Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (why you like it, a short anecdote). Avoid repetition and long time ranges. Use linking words for coherence.

例: I love chicken curry with rice because it’s a comforting, flavorful dish from my country. I learned to cook it from my mother, and after practicing for a few months I became quite confident making it. Now I prepare it for family gatherings because everyone enjoys it.

提案: Complete your sentence and organize answer: give a clear topic sentence about childhood tastes, then contrast with present habits using linking words (however, but). Provide specific examples and a concise reason for the change.

例: When I was a child I loved sweet foods, especially pancakes and jalebi, which is similar to a funnel cake. However, I don’t eat them much now because I’ve learned that too much sugar harms my health, so I try to choose healthier snacks instead.

提案: Make sentences grammatically complete and use linking words to compare seasons. State one clear example per season and finish the thought. Avoid leaving sentences unfinished.

例: Yes, I change my diet with the seasons. For example, in winter I eat pini, a dense sweet made from dried fruits and chickpea flour, because it keeps me warm and energetic. In summer I prefer lighter foods like salads and fruit to stay cool.

提案: Be direct and succinct: state clearly whether your favourite has changed, give reasons and one specific example of what you eat now. Use linking words (because, so) to show cause and effect.

例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed. When I was a child I preferred sugary treats, but because I learned they harm my health and skin, I now avoid them and focus on protein-rich foods like grilled chicken and lentils.

× My favorite food is chicken Curry with the rice as this is also very famous in my country and I'm also very good in it.

✓ My favorite food is chicken curry with rice because it is also very famous in my country and I am very good at cooking it.

Uses adjectives/adverbs and prepositions: 'chicken Curry' should be 'chicken curry' (lowercase common noun); 'the rice' is unnecessary article—use 'rice'; 'as' is awkward for reason—use 'because'; 'I'm also very good in it' incorrectly uses preposition 'in' and 'also' is redundant—use 'good at cooking it'. Suggestion: choose correct prepositions (good at) and remove unnecessary articles/adverbs for clarity.

× I used to learn it from my mom and it took me almost three to six months to get perfect in it.

✓ I learned it from my mom and it took me almost three to six months to become good at it.

'Used to learn' is incorrect here: 'used to' indicates a past habitual action but 'learn' should be simple past 'learned' for a completed action; 'to get perfect in it' uses wrong form 'perfect' and preposition 'in'—use 'become good at it'. Suggestion: use simple past for completed learning and correct verb forms and prepositions.

× What kind of food did you like when you were young?

✓ What kind of food did you like when you were young?

Sentence is correct as written; no tense change needed. It uses past tense appropriately to ask about childhood preferences.

× When I was young I used to eat a lot of sugar and during those days my favorite food was pancake.

✓ When I was young, I used to eat a lot of sugar, and during those days my favorite food was pancakes.

Count noun agreement and gerund: 'pancake' should be plural 'pancakes' when speaking generally. Suggestion: use plural for general preferences and add commas for clarity.

× Apart from that I used to eat jalebi which is kind of funnel cake in Canada.

✓ Apart from that, I used to eat jalebi, which is a kind of funnel cake in Canada.

Missing articles and commas: add commas around the nonrestrictive clause and include 'a' before 'kind'. Suggestion: use commas for clauses and include the indefinite article before singular noun phrase.

× But now I have realized that sugar is not good at all for body so that is why I.

✓ But now I have realized that sugar is not good at all for the body, so that is why I avoid it.

Missing object and article: 'for body' needs the definite article 'the body'; sentence is incomplete—finish the thought with 'I avoid it'. Suggestion: complete verbs and include necessary articles.

× Yeah, I do eat different food during the different weather and different time of year as now we are in winter weather.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year and in different weather; for example, now we are in winter.

Preposition and count issues: use 'eat different foods' (plural) and 'at different times of the year' rather than 'during the different weather' which is awkward. 'In winter' is more natural than 'in winter weather'. Suggestion: use idiomatic prepositional phrases and pluralize when speaking generally.

× I try to eat pini which is made with the dry fruits and chickpeas flour and when I am during the summer period.

✓ I try to eat pini, which is made with dried fruits and chickpea flour, during the summer.

Article and noun form errors: 'the dry fruits' should be 'dried fruits' (no article) and 'chickpeas flour' should be 'chickpea flour' (singular adjective form). 'When I am during the summer period' is awkward—use 'during the summer'. Suggestion: use compound nouns correctly and simplify time expressions.

× Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?

✓ Has your favorite food changed since you were a child?

Sentence is correct; only spelling 'favourite' vs 'favorite' depends on variety (British vs American). Present perfect 'has changed since' is appropriate.

× I think that my favorite food has been changed.

✓ I think that my favorite food has changed.

Incorrect verb voice: 'has been changed' suggests passive (someone changed it) whereas intended meaning is the subject's preference changed—use active present perfect 'has changed'. Suggestion: use active form for intransitive change verbs.

× As I mentioned earlier, I used to eat a lot of sugar during my childhood period, but now I know that sugar is not good for our body and skin.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I used to eat a lot of sugar during my childhood, but now I know that sugar is not good for our body or skin.

Word choice and conjunction: 'childhood period' is wordy—use 'childhood'. Use 'or' instead of 'and' when listing separate effects (body or skin). Suggestion: simplify nouns and use correct coordinating conjunction for clarity.

× So that is why I avoid eating sugar and now I am more focused on protein based food.

✓ So that is why I avoid eating sugar, and now I am more focused on protein-based foods.

Hyphenation and pluralization: 'protein based' should be hyphenated 'protein-based' as a compound adjective, and 'food' should be plural 'foods' when speaking generally. Suggestion: hyphenate compound adjectives and pluralize general nouns.