Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use correct tense and prescriptive phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence ("My favourite food is biryani."), then add one or two specific supporting details (why you like it, flavours or memories) using linking words. Avoid unnecessary phrases like "for my childhood" unless you mean a past period — if you mean now, use present tense.

例: My favourite food is biryani. I love it because of the rich spices and tender rice, and it always reminds me of family celebrations, especially Eid when my mother cooked it.

提案: Answer directly without questioning the examiner. Use past tense for "when you were young" and give a concise topic sentence followed by a specific supporting detail using a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so"). Avoid repetition and grammatical errors ("the most favorite food of mine" → "my favourite food").

例: When I was young, my favourite food was biryani because my family cooked it often for special occasions, so I associated it with happy memories.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific example to illustrate the change. Use linking words such as "for example" or "so" to connect ideas. Avoid vague phrases like "according to the environment"—be concrete about what changes you make and why.

例: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, in winter I eat more soups and stews to stay warm, while in summer I prefer salads and fruits to stay refreshed.

提案: Answer directly with a simple statement and give a clear reason or brief example. Use correct tense and avoid awkward phrasing ("I was a child" is unnecessary if you are comparing past and present — say "when I was a child"). Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect explanation.

例: No, my favourite food has not changed since childhood because I have always enjoyed the flavours of biryani, so I still eat it often at family gatherings.

× My favorite food for my childhood is biryani.

✓ My favorite food in my childhood was biryani.

The student refers to a past time period (childhood) so the past tense should be used. Replace 'is' with 'was' and use 'in my childhood' or 'during my childhood' for natural phrasing.

× I'm still young.

✓ I was young then.

In context the student is responding about being young in the past, so a past tense statement is required. 'I'm still young' contradicts the examiner's question about when they were young; use 'I was young then' to indicate the past.

× What do you mean by that? By the way, the most favorite food of my when I was young or even in childhood was biryani.

✓ What do you mean by that? By the way, my favorite food when I was young, even in childhood, was biryani.

The original sentence has word order and extraneous words that make it ungrammatical ('most favorite' is redundant, 'of my' is incorrect). Use 'my favorite food' (not 'most favorite') and place time phrases ('when I was young', 'in childhood') after the noun. This fixes sentence structure and redundancy.

× Yeah, it depends upon the seasons, like summer or winter.

✓ Yeah, it depends on the season, like summer or winter.

'Depends on' is the usual collocation in this context; 'upon' is also possible but less natural here. Use singular 'season' because 'depends on the season' is the common expression; either 'seasons' can work but singular is more natural with 'depends on'.

× We need to change our food according to the weather, according to the environment.

✓ We need to change what we eat according to the weather and environment.

'Change our food' is awkward; use 'change what we eat' or 'change our diet'. Also avoid repeating 'according to'; combine the ideas with 'and'. This yields a clearer, more natural sentence.

× No I am a die hard biryani lover and I was a child.

✓ No, I am a die-hard biryani lover; I loved it when I was a child.

The student mixes present identity ('I am') with an incorrect phrase 'and I was a child' which doesn't link to the idea properly. Use 'I loved it when I was a child' to express past habitual action, and hyphenate 'die-hard'. Also add punctuation for clarity.

× I used to eat biryani a lot and since now I used to eat biryani a lot.

✓ I used to eat biryani a lot, and I still eat it a lot now.

'Used to' indicates a past habit and should not be combined with 'now'. To express that the habit continues, use 'I still eat it a lot now' or 'I have eaten it a lot since then'. The original repeats the idea and mixes tenses incorrectly; correct by using past for the former habit and present (or present perfect) for the continuing action.