Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Pronunciation, clarity and coherence need improvement. Give a short direct topic sentence, correct vocabulary (e.g. 'huge fan'), remove hesitations and garbled words, and include one concise supporting detail using a linking word. Aim for 2–3 clear sentences and avoid invented words.

例: I’m a huge fan of traditional Vietnamese cuisine, especially pho. It’s a flavorful broth with tender noodles and herbs, so I find it comforting and nourishing whenever I’m tired or hungry.

提案: Fix grammar and word choice (e.g. 'had a sweet tooth', 'salty' vs 'salary'), and finish the comparison clearly. Use a topic sentence and one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Keep sentences concise and natural.

例: When I was young, I had a sweet tooth and loved candies and chocolate ice cream. However, I often chose taste over nutrition, whereas now I try to eat more balanced meals.

提案: Remove repeated words, correct odd phrases and vocabulary (e.g. 'with the seasons', 'in summer', 'I crave refreshing salads and cold drinks', 'hot, hearty soups'), and use linking words like 'in contrast' for clarity. Keep to 2–3 well-formed sentences.

例: Yes, my diet changes with the seasons. For example, in summer I prefer refreshing salads and cold drinks, whereas in winter I enjoy hot, hearty soups to keep warm.

提案: Correct tense and word choice (e.g. 'I craved fast food', 'my palate has evolved', 'learned to appreciate', 'plant-based meals'), and structure answer with topic sentence plus one clear reason using a linking word. Keep language natural and avoid invented words.

例: Yes, it has changed. As a child I craved fast food, but over the years my palate has evolved and I’ve learned to appreciate more complex flavours and plant-based meals that are healthier.

× I'm a hurt fan of traditional Vietnamese cuisines, particularly for her.

✓ I'm a huge fan of traditional Vietnamese cuisine, particularly pho.

The student used incorrect words: 'hurt' and 'for her' are wrong in context. 'Huge' is the correct adjective to express strong liking. 'Cuisines' (plural) can be used but 'Vietnamese cuisine' (singular, uncountable) is more natural when referring to a national cuisine. 'Particularly pho' names the dish; 'for her' is meaningless here. Suggest replacing incorrect adjectives and phrases with appropriate vocabulary and use singular uncountable 'cuisine' when speaking generally about a national food.

× Uh, it's an *** queasy blend of savory per broth and tender noodles.

✓ It's a unique, pleasing blend of savory broth and tender noodles.

The original sentence contains wrong and nonsensical word choices: '***', 'queasy', and 'per' are incorrect here. The intended meaning is likely 'unique/pleasant' and 'savory broth'. Replace with clear adjectives in correct order and correct noun 'broth'. Advise choosing context-appropriate adjectives and ensuring nouns are used correctly.

× I find it uh, incredibly comforting and nutritious, making absolute go to meal whenever I day out.

✓ I find it incredibly comforting and nutritious, making it my absolute go-to meal whenever I go out.

Problems: missing pronoun 'it' after 'making', missing possessive 'my', 'go to' should be hyphenated as 'go-to' when used as an adjective, and 'I day out' is incorrect verb usage — should be 'I go out'. Also remove filler 'uh'. Suggest including necessary pronouns, correct collocations, and correct verb 'go'.

× Looking back, I definitely has a sweet tooth.

✓ Looking back, I definitely had a sweet tooth.

Tense and subject-verb agreement: 'has' (present) does not match the past context signaled by 'Looking back'. Use past tense 'had'. Also 'has' with subject 'I' would be 'have' in present. Suggest matching verb tense to time adverbs and using correct past form.

× I was obsessed with anything salary, from colourful candies to chocolate ice cream.

✓ I was obsessed with anything sweet, from colourful candies to chocolate ice cream.

The word 'salary' is incorrect and likely a wrongword substitution; 'sweet' is the correct adjective to describe sugary foods. Replace incorrect word with appropriate adjective. Ensure vocabulary choices match the intended meaning.

× But then I prioritize taste over nutritional value, which is quite the opposite of my.

✓ But back then I prioritized taste over nutritional value, which is quite the opposite of now.

Multiple issues: tense inconsistency ('then' with present 'prioritize' should be past 'prioritized'), and the phrase 'opposite of my' is incorrect — likely intended 'opposite of now' or 'opposite of my current habits'. Suggest aligning tense and using correct referent ('now' or 'my current self').

× Certainly, my diet tends to fluctuate fluctuate with decisions.

✓ Certainly, my diet tends to fluctuate with the seasons.

'fluctuate fluctuate' is a duplicated word and 'with decisions' is incorrect; likely intended 'with the seasons'. Use the correct prepositional phrase 'with the seasons' to express seasonal changes. Remove duplicate words.

× In the squirting summer, I crave refraction, salad and cold beverages, while during the colder months I prefer hot, hearty steam or hot water to keep myself warm and cozy.

✓ In the summer, I crave refreshing salads and cold beverages, while during the colder months I prefer hot, hearty soups or hot drinks to keep myself warm and cozy.

Many wrong word choices: 'squirting' and 'refraction' are incorrect; 'salad' should be plural 'salads' to match 'I crave', and 'steam' is wrong — intended 'soup'. Use 'refreshing' to describe cold foods. Ensure noun plurality matches and choose semantically correct food terms.

× Undoubtedly, as a child I crave a fast food.

✓ Undoubtedly, as a child I craved fast food.

Tense mismatch: describing childhood requires past tense 'craved' not present 'crave'. Also 'a fast food' is incorrect; 'fast food' is uncountable in this context, so drop the article. Suggest using past tense and correct article usage with uncountable nouns.

× When my palate has evolved significantly over the years, I've rode to appreciate more complex flavors and palant meals that are both delicious and beneficial for my long term health.

✓ As my palate has evolved significantly over the years, I've come to appreciate more complex flavours and plant-based meals that are both delicious and beneficial for my long-term health.

Errors: 'When' with present perfect 'has evolved' is awkward; 'As' is better. 'I've rode' is wrong — correct phrasal verb is 'I've come to appreciate'. 'palant' is a misspelling of 'plant'. Add hyphen in 'long-term'. Also use consistent spelling (flavours/fluors) depending on variety; here 'flavours' used. Suggest using correct phrasal verbs, correct vocabulary, and proper hyphenation.