers and fries, but now I love this food.

Mixed tense: 'when I was a child' requires past tense 'preferred', not 'have always prefer'. Use past simple 'preferred'. 'Prefer it junk food' is ungrammatical; remove 'it'. Pluralize 'hamburgers'. Use contrast 'but now' to show change. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past time references and use plural forms for countable nouns.