Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting points using linking words. Correct grammar errors (e.g., subject-verb agreement, articles) and finish sentences fully. Avoid repetition and stray fragments.

例: My favourite food is fried chicken because it is quick to prepare and very tasty. In addition, a light coating of flour and egg makes it crispy and flavorful. I usually eat it with rice, which complements the chicken well.

提案: Use correct tenses and clearer sentence structure: state the past preference, give a reason in one or two coherent sentences, and use linking words such as 'because' or 'so'. Fix grammar (e.g., 'I loved chicken', 'my mum', 'she didn't have').

例: When I was young, I loved chicken, especially the fried chicken my mum cooked. She often made it because she worked long hours and needed a quick, reliable meal for the family.

提案: Be more natural and fluent: begin with a direct answer, then explain with specific seasonal examples and linkers ('for example', 'in summer'). Remove fillers and repeat words. Use plural/singular correctly and more precise vocabulary ('dishes' or 'meals').

例: Yes, I do. For example, in summer I prefer light meals like salads and fish, while in winter I enjoy heartier dishes such as stews with beef or pork. Changing meals by season keeps food interesting and suits the weather.

提案: Organize answer: give a clear topic sentence about change, then explain how tastes changed with specific details and a linking word ('because', 'now'). Correct grammar (e.g., 'as an adult', 'I care more about'). Avoid vague phrases.

例: Yes, my tastes have changed since childhood. As an adult, I pay more attention to seasoning and ingredients, so I now prefer dishes with balanced flavors rather than very salty or oily food.

× My favorite food is fried chicken.

✓ My favorite food is fried chicken.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses present simple to state a general preference.

× It is because it's easy to prepare and cook.

✓ This is because it is easy to prepare and cook.

The original sentence fragment 'It is because...' is acceptable in speech but sounds awkward; begin with 'This is because' to clearly refer to the previous statement. Use 'it is' or contraction consistently. Suggestion: use 'This is because it is easy to prepare and cook.' to make the cause explicit.

× If you add some variety or saltiness and crispiness you could add a little bit of flour and egg.

✓ To add variety, saltiness, and crispiness, you could add a little flour and an egg.

Use infinitive 'To add' to express purpose rather than conditional 'If' here; list items need parallel form and commas. Use 'a little flour' (uncountable) and 'an egg' (countable) with appropriate articles.

× It also good partnered with rice which I really love the most.

✓ It also goes well with rice, which I love most.

Missing verb 'goes' required for sentence; 'partnered' is awkward—use 'goes well with'. 'Which I really love the most' is wordy; use 'which I love most.' Ensure clause punctuation.

× I also.

✓ I also do.

Original is a sentence fragment lacking a verb. Add 'do' to complete the idea (e.g., 'I also do' meaning 'I also like it'). Better: 'I also do' or complete thought: 'I also love it.'

× I still love chicken when I was younger, it's my favorite mom.

✓ I still loved chicken when I was younger; it was my mom's specialty.

Tense mismatch: 'still love' (present) conflicts with 'when I was younger' (past). Use past tense 'loved'. Original 'it's my favorite mom' is ungrammatical—probably intended 'it was my mom's (favorite dish)' or 'my mom's specialty.' Clarify meaning and adjust tense.

× It's my favorite food that my mom prepared for us.

✓ It was my favorite food that my mom prepared for us.

Align tense with 'when I was younger'—use past tense 'was.' Otherwise sentence structure is acceptable.

× Maybe because she is working.

✓ Maybe because she was working.

Context refers to the past (when the student was younger), so use past tense 'was working' instead of present 'is working.'

× She was working and she don't she didn't have a lot of time.

✓ She was working and she didn't have a lot of time.

Remove extraneous words 'don't' and use past tense auxiliary 'didn't' with base verb 'have.' Ensure only one negative auxiliary is present.

× That's why she just prefer as a fried chicken when she has her work days.

✓ That's why she just preferred fried chicken on her work days.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'prefer' should be past 'preferred' to match past context. 'Prefer as a fried chicken' is ungrammatical—use 'preferred fried chicken.' Use 'on her work days' for time expression.

× Definitely yes, because if you will eat the same, uh food, it will just taste basic for you to you.

✓ Definitely yes, because if you eat the same food all the time, it will just taste basic to you.

'If you will eat' is incorrect in conditional; use simple present 'if you eat.' Remove filler and duplicate 'to you.' Use 'all the time' for clarity.

× So I have to prepare different variety of foods like pasta, vegetable, fish, chicken, pork and beef with different, uh, different menus.

✓ So I prepare a variety of foods like pasta, vegetables, fish, chicken, pork, and beef with different menus.

Use 'a variety of' not 'different variety.' Make nouns plural where appropriate ('vegetables'). Remove filler 'uh' and avoid repeating 'different.' Use present simple for habitual action: 'I prepare' or 'I like to prepare.'

× Yes, my taste buds though I think I could say it's different from my younger years in compared to now that I'm already adults.

✓ Yes, my taste has changed since my younger years now that I'm an adult.

Sentence is wordy and has tense/number issues. Use 'my taste has changed' (present perfect) to relate past to present. 'I'm already adults' incorrect—use singular 'an adult.' Remove unnecessary phrases like 'though I think I could say' for clarity.

× It changed a lot.

✓ They have changed a lot.

If referring to 'taste buds' (plural), use 'They have changed a lot.' If referring to 'taste' (singular), use 'My taste has changed a lot.' Match subject and tense; present perfect 'have changed' connects past change to present.

× I am more keen about the saltiness and the flavors and ingredients of the foods I am preparing.

✓ I am more concerned about the saltiness, flavors, and ingredients of the foods I prepare.

'Keen about' is unnatural in this context—use 'concerned about' or 'particular about.' Use parallel list with commas and pluralize where appropriate. For habitual action, use present simple 'I prepare.'